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Badlands (chapter 2)

Monday, October 24, 2005

This one's fun to write. Hope it's fun to read, too.

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The lights were getting brighter; lights and pain. Both sharpened, and Simon winced, his face contorting. A second later the pain subsided and he began to slip back into the comfortable warm darkness.

This time there was a man’s voice. "Doc." Again the pain shot through him.

"Hey." Another jolt of pain, more distinct, stabbed at his side.

"Quit kicking me!" he heard his own voice say.

"Mornin’, Doc. Rise and shine," Jayne said with a smile.

Simon realized he was lying on his stomach in the infirmary. He lifted his cheek off the floor and squinted up at the towering figure above him. The room swam into focus, a wreck of shattered glass and bent steel. The overhead lights flashed on and off like bursts of lightning. "What... happened?" he managed, struggling to turn over.

"Nothin. Why?" Jayne said casually.

"Are you… Are you some kind of a lunatic?" the doctor asked with growing outrage. "Wait, of course you are, what am I saying. Why were you kicking me ? I could have had serious injuries."

"Yeah. You don’t." Jayne seemed disinterested in the whole conversation and was slicing off a piece of a ration wedge.

"How could you know? You’re not even-"

"Cause ya ain’t crying like a itty-bitty child. Ya ain’t even... cut up too bad or nothin’," Jayne said, waving the knife toward Simon and looking him over with disgust. "Luckiest sumbitch in the verse, you ask me."

As much as he disliked the idea, Simon was forced to agree. A patient’s table, which had ripped away from the floor, had sheltered him from the brunt of whatever destroyed the infirmary. "Is everyone all right?"

"Well, now, that’s all relative, ain’t it?" Jayne said.

Simon’s eyes widened. "River. Where’s River?"

"Case in point." Jayne popped a ration wedge into his mouth and motioned upwards with his knife.

The doctor raised his eyes to the ceiling and found himself face-to-face with his sister. She had lodged herself between the walls near the entrance and was staring down at the two of them, her expre

Comments
MAI
Monday, 24 October 2005 21:10
Again with the great chapter. You have a great River "voice" keep up the writing. I wanna see chapter 3!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 24 October 2005 21:19
Oooo, you've really got me hooked now. Can't wait to see who that girl is and whayt Patience is up to.
MERRIE
Monday, 24 October 2005 21:23
Fun stuff. :D Complications and more complications. Ahh Niska. That creepy old dude does always seem to bring the fun in, doesn't he? ;) More soon?

-Merrie
Monday, 24 October 2005 21:38
So looking forward to more. I love your River.
Monday, 24 October 2005 22:00
faith. hee!

b
Monday, 24 October 2005 23:27
Patience is just evil, isn't she?

I'm with the others, standing over here in the 'we want more' line.

CUB
Tuesday, 25 October 2005 01:30
Thanks so much for reading, everyone, and please keep sharing your thoughts, positive, negative, or vaguely indifferent. I'm trying to entertain YOU here.

Hopefully the story will keep getting better. It's meant to "feel" like an episode, so we'd be at the second commercial break now.

Oh, and Faith was my little wink at BtvS.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 25 October 2005 03:25
lovely, absolutely lovely.
i love the bit between jayne and river... :)
please write more? please? :)
SKYE2477
Tuesday, 25 October 2005 13:02
now i'm really starting to get into this... will mal just kill patience and get it over with!!! :) she's such a baddie, wonder what her and niska would think of each other.
Tuesday, 25 October 2005 20:35
You write River so well!
More please! Soon.
Not that I'm being demanding. Well, yah, okay. I'm being demanding.

And seriously, with Patience and Niska... I'm really thinkin' Mal needs to start shooting first and dealing later!
Saturday, 29 October 2005 02:16
You really do have River down well. The whole scene with her on the ceiling was my favorite.

- -Soul
FLOATINGCHANDELIER
Wednesday, 02 November 2005 21:21
You do write River well, as everyone has told you, but I really liked the little bit of Simon. Just because he was exactly in character, and hardly anyone can do that with Simon. (They can get close, but this was perfect.) I'd write more but there are other chapters to read!
Actually, one more thing: Loved the Wash and Zoe bit.

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