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Deja Vu Ain't What It Used To Be (part 3)

Wednesday, November 9, 2005

Slow dances and surprises. Third in a four-part episode-style story set during Firefly.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4009    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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"Jayne," Kaylee said. "Jayne, look at me ."

His wide, unfocused eyes darted around the dimly lit entrance hall, sweat shining on his temple. Kaylee’s hands cupped his cheeks and turned him to face her.

"Breathe," she said. "Just breathe."

Jayne blinked, focused on her, then puffed out his cheeks with two rapid exhales.

"This is lan-dan jiang next to some o’ the places Inara goes," Kaylee said. "And Mal’s right outside. Ain’t nothin’ to fret over." His expression was unfocused again, but at least his breathing had steadied.

"You shiny?" she asked.

He stared ahead blankly for a few seconds, then pumped out another two quick breaths. "I’m goin’ in," Jayne blurted out. He bolted toward the entrance to the D.A.I. club, then stopped suddenly and looked over his shoulder. "You got my back?"

"We ain’t stormin’ enemy lines," she said. "Just get in there."

Jayne grimaced, swallowed and entered the club with Kaylee taking his arm. Double doors opened.

They found themselves in a large square room with no light except for the walls themselves, which were all backlit a clean, uniform, fluorescent white from ceiling to floor. This turned the talking and dancing forms in the club into featureless, tangled silhouettes and hid the identities of anyone more than a few feet away - no doubt by design.

Glass shelves filled with crystal sculptures lined one of the illuminated walls, shattering the light from that side into sparkling shards.

On the other side of the room, a spotlight shone on three Chinese musicians. A man plucked at the silk strings of a zither, while another punctuated the music with the hollow percussion of a zhu. Beside them, a girl played a haunting melody on a globular flute.

Kaylee looked up at the man on her arm. He was staring at her, and he no longer seemed frightened.

"Ya look..." Jayne started, then stopped and seemed to have something catch in his throat.

She self-consciously examined the dress Inara had given her. Deep green silk hugged her body

Comments
Wednesday, 09 November 2005 19:22
More good stuff :)

Leaps and bounds!
Wednesday, 09 November 2005 20:27
First of all: Kaylee smiled wider. "Let’im wait. Let’s dance a while."

Panic set in. "Ain’t there some enemy lines we could storm instead?"

I LOVE YOU!

Second of all: And she danced with Simon.

I HATE YOU!

Poor Jayne! Not even realizing Kaylee's thinking of someone else! *Angsts*

*grin* Other than the trauma of Kaylee pretending he's Simon, I love! And actually, I even love that, because... I love angst and complication and this is chock full of it! Plus y'know, the adventure and the suspense and all.

I can't believe I missed Saffron all this time.

Bring on the rest! (And make Kaylee stop thinking of Simon when Jayne's bein' all sweet on her!)
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 09 November 2005 21:22
It keeps very very fascinating and entertaining!

Jayne is great, so funny! Kaylee, on the other hand... tsk tsk.

Saffron is up against more than she realizes, I think...

More!!!
Wednesday, 09 November 2005 22:15
"Don’t s’pose you’re lookin’ to cut in?"

brilliant :P
Thursday, 10 November 2005 11:10
Very good though I was exasperated at Jayne for not taking his cue at the end though his reaction was totally in character. So many great bits, the only performance that felt off was Inara's. And that Saffron? She is one mighty bad dude. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 10 November 2005 12:55
Hey great story. But Kaylee dancing with Simon? I go with the consensus.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 10 November 2005 20:01
I loved that Kaylee imagined herself dancing with Simon. As much as i love Jayne (and you really captured his character - ALL of the characters - well), her thinking of Simon is true to who she is. And makes for better drama. Great job - can't wait to read the rest.
CUB
Thursday, 10 November 2005 20:32
"the only performance that felt off was Inara's"

Hopefully you'll change your mind about that when you read part four.
Friday, 11 November 2005 18:57
*slaps forehead* JAYNE!!!

b
Sunday, 13 November 2005 07:54
This is really great Cub. When I read Inara I too had simliar thoughts of Ali, but then I figured the story wasn't quite done yet.

Sure enough, your repsonse makes me now hit the next.

I'm hooked! :) Great job so far!
Wednesday, 23 November 2011 04:48
And she danced with Simon.
^^^^AWWW I *loved* that!! Very shiny story!!:)))

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