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The Way of Jayne, Part 3

Sunday, December 11, 2005

Rambling part (apologies) that furthers the story of Jayne as a teen. This is gonna go somewhere fun, friends, just taking more time getting there than I thought. Lemme hear from you, tell me what you think good and bad, yeah? And my, oh MY! Do I LUURVE the feedbackers out there? Yes, Lawd, yes!

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The Way of Jayne, Part 3

Back home in her cabin, Maeve leaned against the closed front door and rested a second before pushing off into the kitchen. She hauled her bag onto the counter and removed her heavy salary, placing both jars on the counter. Twisting one container of liquid gold in her hand, she made it catch the light through the side kitchen window, smiling at the effect.

Her piebald familiar, Red Dwarf, purrrrruuuup’d softly as she jumped up near the woman’s elbow to get a closer look. Soft head with hard jaw hugged the jar’s lid, saucer eyes the shade of honey closing in joy at mom’s being home.

Deciding to prolong the effect of sunlight through honey jars, Maeve placed the richly glistening Cobb honey on the kitchen window sill, standing still a moment petting RD as the colors swirled and played in the sink.

“Honey from the Cobbs, Dwarflee,” she said to the cat pacing an eight inch counter patch, paws making kitty biscuits at each turn. “If I’d stayed in that shed one minute longer, there’d have been honey aplenty comin’ outta me and him such that can’t be kept in jars.” The cat didn’t care about the content of what Maeve was going on about, just purred louder at the smiling sound of her mistress’ voice.

Staying in the shed with Jayne woulda been something a girl his age would have had full rights to do. But the Cobb family practitioner was old enough to know she had no place there, no place doing what both she and Jayne wanted to do. She had to know what was better for both her and him. That was her job, the job his ma or pa shoulda been aware enough to do, matter of fact. Their falling down in parental duties meant she’d be the one to keep things proper.

Maeve spared a thought for Ma Cobb since pa was surely a lost cause, mated lifelong to drink. She’d barely noticed his wife sleeping peacefully in the living room rocker today when she’d left their house after dosing the babies. The woman looked pretty well zombified, but peaceful. Mayhap she was just worn out with

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Sunday, 11 December 2005 21:17
You ramble well. I particularly like this part:

"Hanging sprigs of leaves and flowers whose natural colors had faded in drying to autumn hues, rustled slightly with the air of her entrance, sound like sibilant voices whispering caution."

You're very good at original characters and detailed, descriptive narrative. It seems easy for you. And I'm a little jealous.

Looking forward to seeing where you're going with this.
Monday, 12 December 2005 18:21
I am really enjoying this. Love Maeve and young Jayne.

Ok no time, intelligent review later.

::waves and dashes::
Wednesday, 14 December 2005 04:43
This is becoming a really fascinating character study. (*snort* I almost typed 'character studly' there, which is a really good desciption of Jayne, don'tcha think?)
Anyhow, keep rambling. I'm really loving this story.
Monday, 19 December 2005 01:54
Good un Itsa, fyi the anony. post on part two is me, didn't realize I wasn't signed in. When I read part one I was a little wary of the age difference but now I'm dying to see what you're going to do with these characters. Very descriptive and great imagery. So beautiful the way you write I go back and read sentences again, just to read em again.
Sunday, 25 December 2005 07:26
If I read correctly..(it is late on x-mas eve..so I may not be sane at the moment) But did someone give birth in here? I read push all you can.. Then a little after, Jayne said "She'll want to hold the babies." Can you help me here? I think Im going mad. LOL (Nothing new.)

And I must say, I love descriptions and Imagery, and you sure make me happy! :)
Wednesday, 04 January 2006 05:44
Hey, Anonymous, you swai Jayne-speaking devil you! Yeah, you, the one who has just finished reading Parts 1 and 2 and may be done with this one just now. How about going to this link and trying this out for size, huh?

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=5555

That's Part 1 of my The Measure of a Jayne. Each part gets progressively more sexified, and I promise satisfaction. Feedmeback, babe, and type "Anon Jayne" at the bottom, neh?

P.S. Your faithful writer (me) is actually a girl, but I don't mind if you call me "sir", lol.
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 19:01
yer a wumin? you go girly!!! just how much am i loving jayne and maeve?

b
Friday, 28 April 2006 01:24
What a hell of a condition to think you have, the 'lectric. Very clever use of electronics, I like it.
Thursday, 25 May 2006 23:26
Maeve's flashback to life with her father, his loss, and how he dealt with it. And then....over-coming his problem so he can enjoy his remaining love a spell.

She didn’t know what a man taking a woman who dressed like a man meant to these mens’ manliness exactly, but what they did with what they had satisfied the hell outta her and them no end. *I don't understand that either...but I laughed at the thought*


“Here, let me help,” from Jayne as he scooted closer to her on the couch. *The young gentleman....me thinks he's got something else stuck in his mind*

*relights pipe* Part 4......
Monday, 07 August 2006 18:02
I like how you're building Maeve's character and how each little moment she returns to the Cobb home she learns a little more about Jayne and grows a bit closer to him.

I think her determination not to take advantage of him is going to falter . . .

Still very well described and very entertaining story about Jayne's early life.

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