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Pieces: Ch 26-34.

Wednesday, December 7, 2005

Sometimes pieces fit, sometimes they don't and sometimes they can't be put back together. Third installment for the Joss_100. Jayne and Kaylee.

CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3406 RATING: 9.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY

The third installment.

Comments: This starts out light and fluffy (and rated for parental guidance, kiddies, be warned, there's naughtiness ahead), but quickly degenerates into a big ball of BADNESS. I'm warning you now. Don't say you weren't told.

It wasn't me, in my defense, I have to say THE PROMPTS MADE ME DO IT!!! The prompts, not me. The prompts. Are we clear?

Disclaimer: Not mine. They all belong to people a lot richer, prettier and more successful than me.

Feedback: please comment, don't make me beg, or send me feedback: wily_one24@yahoo.com.au

Quick Links:

--> The first installment, ch 1-11 can be found

--> The second installment, ch 12-25 can be found .

--> Prompt set 2, the whole prompt table can be found

"Why are we here again?"

"Because there ain't nothin' to do, Captain." Kaylee said to the room. "And because River wanted all of us here."

"But why do all the lights have to be off?" His voice was almost a whine.

"Increases the possibility of hiding and challenges the seeker to a greater level."

"Is she kiddin'?" Jayne growled from somewhere off the left and Kaylee smiled even as she tried to see him. "She wants us to play hide and seek?"

"Mei mei, I don't think... Ow. Did you just poke me?"

"Play nice, Simon."

"Yeah Simon." Mal's voice teased. "Play nice."

"Mal?" Inara's voice sounded amused. "Why don't you play nice?"

"Sir? Who's steering the ship?"

"Autopilot and the tyrannosaurus rex." River's voice supplied seriously. "There are no perceivable structures in our vicinity for at least an hour."

"You had to ask, didn't you, Zoe?"

"Okay." Kaylee clapped her hands and her voice echoed off the walls of the cargo bay. "Rules are as follo

Comments

RINNYPJ

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 04:51

*giggles*

That's his shirt!!!!! I want it!

I like how River and Kaylee found a way to deal with their scars. Beautiful and haunting.

CUB

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 06:49

I gotta say, I love silly Jacqui. Part 26 (FOUND) was one of the most entertaining things I've ever read on this site, and it would have been a great little vignette fic even on its own.

The dark, tormented stuff was incredibly well-written and packed with character insight. But... what can I say? I love silly Jacqui.

Also - I'm not sure I get the whole regimented, Joss 100/prompt/word-count thing, but it looks ambitious enough that I marvel at the sheer scope of what you're doing.

CANTONHEROINE

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 09:00

This just keeps getting better and better: veering from light to dark, and touching on all the shades in between without a single character line going astray.

I especially liked River mentioning the Tyrannosaurus Rex flying the ship, and then her hiding out with Jayne and Kaylee. When she spoke up in the middle of all that sexy tension, it just about killed me.

Also, "That's my shirt!" Classic Jayne one-liner. ;P

You're so very good at this. And it's got to be hard to maintain momentum, but keep flying. I'm holding out for the whole 100.

BOOKADDICT

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 13:20

This is wonderful. All the characters sound real. I love the tyrannosaurus sharing the flying with the autopilot.

LVS2READ

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 16:51

These are marvelous! You do an awesome job capturing each characters voice and motivation. I especially like #27: "I'm sorry." Simon's voice kept pace with them. "You wanted me to stop her hiding during a game of hide and seek?"

Not sure I could write to prompts. More power to you! You go girl! Looking forward to the next set.

"I love my captain."

ITSAWASH

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 20:02

Nobody does this better. Ebb and flow and humor and sex and fear all making a stew that fills us up but leaves us wanting more.

Fave line: "He was hard in all the right places." but that alone wouldn't make me a Jacqui addict. It's the frame and backdrop for Jayne and the rest that makes me wish each of your fics'd never end. Loved the Kaylee & Jayne kid flashbacks. Lovely.

The ending, with our 2 girls so cleverly ritually ending their combined fears, and strong swai Jayne showing up and doing the honors (his poor shirt, lol). Sigh. All my thoughts are gone, lost in your fic.

Need more. Please write more.

ANONYMOUS

Wednesday, 07 December 2005 20:18

Wow. I mean it... wow. The last two scenes with River and the washing and the very end were just... wow. Looking forward to more.

ANONYMOUS

Thursday, 08 December 2005 01:00

hmmmmmmmmmmm, i don't know exactly what to say...i hate to break it to you but ... this was GREAT!!!! lol got ya for a sec, huh? amazing! loved the beginning with the Jaylee and loved the symbols at the end. AND hide and seek! lol! keep up the good work!

sincerly...um ... ME

Pieces: Ch 26-34.

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