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Something From Nothing 12/12.
Saturday, April 8, 2006
FINAL in the series. Kaylee Frye is out of time.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 4674 RATING: 10.0 (PG) SERIES: FIREFLY
Yup. That's it. And really, this time I mean it. THE END. It's over. No sequels. There's nothing more to say. Answers abound.
Rating PG.
Disclaimer: I only want one of 'em, Joss can have the rest.
Feedback: Oh, please. Really, it's the final chapter, you have to tell me what you think! Comment here or email: wily_one24@yahoo.com.au
Comments: I know there is no way in the world that I could possibly satisfy everyone with the ending of this. I hope this suffices.
THANK YOU to everyone for being so positive and encouraging me along the way, with comments and emails and pictures and everything else, you guys rock.
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Previous Chapters :
, , , , , , , , , and . *** Chapter Twelve: *** Jayne let one hand come up and cover the tiny ones that clung to his neck. It felt good, the weight on his back, the little knees that dug into his ribs. There was something just right about it. He brought his other hand up behind him to adjust James. "We just about finished?" Mal panted. "Winning Ball!" James cheered. Jayne chanced a look up to the catwalk, he'd been keeping a stray eye on Kaylee and Inara all through the game. They'd both looked pretty serious, talking quietly between themselves, but h
Comments
Saturday, 08 April 2006 13:20
Beautiful ending.
I'm glad the bad guy got his, though I didn't expect it to be Geoffrey.
I love Zoe leaving Wash with the James! lol.
"He held his breath and waited for her to pull away.
She didn't."
Perfect.
I'm glad the bad guy got his, though I didn't expect it to be Geoffrey.
I love Zoe leaving Wash with the James! lol.
"He held his breath and waited for her to pull away.
She didn't."
Perfect.
Saturday, 08 April 2006 13:52
So, I had to slow down as I was reading toward the end on account of the tears streaming down my face. What a beautiful ending. I think it's incredibly well written, and you DID cover everything. It was beautiful. I can't get that word out of my head. Thank you, thank you, thank you for such a moving series.
I guess, in theory, you could go on and on with each little story line but I like the idea of ending where you did. Everything is tied up and the reader can easily see what happens next for everyone. Better to leave the party at the peak then to stay too late. That is what makes you the genius you are.
Looking forward to your other fics.
I guess, in theory, you could go on and on with each little story line but I like the idea of ending where you did. Everything is tied up and the reader can easily see what happens next for everyone. Better to leave the party at the peak then to stay too late. That is what makes you the genius you are.
Looking forward to your other fics.
Saturday, 08 April 2006 14:16
Beautifully wrapped up.
Made me cry a little at the end.
Thank you Jacqui.
Made me cry a little at the end.
Thank you Jacqui.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 08 April 2006 14:42
It's over...
*sob*
What am I going to look forward to now?!
*sob*
What am I going to look forward to now?!
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 08 April 2006 16:35
Good Job!!
That story made me cry and be happy at the same time!!
That story made me cry and be happy at the same time!!
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 08 April 2006 17:52
wow
Saturday, 08 April 2006 18:09
Incredibly good finish. I loved all of it. Inara was great, Jayne was wonderful, and poor Geoffrey! Geez, Wash, River and Simon were great too.
This was a perfect way to end it. Everything was answered, and you even gave River a hint of angst! Poor kid, and no one is worrying about her. You have an entire new story line there, if you wanted one.
I've said it before, and I'm sure I'll say it again - you have a wonderful talent. You're easily good enough to make money with your writing. Thanks for a wonderful story, and please keep writing these for us!
This was a perfect way to end it. Everything was answered, and you even gave River a hint of angst! Poor kid, and no one is worrying about her. You have an entire new story line there, if you wanted one.
I've said it before, and I'm sure I'll say it again - you have a wonderful talent. You're easily good enough to make money with your writing. Thanks for a wonderful story, and please keep writing these for us!
Saturday, 08 April 2006 19:59
While it's not the "Jayne lays waste to all who have wronged Kaylee" some people might have wanted....it was the right one for the story. All the props in the world to you, Jacqui:)
I really loved how you had the characters react, especially Kaylee in both her conversation with Inara and her actions back on her home planet.
I could imagine something like this happening to Kaylee if the show had gone on long enough...was already going there in the episodes we got and the BDM: Kaylee's sunshine getting tempered with something more dark and hard, something that would make the sunshine seem even more powerful when it came out.
And Geoffrey dealing with the mystery creep...right kind of decision. Kaylee doing it would have been a somewhat cathartic way of having it play out, but really....she would have gone over the raggedy edge and the woman Kaylee is/should be would have gotten lost. Jayne doing it would be cool...if you were doing the Hollywood cliche for revenge stories...which this wasn't.
I bow to your obvious skills and eagerly await whatever your next project is:)
BEB
I really loved how you had the characters react, especially Kaylee in both her conversation with Inara and her actions back on her home planet.
I could imagine something like this happening to Kaylee if the show had gone on long enough...was already going there in the episodes we got and the BDM: Kaylee's sunshine getting tempered with something more dark and hard, something that would make the sunshine seem even more powerful when it came out.
And Geoffrey dealing with the mystery creep...right kind of decision. Kaylee doing it would have been a somewhat cathartic way of having it play out, but really....she would have gone over the raggedy edge and the woman Kaylee is/should be would have gotten lost. Jayne doing it would be cool...if you were doing the Hollywood cliche for revenge stories...which this wasn't.
I bow to your obvious skills and eagerly await whatever your next project is:)
BEB
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 08 April 2006 22:10
This was absolutely perfect! Could I read more? Sure! But the ending had everything it needed to have. And I can imagine the future for this Jayne and Kaylee (and little James). The touch with River was wonderful.
All through this series I've been trying to find a way to put into words what it is I love so much about your Jayne and Kaylee (in all your fics, but particularly this one). It's a powerful combination of the realness of the characters/situations you create (they experience good, bad, ugly, beautiful moments/emotions--just like real life). It's also the fact that your Jayne and Kaylee are adults. I know that last part sounds weird, but a lot of fics out there portray these two particularly as overgrown kids. But you cut through all that and I especially like that you have created such a strong, independent Kaylee. Joss would be proud.
You've set the bar for Jaylee fics and really for FF fics in general. (Something that's a little intimidating as I am attempting to write my first fic, but it's okay, because I have a goal: if it's half as good as Jacqui's I'll be happy.)
p.s. Did you realize that you have collectively named Jayne & Kaylee's children in two of your fics "Jessie James"? I get an odd little giggle out of that because Jesse James was an American outlaw from the 'wild west'. Seems fitting for Jayne and Firefly. (okay so I'm a little strange).
Sorry to rattle on, but Thank You for writing this beautiful series!
-squish
All through this series I've been trying to find a way to put into words what it is I love so much about your Jayne and Kaylee (in all your fics, but particularly this one). It's a powerful combination of the realness of the characters/situations you create (they experience good, bad, ugly, beautiful moments/emotions--just like real life). It's also the fact that your Jayne and Kaylee are adults. I know that last part sounds weird, but a lot of fics out there portray these two particularly as overgrown kids. But you cut through all that and I especially like that you have created such a strong, independent Kaylee. Joss would be proud.
You've set the bar for Jaylee fics and really for FF fics in general. (Something that's a little intimidating as I am attempting to write my first fic, but it's okay, because I have a goal: if it's half as good as Jacqui's I'll be happy.)
p.s. Did you realize that you have collectively named Jayne & Kaylee's children in two of your fics "Jessie James"? I get an odd little giggle out of that because Jesse James was an American outlaw from the 'wild west'. Seems fitting for Jayne and Firefly. (okay so I'm a little strange).
Sorry to rattle on, but Thank You for writing this beautiful series!
-squish
Saturday, 08 April 2006 23:16
Friend, teacher, beta, and remarkable writer - you have gifted us with a powerful journey between two rich and complex individuals.
Love, hate, confusion, fear, shame, self-judgement, rage, revulsion, creativity, love and ultimately, Redemption. Isn't
that exactly what Joss always said "Firefly" was ultimately about?
I once commented to you that a great artist is one who is able to create works which deeply and profoundly touch the souls of others. You have this gift, which you have shared so generously with all of us, and I, for one, will forever see the world around me and those I love in a new way because of your work.
Love, hate, confusion, fear, shame, self-judgement, rage, revulsion, creativity, love and ultimately, Redemption. Isn't
that exactly what Joss always said "Firefly" was ultimately about?
I once commented to you that a great artist is one who is able to create works which deeply and profoundly touch the souls of others. You have this gift, which you have shared so generously with all of us, and I, for one, will forever see the world around me and those I love in a new way because of your work.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 April 2006 00:18
I refuse to accept that this is the ending. *pouts*
I want reconcilation/rediscovery smut dang it!
I want reconcilation/rediscovery smut dang it!
Sunday, 09 April 2006 01:02
*with tears in eyes*
sigh, wonderful, just wonderful
*fingers crossed* hoping for one or two more set a little further in the future to see how family Cobb is doing?
the only upside to this end is that I can now go back to my own life (my kids will be so happy!)
sigh, wonderful, just wonderful
*fingers crossed* hoping for one or two more set a little further in the future to see how family Cobb is doing?
the only upside to this end is that I can now go back to my own life (my kids will be so happy!)
Sunday, 09 April 2006 01:08
Does this mean you'll be going back to "Deceptions"?
*jumps for joy*
wow, that would be an incredible change of pace from this series!
*jumps for joy*
wow, that would be an incredible change of pace from this series!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 April 2006 01:20
it's a great ending. i like the others, didn't think it would have been the kid to do it, but, in a way, it's as it should be, and i'm glad that things with jayne and kaylee worked out as they should.
another great story from you. thank you
another great story from you. thank you
Sunday, 09 April 2006 03:13
Everyone else has already said what I wanted to say, and better. But this has got to be one of the best fics I've read in any 'verse, and the ending was simply wonderful.
That one line about River and Zeph just about broke me, by the way, because I'd just dismissed him in my head as the guy who didn't quite fill Kaylee's shoes. I never thought to picture how he fit with the rest of the crew.
Mal and Inara. *sigh*
Wash and Zoe. *giggle*
Jayne and Kaylee... perfection.
That one line about River and Zeph just about broke me, by the way, because I'd just dismissed him in my head as the guy who didn't quite fill Kaylee's shoes. I never thought to picture how he fit with the rest of the crew.
Mal and Inara. *sigh*
Wash and Zoe. *giggle*
Jayne and Kaylee... perfection.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 April 2006 13:10
I'm really sad the story's over...but you ended it so beautifully...
I can really see Geoffrey doing it, killing that heartless bastard, for Becca, for Kaylee and James.
I guess it's right this way.
I just wonder why Kaylee couldn't just tell Jayne the hun dan was dead.
I understand she couldn't tell him about him trying to rape her, but she could just tell Jayne that she knew for sure he was dead and gone and had what he deserved.
Anyway it's so good to know that Jayne and Kaylee are going to be together and the scene between Zoe, Wash and James was so tender and funny.
Wash, you made it!
I just wish you could write another little chapter...just to let us see Jayne, Kaylee and James in the future.
Just to let us see they are really ok and happy.
Anyway Thanks Jacqui.
Thanks for your stories, hope to read more and more of them in the future.
(Waiting, too to see the crew's reaction in "the Best Deception"!)
I can really see Geoffrey doing it, killing that heartless bastard, for Becca, for Kaylee and James.
I guess it's right this way.
I just wonder why Kaylee couldn't just tell Jayne the hun dan was dead.
I understand she couldn't tell him about him trying to rape her, but she could just tell Jayne that she knew for sure he was dead and gone and had what he deserved.
Anyway it's so good to know that Jayne and Kaylee are going to be together and the scene between Zoe, Wash and James was so tender and funny.
Wash, you made it!
I just wish you could write another little chapter...just to let us see Jayne, Kaylee and James in the future.
Just to let us see they are really ok and happy.
Anyway Thanks Jacqui.
Thanks for your stories, hope to read more and more of them in the future.
(Waiting, too to see the crew's reaction in "the Best Deception"!)
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 April 2006 17:17
An even dozen! Beautifully done.
I'm with BanzaiBill: You're easily good enough to make money with your writing.
- Vivian
I'm with BanzaiBill: You're easily good enough to make money with your writing.
- Vivian
Monday, 10 April 2006 05:48
Sorry, the second to last anonymous was me...forgot to log-in!
Anonymous (80.117.36.57) Sunday, April 09, 2006 - 03:10
Anonymous (80.117.36.57) Sunday, April 09, 2006 - 03:10
Tuesday, 11 April 2006 13:49
Beautifully done. I can't say that I'm sorry that you have brought the series to it conclusion. You have torn me up with these stories, the emotional heights and depths. Thank you for expanding my understanding of two complex characters and the 'verse they live in.
DARKANGELLOVESFIREFLY
Monday, 17 April 2006 02:28
You know this is not the first time you have made me cry and I don't do that very often.
You ended this perfectly not too much not too little.You gave us what we needed and left the rest up to our own innaginations.
Thank you!
I have thoroughly enjoyed EVERYTHING that you have written but this series was soo different and refreshing that I find it hard to discribe it adequately.
keep on with your amazing tallents and I will gladly be back to read what ever comes out next!
You ended this perfectly not too much not too little.You gave us what we needed and left the rest up to our own innaginations.
Thank you!
I have thoroughly enjoyed EVERYTHING that you have written but this series was soo different and refreshing that I find it hard to discribe it adequately.
keep on with your amazing tallents and I will gladly be back to read what ever comes out next!
Tuesday, 30 May 2006 14:07
i think geoffrey may be my new hero. now, if you'll just pass me that rather large box of kleenex, i'll be on my way.
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