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A Mighty Thorn In a Mighty Paw - Ch. 16

Friday, October 13, 2006

A screenplay taking place not long after the events of "Serenity."

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INT. SERENITY CARGO BAY - DAY

Paul is fighting four attackers tooth and nail. He sends a vicious back kick into the gut of one behind him. Two in front charge him head-on. Paul forward flips between them, both legs kicking straight out once he's cleared their shoulders. His feet strike them each on the back of the neck. He then somersaults on the deck, springing to his feet.

The fourth attacker approaches warily, his stance well-balanced, hands loose. Paul lets him attack. Two left jabs, followed by a right cross, then two snappy jumping front kicks. Paul deflects the punches, waits for the instant that both of the man's feet are off the ground, then performs a full roundhouse kick to his legs, sweeping him onto his side. The attacker hits the deck with a resounding thud.

The other three have regrouped, encircling Paul. Not hesitating, Paul leaps at the largest one, ramming both knees into his chest and cracking both elbows into the man's temples in quick succession. The man falls. Paul lands and spins, snapping a hook kick across the next man's jaw. Spit and teeth spew from his mouth as he is kicked, his body following his head around as he spins to the floor.

As Paul's foot touches the ground, he snaps a half moon kick into his next attacker's shin. This lowers the man's hands so Paul can backfist him in the temple and finish him with a powerful palm strike to the solar plexus. The man crumbles to the floor, his breath exploding from his lungs.

The third attacker recovers from the hook kick and leaps at Paul with a whistling spinning back fist, which Paul ducks low to avoid. Paul then blocks the follow-up roundhouse kick and sweeps the man's base leg out from under him, crashing him to the deck. Paul finishes him with a solid kick to the head.

Paul straightens and looks around, confirming his opponents' immobilization.

CU of his hand as he reaches to his belt and presses a button on a small remote. View shifts to see the men melt away. He then reaches up to his head and... removes a s

Comments
Friday, 13 October 2006 04:55
I absolutely love the way you write Jayne! "Brought back some fondish memories." Ha!

Great stuff... my only complaint is that they're too short. You're getting me addicted... when's the next installment?
Friday, 13 October 2006 12:57
As soon as Jayne said, "Don't sound like no big deal", I thought "Ohhh, this is gonna be bad!"

ECamber is right, you do a great job with Jayne. I find him a lot of fun to write myself - there's just so much good material there!
Friday, 13 October 2006 15:27
SIMON: (dead serious) You'd better sterilize that.


Couldn't have written any better.

I have to say, I'm finally starting to like Paul.
Friday, 13 October 2006 16:17
That was funny and what a neat little gadget. I thought Jayne would have kept fighting longer than that though. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 15 October 2006 03:41
I honestly thought you were gonna have Jayne fighting 10-on-1 with the way Mal was smirking and Paul responding to Mal's gesture;)

BEB

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