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Bell, Book and Candle - pt 5. Conclusion.

Wednesday, May 14, 2008

CONCLUSION: While the Serenity crew are at gun-point, Inara has persuaded the leader of the men to stand down. However, as a hysterical River flees the ship, the shooting starts.
Meantime – Mal and the LoveBot™ Sebastian are en-route to find Jossiah Bell and the missing Shepherd Book.

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While the Serenity crew are at gun-point, Inara has persuaded the leader of the men to stand down. However, as a hysterical River flees the ship, the shooting starts.

Meantime – Mal and the LoveBot™ Sebastian are en-route to find Jossiah Bell and the missing Shepherd Book.

This story is set just prior to Those Left Behind. All credit to Joss and Brett.

part five – Wise Up.

Lancy had no chance to clear the gun from his holster and he died with the same aggrieved look he had been wearing since conceding his right of arrest to Inara.

His body span and fell from the difficult footing of the stairwell bounced off a crate and down hard onto the flooring of the deck.

Inara froze, shocked.

For the merest instant – so did the rest of the posse. Just for an instant. Long enough. One of Zoë’s arms snaked out – ripping the pistol from the belt of the man behind her. Her arm windmill-ed up catching the man under the jaw with the barrel and even as he staggered back, her arm had arced over and fired at the man in front of her.

The rest of the men had their guns out – one pointing at Wash – but Jayne took care of that. Simon threw himself sideways and ran for the barrels – a bullet caught his shoulder – he felt the sting – just a graze but it helped, he froze in his tracks. “Shoot me – the barrels go up, we all go up!”

One of the gun-men paused, cursing - and Zoë took his legs away with a brutal blow to the knees. She had thrown a spare pistol to Wash – and he caught it, twisting upright in an awkward movement but shooting as he did so. Shots went wild but they caught a metal crate, sparked furious and ricocheted close to another man, forcing him down. One of the remaining men had a clear shot but the battery on the electro-charge was flat – had to make do with throwing himself at Wash instead - the two went sprawling in an undignified heap.

Jayne meantime was following his gun down the stairwell nearest his position firing as he did so. Another posse member down – but the rest were out by n

Comments
Wednesday, 14 May 2008 12:21
A rip roaring ending to this story but am I mite surprised that Book wanted Mal to let Bell go. Maybehaps more a product of his own near death epiphany than true forgiveness. Thanks for a good tale, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 14 May 2008 12:52
SO very very good! I agree with AMDOBELL about Book. You have done wonderfully explaining the events prior to TLB and I could see this happening to our BDHs. Can't wait for your next work of art!!
Wednesday, 14 May 2008 15:46
Thanks for writing! your best work to date. When I have time, I'll comment with more adulation... really!
Wednesday, 14 May 2008 16:17
Wheee! Sweeney Todd's chair, even!
Thursday, 15 May 2008 12:33
Excellent! I love Jayne's pleading for something to get the nanites out of him, and then believing he's invincible. Until a certain ninety-pound girl get hold of his man-parts ...
Saturday, 17 May 2008 02:15
Wonderful conclusion to a very entertaining series. I love the way you write!
2X2
Sunday, 18 May 2008 15:16
Hey you,

Apologies for not leaving feedback lately, I've been terribly busy and feedback has fallen by the wayside. And I'm sick on top of it, so woe is me ;o)

The story was good, I liked the overall premise, but I have to add my one little complaint again that it felt rushed to me. I found I had to read sections more than once to grasp what was going on because evertyhing was happening so fast - again, that could just be me, and in the end, I'm pretty sure I got what all went down, but I found this one more difficult to understand than 'Wages'...

I really liked River running away from the ship when all the shooting was about to happen, and then her running slowly changing into a purpose, a mission, that was neat. To the outsider, it very well could have just appeared that River ran off to save Book from the outset, but the truth is more complex and interesting than that. Very nice.

Jayne and the nanites at the end... Hilarious. Oh. My. God. :oD Goin' from freaking out to thinking he's gonna be invincible, too much fun! Until he steps in front of a bullet at least *G*

Liked seeing the love bot... it's interesting to think about them, in terms of where they fit with Companions and whores and the like. Are they the equivalent of today's blow up dolls? or something more? Is there any stigma attached to using one? Could they have an impact on the Guild's business? Who exactly writes their programming? Would there be celebrity versions of love bots? The Companion version for instance? Lots of things I'm suddenly thinking of, which is really running off on a tangent...

Enjoyed the story, would still like to see it slowed down a bit, but it's your style and it works for you and you continue to write them well. :o)
Saturday, 30 August 2008 02:08
“Gorram…” he breathed, “I’m gonna be invincible!”

Bwahahahaha....gasp....hahahahaha...

*wipes away laugh tears*

DAMN!!!

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