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A Mighty Thorn In a MIghty Paw - Ch. 61- The End

Thursday, April 5, 2007

A lot to learn...

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EXT. SPACE

Cheerful Firefly music. Rolls over into...

INT. SERENITY - FOREHALL

Jayne is attempting to drag his destroyed mattress up the entryway to his bunk. It’s jammed tight. He lets out a grunt and yanks it through.

View moves up into the Bridge. Malcolm is re-stacking the crates in the fore storage area, strapping them down. River sits at the pilot’s console, legs tucked under her, messing with the screens.

RIVER: I ran the self diagnostic and foreign signal sweep. They never bothered to put a tracking beacon aboard us.

MAL (ascending the ladder to the upper deck): ‘Course not. Wasn’t a chance in the ‘verse we’d actually escape their evil clutches. Jonah in the whale’s belly we were.

River smiles at Mal and he gives her a wink.

View pivots 180 degrees and travels back downs steps, through forehall, past Jayne dragging his mattress around the corner to the fore/starboard stairs and into the galley. Inara is picking up the scattered articles. Kaylee is attempting to sort items into the various kitchen compartments.

INARA (carrying a stack of plates to the counter): I realize the necessity of a thorough search, but do soldiers honestly think a human being could fit into one of those?

KAYLEE: No. I just think they’re mean. They like to break stuff, ‘specially our stuff. I hope Paul made ‘em limp for a month.

Inara smiles, squeezing Kaylee’s arm.

View travels through the galley into the aft hall. We see the engine turning lazily in the engine room before view turns the corner and travels down the aft stairs. Camera slows as it approaches the Infirmary. Simon stands within, holding his Med Scanner near Paul. Paul’s eyes are still closed, his body relaxed. He is unrestrained. A single IV drips into the line in his arm.

Simon touches the screen on his Med Scanner. He shakes his head.

View travels from Infirmary and up into the Cargo Bay. Zoe is moving crates about, her shirt soaked with sweat. She hefts a particularly large crate and stacks it on another. S

Comments
Thursday, 05 April 2007 01:44
Hope you write another. I loved this one!!
Thursday, 05 April 2007 09:01
Lovely ending if this is the end. Was a bit confused with the last scene with Jayne for a moment or too. So happy to see Paul awake but am concerned about the still dark section of his brain. Just hope the greater good outweighs that dark spot. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 06 April 2007 02:13
Yay! A warm and fuzzy ending! It chills me that I could almost see Simon saying that Paul was braindead or something. Chilly. Much better that his mind just hit reboot. I hope he stays with the crew for a good long while, because they're his real family. And Jayne crying! A very funny image.

I, too, definitely hope you're up for writing another one, because I certainly am looking forward to seconds! (And yes, my own story will hopefully be arriving shortly...I'm such a slacker!)

Thanks again for a great trip through the 'Verse with the BDHs.

~MG
Tuesday, 10 April 2007 20:59
Well...that was certainly an interesting wrap-up. Not sure how I feel about Paul's brain getting rebooted and having seem to have lose years of maturity and experience like that. Maybe it's for the best - not really recalling all the stuff he did as the Academy's CQC trainer and his guilt for not trying to stop the Alliance and the Academy sooner - but I just feel like the crew should be concerned about Paul's future mental state, what with the black spot on his CAT/MRI scan...

Still...been all kinds of addicted to this tale and I really can't wait to see what you come up with next. Can only hope is on par with this series;)

BEB
Thursday, 19 April 2007 18:03
I *love* how you write this segment, moving through Serenity from person to person, so very much as we would see it in the series or the BDM, getting the ship as back to normal as they can. I can so clearly see what you are describing. Also like the touch that passes from crew member to crew member, bonding them. And Paul too? Really nice wrapup. Take a little break. Then give us more, please.

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