Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE
A Little Love on the Prairie
Sunday, August 13, 2006
Sex, gorramit. Tab A into Slot B. One chapter only, no sequel. You no likee, no read, okies? Kaylee and Simon in a wheat field, against a tree, on the ground. Yeah, I did it, but I'm still faithful to Jayne, I swear!
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 4961 RATING: 9.0 (NC17) SERIES: FIREFLY
This bit of porn without plot goes out in thanks to Engine Angel and Leiasky for their tender little Silee-craving hearts. Leia is a new reader of my own goods, and me of hers, though she can only see Kaylee with Simon, and I'm dedicated to getting her and Jayne together, freakin' A! And Engie's brand new first-time ever fic "Carnival", published yesterday, got my juices flowing to take Silee into the rain and into each other. Oh! And Riverismygoddess gets a shout-out for linking me and Leiasky in mutual author-awareness. Please leave feedback, will ya? I don't own these characters, but am thanking Joss for the loan.
A Little Love on the Prairie
Kaylee walked the lonely prairie on Quintessa, her small calloused hands stroking along the heads of golden Alliance wheat, head tilted downward to add sight to what tickled her fingers, making them curl inward.
With two senses filled, she didn't catch the approach of Simon Tam, his long narrow feet consuming the distance between them.
Thunder rolled, kindly aiding the young doctor, masking the patter of his footsteps as he quickened his pace toward the pretty lass with hair the color of rich wet earth. His long slender fingers reached out toward her shoulders, gripping her there before his body came to a halt close behind her. Kaylee jumped in his grasp, muscles tensed tightly in fight-or-flight as she was turned toward him by hands made strong by delicate humanware work.
He towered over her slight form; she barely had time to register it was Simon who had her before his mouth dipped down to claim hers.
She sensed whose mouth was moving hard yet langorously on her own by his scent alone until his growled, "Mmmmm," hit the shells of her ears to tackle her mind, rolling her thoughts down into gorgeous joy at the full realization that her Simon had her at his mercy out in the middle of nowhere. He was holding her tightly, his hands sliding down her upper arms to her elbows, his arms doing all the maneuvering since she couldn't bend her own tow
Comments
Sunday, 13 August 2006 19:57
"His breath came hard in his lungs, but not from exertion. It was due to the tightness in the fork of his expensive trousers not having been designed for a man's anatomy to come upon such beauty as he cozened in his grasp, such loveliness as he planned to disrobe and have his way with, soon as he could manage it."
Your writing has such a pretty, old-fashioned feel to it! It's very sensual. lovely~
Your writing has such a pretty, old-fashioned feel to it! It's very sensual. lovely~
Sunday, 13 August 2006 21:29
If you could only see me gaping at my screen as I read this.
This, from YOU?!? Washie? I never thought I'd see the day!
Your writing has such a poetic and beautiful feel to it that makes it such a pleasure to read.
Combine that wonderful writing with wet S/K smut, well, I can't think of anything better than that to read!
>So I was tempted, VERY tempted, to have this end on Kaylee waking up in Jayne's arms, herself feeling guilty at realizing she'd just been unfaithful to our Jayne in a dream.
In a dream would at least be believable.
If she's dreaming of Simon while in Jayne's arms . . . hmm, the man-ape obviously isn't doing it for her :P
>Did I ruin it just now by saying that?
Not for me, but you no doubt just pleased all the Jaylee fans by writing that.
This, from YOU?!? Washie? I never thought I'd see the day!
Your writing has such a poetic and beautiful feel to it that makes it such a pleasure to read.
Combine that wonderful writing with wet S/K smut, well, I can't think of anything better than that to read!
>So I was tempted, VERY tempted, to have this end on Kaylee waking up in Jayne's arms, herself feeling guilty at realizing she'd just been unfaithful to our Jayne in a dream.
In a dream would at least be believable.
If she's dreaming of Simon while in Jayne's arms . . . hmm, the man-ape obviously isn't doing it for her :P
>Did I ruin it just now by saying that?
Not for me, but you no doubt just pleased all the Jaylee fans by writing that.
Sunday, 13 August 2006 22:21
Squeeeeeeeeeee!!!!! Mei mei, ya published it!!! *huggles you tight* Ooo can't wait to read it. From the little bit you showed me earlier I'm sure it's going to be shiny shiny!! Kk reading now!!!
"hair the color of rich wet earth" ~~ achot, I told you I loved this description before and I just have to repeat it again because...it's just beautiful and perfect to decribe kaylee's hair AND kaylee herself. It just fits so well.
"She sensed whose mouth was moving hard yet langorously on her own by his scent alone until his growled, "Mmmmm," hit the shells of her ears to tackle her mind, rolling her thoughts down into gorgeous joy at the full realization that her Simon had her at his mercy out in the middle of nowhere." ~~ *shivers* Ooo, again washie, LOVE this.
"He kept them sealed together, the rosebud of her lips mobile and seeking out the texture and taste of his own. Kaylee's voice gave him sounds of pleasure that reverberated through the man, sliding fingers of sensation down his spinal column, straightening his back causing him to arch into into the softness of the woman's middle." ~~ *squees again!!* mei mei...WONDERFUL line. I can FEEL her voice "reverberating" through Simon (GREAT word btw). Oh and I love "the rosebud of her lips"...you write so beautifully!!! The way you make your readers feel what the characters feel...it's amazing. Also, since Kaylee is often ruled through her senses, it works so well!!
"The sky instantly grayed overhead, clouds clotting and gathering like cream whipped to a frenzy by a jealous god." ~~ this line...god this line...wonderful description. Between that and the thunder, I can picture the scene so perfectly.
""Dui niu tan qin," Simon gasped once the feel of the pounding storm had begun to penetrate the fog of Kaylee goodness he was shrouded in. "We'd better find some shelter, Darling, maybe under that big tree on the hill over..."" ~~ I like the "cloud of kaylee goodness" line, but I'm not so sure Simon would call kaylee darling.
"He no longer felt the rain." ~~ oooo *shivers again*
"Her face stayed turned up to his like a bright sunflower to the blessed thirst-relieving rain. Her Simon-thoughts were written all over her pretty face. Thoughts of what was to come from him to her and back again flitting across her like so many butterflies on a shallow pool." ~~ Aww! wonderful lines. So glad you used the butterfly thing.
"Her leg cocked at the knee, snuck in behind Simon to place a rounded heel into his thigh. Her neck arched sweetly, head tilting, mouth moving, playing, lips and tongue pure loving torture to the man she held with remaining arm around his own neck. She pressed her wet shirted breasts into him and he could take no more." ~~ DAY-um! is it getting hot in here? Again with the great writing talent.
"Simon broke away, ten fingers sliding under her shirt to cup her breasts that were clearly visible through the soaked cotton." ~~ I like how you said "ten fingers" instead of "his hands" or something.
"The heat of him against the gothic arch at the top of her cleft riveted the attention of them both, two sets of eyes looking downward where his crown disappeared into the southern curls that matched her lovely head of hair" ~~ nice, gothic arch, riveted, all sorts of shiny words ;)
""Kaylee, I don't know how long I'm gonna be able to make this last, forgive me, neh? And let me, because I swear I can't help it, not now, need you so much, bao bei."" ~~ IMO, I don't think Simon would say "neh". I think his characterization might be a tad off in this fic (but still soooo sexy). Kaylee's characterization is SO spot on however! You've got her down to a tee, which makes your words that much better :)
...ALL of the sex, damn good!
"'Don't move a muscle, Simon, especially not that one,' he smiled ruefully at the self-talk." ~~ LOLOL.
"They held each other close, breath mingling in puffs of cloudy vapor as the leaves above them occasionally tilted to send driplet
"hair the color of rich wet earth" ~~ achot, I told you I loved this description before and I just have to repeat it again because...it's just beautiful and perfect to decribe kaylee's hair AND kaylee herself. It just fits so well.
"She sensed whose mouth was moving hard yet langorously on her own by his scent alone until his growled, "Mmmmm," hit the shells of her ears to tackle her mind, rolling her thoughts down into gorgeous joy at the full realization that her Simon had her at his mercy out in the middle of nowhere." ~~ *shivers* Ooo, again washie, LOVE this.
"He kept them sealed together, the rosebud of her lips mobile and seeking out the texture and taste of his own. Kaylee's voice gave him sounds of pleasure that reverberated through the man, sliding fingers of sensation down his spinal column, straightening his back causing him to arch into into the softness of the woman's middle." ~~ *squees again!!* mei mei...WONDERFUL line. I can FEEL her voice "reverberating" through Simon (GREAT word btw). Oh and I love "the rosebud of her lips"...you write so beautifully!!! The way you make your readers feel what the characters feel...it's amazing. Also, since Kaylee is often ruled through her senses, it works so well!!
"The sky instantly grayed overhead, clouds clotting and gathering like cream whipped to a frenzy by a jealous god." ~~ this line...god this line...wonderful description. Between that and the thunder, I can picture the scene so perfectly.
""Dui niu tan qin," Simon gasped once the feel of the pounding storm had begun to penetrate the fog of Kaylee goodness he was shrouded in. "We'd better find some shelter, Darling, maybe under that big tree on the hill over..."" ~~ I like the "cloud of kaylee goodness" line, but I'm not so sure Simon would call kaylee darling.
"He no longer felt the rain." ~~ oooo *shivers again*
"Her face stayed turned up to his like a bright sunflower to the blessed thirst-relieving rain. Her Simon-thoughts were written all over her pretty face. Thoughts of what was to come from him to her and back again flitting across her like so many butterflies on a shallow pool." ~~ Aww! wonderful lines. So glad you used the butterfly thing.
"Her leg cocked at the knee, snuck in behind Simon to place a rounded heel into his thigh. Her neck arched sweetly, head tilting, mouth moving, playing, lips and tongue pure loving torture to the man she held with remaining arm around his own neck. She pressed her wet shirted breasts into him and he could take no more." ~~ DAY-um! is it getting hot in here? Again with the great writing talent.
"Simon broke away, ten fingers sliding under her shirt to cup her breasts that were clearly visible through the soaked cotton." ~~ I like how you said "ten fingers" instead of "his hands" or something.
"The heat of him against the gothic arch at the top of her cleft riveted the attention of them both, two sets of eyes looking downward where his crown disappeared into the southern curls that matched her lovely head of hair" ~~ nice, gothic arch, riveted, all sorts of shiny words ;)
""Kaylee, I don't know how long I'm gonna be able to make this last, forgive me, neh? And let me, because I swear I can't help it, not now, need you so much, bao bei."" ~~ IMO, I don't think Simon would say "neh". I think his characterization might be a tad off in this fic (but still soooo sexy). Kaylee's characterization is SO spot on however! You've got her down to a tee, which makes your words that much better :)
...ALL of the sex, damn good!
"'Don't move a muscle, Simon, especially not that one,' he smiled ruefully at the self-talk." ~~ LOLOL.
"They held each other close, breath mingling in puffs of cloudy vapor as the leaves above them occasionally tilted to send driplet
Monday, 14 August 2006 02:41
Alright Washie....as usual, you nailed this one spot on. It was wonderful as always. Its what you do, and how you write. I have to admit, when I first saw it was a Silee, I was astonied...yes astonied. But it was wonderful!
So...lemme get on to the fic.
Kaylee walked the lonely prairie on Quintessa, her small calloused hands stroking along the heads of golden Alliance wheat, head tilted downward to add sight to what tickled her fingers, making them curl inward. *you set this scene up so well with this. I knew exactly where they were, and could focus on the "action". BTW, as you do with so much of your writing, the "action" is still with me, burned into my mind...and I love it!
"Dui niu tan qin," Simon gasped once the feel of the pounding storm had begun to penetrate the fog of Kaylee goodness he was shrouded in. "We'd better find some shelter, Darling, maybe under that big tree on the hill over..." *This is so very much Simon, on the verge of taking a "risky" step, then opting for the "safe" path. Poor Guy.
"Yes. That is, if you're up to it?" *Uh huh, like it would've mattered at this point anyway.
Now....I don't want to disappoint, but you won't get a "squeee" from me on this fic. However, in total honor of the Washie Awesomeness that just flows through this fic, I offer you this...
I am pouring myself a double of "the captain", then I am going to stand in front of the mirror and give it my best attempt.
Here goes......
Well, that came out more like a "squaaa" but hey, its for you, and what you do!
Jaylee, Silee....I'll read em' all if'n you're the one writin. Heck...if you wrote Jimon...I'd read it. (I confess, I'd need a few more shots of "the captain though...does that seem right to you?)
Your picture and scene painting abilities are so perfect, you put the image in the readers mind, and in my case, I'll carry this one for a long time.
I love your writing, short, long, multi-chapter, whatever. Keep it coming.
Need more of you, ya know?
So...lemme get on to the fic.
Kaylee walked the lonely prairie on Quintessa, her small calloused hands stroking along the heads of golden Alliance wheat, head tilted downward to add sight to what tickled her fingers, making them curl inward. *you set this scene up so well with this. I knew exactly where they were, and could focus on the "action". BTW, as you do with so much of your writing, the "action" is still with me, burned into my mind...and I love it!
"Dui niu tan qin," Simon gasped once the feel of the pounding storm had begun to penetrate the fog of Kaylee goodness he was shrouded in. "We'd better find some shelter, Darling, maybe under that big tree on the hill over..." *This is so very much Simon, on the verge of taking a "risky" step, then opting for the "safe" path. Poor Guy.
"Yes. That is, if you're up to it?" *Uh huh, like it would've mattered at this point anyway.
Now....I don't want to disappoint, but you won't get a "squeee" from me on this fic. However, in total honor of the Washie Awesomeness that just flows through this fic, I offer you this...
I am pouring myself a double of "the captain", then I am going to stand in front of the mirror and give it my best attempt.
Here goes......
Well, that came out more like a "squaaa" but hey, its for you, and what you do!
Jaylee, Silee....I'll read em' all if'n you're the one writin. Heck...if you wrote Jimon...I'd read it. (I confess, I'd need a few more shots of "the captain though...does that seem right to you?)
Your picture and scene painting abilities are so perfect, you put the image in the readers mind, and in my case, I'll carry this one for a long time.
I love your writing, short, long, multi-chapter, whatever. Keep it coming.
Need more of you, ya know?
Monday, 14 August 2006 02:42
Alright Washie....as usual, you nailed this one spot on. It was wonderful as always. Its what you do, and how you write. I have to admit, when I first saw it was a Silee, I was astonied...yes astonied. But it was wonderful!
So...lemme get on to the fic.
Kaylee walked the lonely prairie on Quintessa, her small calloused hands stroking along the heads of golden Alliance wheat, head tilted downward to add sight to what tickled her fingers, making them curl inward. *you set this scene up so well with this. I knew exactly where they were, and could focus on the "action". BTW, as you do with so much of your writing, the "action" is still with me, burned into my mind...and I love it!
"Dui niu tan qin," Simon gasped once the feel of the pounding storm had begun to penetrate the fog of Kaylee goodness he was shrouded in. "We'd better find some shelter, Darling, maybe under that big tree on the hill over..." *This is so very much Simon, on the verge of taking a "risky" step, then opting for the "safe" path. Poor Guy.
"Yes. That is, if you're up to it?" *Uh huh, like it would've mattered at this point anyway.
Now....I don't want to disappoint, but you won't get a "squeee" from me on this fic. However, in total honor of the Washie Awesomeness that just flows through this fic, I offer you this...
I am pouring myself a double of "the captain", then I am going to stand in front of the mirror and give it my best attempt.
Here goes......
Well, that came out more like a "squaaa" but hey, its for you, and what you do!
Jaylee, Silee....I'll read em' all if'n you're the one writin. Heck...if you wrote Jimon...I'd read it. (I confess, I'd need a few more shots of "the captain though...does that seem right to you?)
Your picture and scene painting abilities are so perfect, you put the image in the readers mind, and in my case, I'll carry this one for a long time.
I love your writing, short, long, multi-chapter, whatever. Keep it coming.
Need more of you, ya know?
So...lemme get on to the fic.
Kaylee walked the lonely prairie on Quintessa, her small calloused hands stroking along the heads of golden Alliance wheat, head tilted downward to add sight to what tickled her fingers, making them curl inward. *you set this scene up so well with this. I knew exactly where they were, and could focus on the "action". BTW, as you do with so much of your writing, the "action" is still with me, burned into my mind...and I love it!
"Dui niu tan qin," Simon gasped once the feel of the pounding storm had begun to penetrate the fog of Kaylee goodness he was shrouded in. "We'd better find some shelter, Darling, maybe under that big tree on the hill over..." *This is so very much Simon, on the verge of taking a "risky" step, then opting for the "safe" path. Poor Guy.
"Yes. That is, if you're up to it?" *Uh huh, like it would've mattered at this point anyway.
Now....I don't want to disappoint, but you won't get a "squeee" from me on this fic. However, in total honor of the Washie Awesomeness that just flows through this fic, I offer you this...
I am pouring myself a double of "the captain", then I am going to stand in front of the mirror and give it my best attempt.
Here goes......
Well, that came out more like a "squaaa" but hey, its for you, and what you do!
Jaylee, Silee....I'll read em' all if'n you're the one writin. Heck...if you wrote Jimon...I'd read it. (I confess, I'd need a few more shots of "the captain though...does that seem right to you?)
Your picture and scene painting abilities are so perfect, you put the image in the readers mind, and in my case, I'll carry this one for a long time.
I love your writing, short, long, multi-chapter, whatever. Keep it coming.
Need more of you, ya know?
Monday, 14 August 2006 14:30
Oh, how the mighty have fallen. Might as well start watching American Idol and listening to <insert pop singer here>. At the very least you need to get Leiasky to write a Jaylee piece as payback.
I love the wheat field, the rain, and the massive tree. Good imagery.
GUH @ sex against the tree.
Whole lotta cumming going on here.
Okay. So I was tempted, VERY tempted, to have this end on Kaylee waking up in Jayne's arms, herself feeling guilty at realizing she'd just been unfaithful to our Jayne in a dream.
~You should have. Would have beed ruttin' perfect.
I'd appreciate a line or two. It's so easy, you can even do it anonymously, just type and run.
~Nope, they took away anonymous comments a while ago.
Maybe Tessa will read this and make her usual inane comments that she makes about all Silee smut.
I love the wheat field, the rain, and the massive tree. Good imagery.
GUH @ sex against the tree.
Whole lotta cumming going on here.
Okay. So I was tempted, VERY tempted, to have this end on Kaylee waking up in Jayne's arms, herself feeling guilty at realizing she'd just been unfaithful to our Jayne in a dream.
~You should have. Would have beed ruttin' perfect.
I'd appreciate a line or two. It's so easy, you can even do it anonymously, just type and run.
~Nope, they took away anonymous comments a while ago.
Maybe Tessa will read this and make her usual inane comments that she makes about all Silee smut.
Tuesday, 15 August 2006 03:25
Sweet Jesus......you wrote Silee....and it was friggin' brilliant, Washie!
:O
Holy Hell was this ever hot stuff...you definitely can do pairings against personal shipping choices and I admire you all the more for it;)
And don't take this the wrong way, but....you definitely channelled some Harelquin vibe here. Definite "his manly length pressed into her moist warmth" kind of imagination-intensive proses:D
BEB
:O
Holy Hell was this ever hot stuff...you definitely can do pairings against personal shipping choices and I admire you all the more for it;)
And don't take this the wrong way, but....you definitely channelled some Harelquin vibe here. Definite "his manly length pressed into her moist warmth" kind of imagination-intensive proses:D
BEB
Tuesday, 15 August 2006 23:49
>At the very least you need to get Leiasky to write a Jaylee piece as payback.
Yeah, yeah, yeah. You know what my initial response to that was, don't you?
When HELL freezes over.
Of course, then I realized you were right. I DO owe Washie.
And I made good. Wrote a little piece and sent it to her.
Not at all sure if it'll ever be posted anywhere though.
Yeah, yeah, yeah. You know what my initial response to that was, don't you?
When HELL freezes over.
Of course, then I realized you were right. I DO owe Washie.
And I made good. Wrote a little piece and sent it to her.
Not at all sure if it'll ever be posted anywhere though.
Wednesday, 16 August 2006 01:33
Leia, you need to POST that Jayne/Kaylee ficlet, Babe. I told ya, it ROCKS so hard and it deserves to get out there and breathe the air in the Blue Sun Room. Please? Pretty please? With some Simon/Kaylee on top? (Oh I do so hope you'll be brave and fearless and post it.) Legions of Jaylee fans await your greatness.
Saturday, 26 August 2006 20:14
Holy gorram HOTNESS, girl!
I'm totally in shock over you writing Silee, and awestruck over just how shiny it is! May very well be the hottest thing you've ever written...
The descrioptions, the lanquage...I need to go read it again. And again.
I'm totally in shock over you writing Silee, and awestruck over just how shiny it is! May very well be the hottest thing you've ever written...
The descrioptions, the lanquage...I need to go read it again. And again.
Thursday, 26 October 2006 05:35
Oh...my...GOD... I just don't think I have any other words for it. I usually like to say a little more, but I'm at a little loss for words... in a VERY good way. That was incredible! So well written.
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