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Bell, Book and Candle - pt 1

Thursday, April 24, 2008

New Fic. Pt 1. The Serenity crew at work and... not so much,
serious and - not so much.
Easing myself back into the game with this curio.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3939    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Bell, Book and Candle.

disclaimer - none of the characters here are mine and the whole shebang is owed to Joss and co...

This story is set just prior to Those Left Behind.

part one: bodies at rest and in motion.

It was the sort of scene that needed music, demanded music and hell, perhaps there was music but it just couldn't be heard. Either way, the tiny figure of the old man stepped forward and flipped upside down, the kilt around the scrawny legs dropped in ungracious fashion, covering the wrinkled face completely. It was perhaps fortunate for all that what the kilt left exposed was nothing more or less than a brand new head; tussled, youthful and impossible - but a head nonetheless, grinning wildly and moving from side to side. The thin legs slowly easing from their straight up position to fall to the sides of the body - to become arms finally.

In a wicker chair, the wizened form of an old woman clapped at the trick with jerky halting hands and, at the last, the dog by the hearth let out a yap and circus-style somersaulted on the spot.

There were witnesses to these improbable actions - and their reaction was mixed.

"Au - to - ma - ta."

Scowling fiercely, Jayne Cobb leant his bullhead close to the smeared and greasy glass of the window, reading the fancy sign writing with difficulty. Jossiah Bell's Emporium of fine handmade implements, diversions and automata.

"Auto-mata," he repeated. "Hell is that?"

"Clockwork," the man beside him explained. "It's really quite ingenious."

"Clockwork?"

"Machines."

"I know what CLOCKWORK means, gorram it - I aint slow. Why they always gotta use some fancy name? Don't look much like the kind of robots we could use,” he added thoughtfully.

"These aren't robots, Jayne - just toys."

"These creepyfying things are toys? What kinda place is this? What kinda young gets raised with - what kinda place..." he repeated mournfully.

"Kinda place we're meant to be working Jayne - as I recall." A third voice. Cobb turned from the wi

Comments
Thursday, 24 April 2008 16:10
Great opening! I think of it all, my favourite line has to be:

>Mal was never over fond of sarcasm unless his own tonsils blessed it.

Ah, you know our dear captain. And so good to have you back with us! Hope things are so much better than before, and just look on writing as a form of therapy. It's not because we want you to update quickly. No, not that. No, sirree.
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Thursday, 24 April 2008 16:23
*Claps wildly*

YAY! New Wytchcroft fic!!! :oD

I love Love LOVE the Inara bit to pieces!!!!! *SQUISHES IT TIGHT* and you said you had trouble with Inara! *tsks*

*Happy sigh* I do so love your style, darlin'... I can just slip into your words and let them glide over me like a nice warm bath, mmmmmmmm.... Wonderful read!

I am certainly interested to see more, this was excellent, wonderful voices, beautiful descriptions, I'm so excited!!! Can't wait for more!!
Thursday, 24 April 2008 18:16

Really good job. I hope we get to see some of Mal and Inara in the next one. You did a fantastic job writing her character and expressing her boredom.
I can't wait to see what happens next.
Friday, 25 April 2008 00:58
OK, so I'm trying to remedy my bad non-commenting habits so I'm going to give you a blanket comment on your writing.

You have a distinctive voice which I like very much. I love that you include all our beloved BDHs and pay careful attention to their characterizations. Also, you seem to have quite a grasp on the Firefly world. By this, I mean you take elements from the show and expand on it. You don't retread the scenarios from the show. Through your writing I really feel like I'm back in the Verse. Which is so what I'm looking for in fanfics.

P.S. I'm also liking this story. Great start!
Friday, 25 April 2008 08:18
Is it bad that the words that really stood out to me for the next chapter were 'Jayne' and 'bath'?

*grin* This is going to be good. You nailed the voices perfectly. Of course, this means I have to up my game to compete, doesn't it?
Saturday, 26 April 2008 01:03
This is some of your most brilliant work, Wytchcroft.

Very nicely developed and insightful.

And you used references to "Better Days"; I think you are the first Author here to do so.
Saturday, 26 April 2008 13:19
There are so many good lines it's hard to pick just one.

Excellent work on Inara!

Good to see you back at it! But then, I'm one to talk...
Tuesday, 06 May 2008 11:15
I loved this and especially love how each of the characters are drawn so true. When I first saw the title I immediately thought of the film of the same name and that made me think you came up with the title first then wrote the story to fit it. Whatever, it is just wonderful and River playing about and causing Jayne to break that barrel was both funny and typical behaviour plus now our heroes are faced with a mystery. Why the good gorram is there oil not wine in them there barrels? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 15 November 2009 22:40
Found this by browsing. I love your style--it works the same way as the shots in the show, building on what you've just said with a revelationary detail.


Some really, really good moments--from the beginning I particularly like "own tonsils" and "scowling, inara turned the book the right way up."

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