Blue Sun Room FICTION - ADVENTURE

Nothing Ventured... - Prologue

Monday, May 28, 2007

A screenplay taking place not long after the events of "A Mighty Thorn In a Mighty Paw." Post BDM by a few months...<p>Joss's characters, save for one of my own design. It all belongs to him and this is just for fun.<p>Just looking for a quiet drink...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3859    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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INT. OLD-FASHIONED BAR

The bar room is dark, smoky, and quite run-down. The bar runs three quarters of the length of the room. The occasional patron hunches over the bar, nursing a drink. A group of men are shooting pool on a real pool table in one corner. A few tables are scattered about in no particular pattern, groups of two and three sitting around them. The noise level is moderate, each group keeping their dealings quiet.

Slow zoom on man sitting on a stool at the bar. Pan around from his back to his side. He wears a plain brown knee-length coat, the hood pulled over his head. His face remains hidden, only the tip of his nose and chin are visible. He’s leaned over his drink, slowly swishing the nearly empty glass.

The weathered bartender steps up in front of the man, wiping his hands off.

BARTENDER - Care for another, partner?

The man sets his glass down and slides it forward a couple inches. The bartender shrugs, produces a bottle and fills the glass nearly to the brim. The man nods slightly and the barkeep turns away.

A yell arises from the pool table area. All heads turn in that direction except for the Hooded Man. Player One is a large, burly man. Player Two is younger and smaller, almost squirrelly-looking, bad posture and all. Other men near the pool table back away, grinning malevolently.

PLAYER ONE (squaring off with Player Two) - You tryin’ to cheat me, boy?

PLAYER TWO (hands up) - Hey, man. I just came in here to play. (backs away) Ain’t no hijinks afoot...

Player One takes a long wide swing at Player Two. The smaller man ducks away, bumping into a nearby table. The two men occupying the table jerk to their feet, their chairs tipping over behind them. One of the men, Talin, grabs Player Two by his jacket front and shoves him back at Player One.

TALIN - You got a game to finish, boy.

Player One gets a hold of Player Two this time and throws him against the nearest wall. The man bounces off, landing with agility in a crouch, one hand on the floor.

PLAYER ONE

Comments
Monday, 28 May 2007 03:49
Okay, I'm intrigued. Very well described bar fight you had there. Best Line: "I wouldn't let go of that thought just yet." Looking forward to more!
Monday, 28 May 2007 04:44
That...Was...AWESOME!!!

Glad you're back...and, as I'm now done with school, I should think about doing some serious typing...

That was definitely a sweet bar fight. It would seem as if both Player Two and the mysterious man have had extensive martial arts training. (Could he be our beloved Seafood?- I don't think Mal would wear a hood...or am I jumping the gun?)

I wonder if they're on St. Alban's?

A shiny beginning! (from an ongoing 'Verse, that is...)

~MG
Monday, 28 May 2007 04:54
Definitely some high-quality fic here, Rob. You've especially outdone yourself when it came to writing the fight scene(s):D

Definitely have to wonder though if the hooded man was Paul or not. His fight skills and amigos with a ship point in Paul's direction...but we all know that misdirection is the key to any good tale;)

BEB
Monday, 28 May 2007 06:55
A tantalizing reminder that I still have much of your previous fic to read! I'll try to keep up on this one though. This was a good beginning, and I really liked the dialog. Not knowing who the characters were was frustrating, but I'm assuming there was a good reason for said obscurity ;)
Monday, 28 May 2007 10:06
Very good opening. Loved the bar fight scene and am intrigued to see where you go next. I'm almost sad the ship turned up as it would have been nice to have the men from the bar think their prey had just vanished into the snow, not leaving so much as a footprint behind. This was good and exciting. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 29 May 2007 16:46
Ah, your new endeavor has begun, hurrah! And with a fracas, just as we like it.
I enjoyed the exchange at the bar between Player Two and Hooded Man < <i>PLAYER TWO (nodding incredulously) - Naturally.</i> >, and the scene on the roof, complete with its fast action, roaring ship, and disappointed men below, was so easy and fulfilling to visualize. I'm not so much for speculating where things are going, so I'm just going to buckle in for the ride. I'm sure it will have plenty of twists and turns and, with luck, life-threatening stunts. :D
Good to see the new story started.
Tuesday, 29 May 2007 16:48
Ah, your new endeavor has begun, hurrah! And with a fracas, just as we like it.
I enjoyed the exchange at the bar between Player Two and Hooded Man
> PLAYER TWO (nodding incredulously) - Naturally.< Hah!

And the scene on the roof, complete with its fast action, roaring ship, and disappointed men below, was so easy and fulfilling to visualize. I'm not so much for speculating where things are going, so I'm just going to buckle in for the ride. I'm sure it will have plenty of twists and turns and, with luck, life-threatening stunts. :D
Good to see the new story started.

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