Blue Sun Room FICTION - ADVENTURE

Nothing Ventured... - Ch. 1

Saturday, June 9, 2007

Clucked, plucked, and ready to...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4124    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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INT. SERENITY - CARGO BAY

The Hooded Man drops cat-like to the floor. MALCOLM REYNOLDS descends the fore/starboard stairs, shaking his head with a grin. ZOE WASHBURNE works the unit that controls the winch and doors.

MAL - Had yourself a spot o’ fun from the looks of things. We currently employed?

The Hooded Man flips back his shroud revealing PAUL GIBSON. He hands a slip of paper to Mal, along with a small electronic device extracted from his coat pocket.

PAUL (shrugging) - Just wanted a quiet drink.

MAL (giving Zoe a meaningful look) - Funny, all the forces in the ‘verse hell-bent on thwarting that oh-so simple intention.

ZOE (deadpan) - Of course, sir. It’s an evil conspiracy. (to Paul) But I don’t think that’s the “fun” the Captain’s referring to...

Paul cocks an eyebrow.

MAL - Well, son, allow me some digression...

Fade out, then fade into...

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INT. SERENITY - CARGO BAY

The sound of of Serenity’s engines winding down echoes through the bay.

KAYLEE FRYE bounds into the Cargo Bay through the aft entrance, an olympic-size wrench in her hand. She looks around expectantly, but the bay is empty.

KAYLEE (uncertainty) - Guys?

Beat.

JAYNE COBB drops to the deck behind her with a roar, picking Kaylee up over his head by her waist. Kaylee screams, kicking Jayne in the chest.

JAYNE - Ow!

Jayne drops Kaylee and she turns on him, wrench raised. She actually looks angry.

KAYLEE - Jayne, I’m gonna bust yer SKULL...

Mal pokes his head through the aft door, the rest of him out of sight.

MAL - No skull-bustin’ til after this enterprise we’re about to acquire is on the far side of finished. (withdraws his head - VO) Can’t have you wreckin’ the only functioning portion of his brain that actually proves useful on occasion.

Zoe descends the fore/starboard stairs with INARA SERRA directly behind her.

ZOE - Functioning? I’ll believe it when I see it, sir.

Zoe activates the airlock and lowers the ramp. Swirling snow is visible through the opening. K

Comments
Saturday, 09 June 2007 22:59
All that build up which I thought was for a job and they're going... shopping? For a moment there it felt more like military campaign. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 10 June 2007 00:52
My question is what is Mal shopping for?
Sunday, 10 June 2007 01:02
Great dialog here - very much like some of the snarkier exchanges from the series.

I can't wait to see what constitutes "shopping" in Mal's world. Considering some of his definitions of fun, shopping could get a mite hair-raising.
Sunday, 10 June 2007 01:22
Loved Zoe's dialogue in particular here. And River's comment about even brushing her teeth. I can just see the accompanying grin! Can't wait to go shopping with our BDHs!
Sunday, 10 June 2007 05:41
You know, I could agree with Amdobell here...our BDHs may be aiming to shop with extreme prejudice. On the other hand, they can't just go around alienating every single planet floating in the Black, now can they?

Also, I can really see Jayne having a thing where he surprises Kaylee...because he's a little sweet on her...but it shocked me when she kicked him. Karate Kaylee? (lessons from River?) Or was it just her flailing about?
Sunday, 10 June 2007 05:46
*GASP* I get it! It's a change in her character brought about by Jubal Early! Well done indeed!

~MG
Sunday, 10 June 2007 05:51
WOOO-HOOOO! Another (sure to be) kick-ass series from HWKA... Sure it's gonna be good.

P.S. Need to know if I got all the chapters of "Mighty Thorn"... What was the last one posted?

-- Jonathan
Sunday, 10 June 2007 14:23
Very good
Sunday, 10 June 2007 19:24
Hah! Would have served Jayne right to get clocked by Kaylee after trying to scare the go se out of her. Though Mal's right...what limited functionality that seems Jayne's brain SEEMS to have would be definitely damaged if Kaylee used that wrench on his skull;D

And shopping, huh? Must have all kinds of friends on their last trip to that planet if Mal has to treat resource gathering as if it's a military campaign;D

BEB
Tuesday, 12 June 2007 12:38
Nice scene, as always. Could see your Mal particularly clearly, hear his tone, see his expressions as he tries to ride out the interruptions and get his message across. Well done. Now, what are they up to?

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