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The Train Job, Duet. Part 1

Monday, January 2, 2006

Porn without plot, not quite NC17 yet but you can bet Vera I'm heading there. After all, Hey...ItsaWash here, lol. Thanks for reading. Give me your thoughts.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4219    RATING: 8.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The Train Job, Duet, Part 1

They met on a train. In the tunnel on a fast moving maglev, as a matter of fact. She wasn’t good at geography, paid little attention to what point on a map she existed on at any given time. He had it all down pat, knew where he was, what he was, who he was always, but in the darkness as they collided the terrain he found himself pressed against had no resemblance to anything on a cartographer’s best map.

When they first touched, when their bodies connected front to front, their warm mingled breath shooshed out of them right into one another’s faces. The combined senses of touch and scent got them acquainted in a hurry, neither finding the contact unwelcome.

In fear of being tumbled to the ground by the train’s motion and lost in the darkness she could not see through, she gripped the unknown man’s right hip and strong left shoulder for dear life. For his part, the man clasped her to his broad chest after encountering a round breast with one hand in a downward sweep. As if he’d been shocked by the soft yet firm contact, his hand ricocheted away from it, arms banded her to him in reaction.

But pulling her close only served to cause another reaction in him. Her body held tightly to his, not quite flush with his, more like his left chest serving as a perch for the valley between her breasts, he felt that very clearly, her stomach and lower held against his hip. Her pubic bone was flush with his thigh, and as the train rocked, rocketed through the longest darkest tunnel in Europe, where her sex and his leg met there was a sly rhythmic slide back and forth. Their feet stood firm, especially since they stood as one, lending support to each other as the rocking continued.

She was gripped to his body now. Before they’d settled like this, her stone solid against him, safe from falling by his whole body’s grasp, his first touch had been accomplished by his hand as it swept her front in a hard caress. Even in the dark it was possible to see that his cupping her breast w

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Monday, 02 January 2006 19:15
Wooo... I like it.. my only (minor) complaint is that, for me, 'cunt' and 'pussy' aren't turn-on words (could be cuz I'm a woman, I don't know)... but it's minor enough that I can slide right on by them and be quite pulled into the rest of it, believe me!
I'm not really sure who they're supposed to be, could be anyone really, and I'll let my mind fill in the blanks with my own favourite pairing...
It's the V-neck shirt that seems a big clue to me, and the clothes and subtle cologne of good quality... hmmm maybe it's ... Book!?? that would be fun, and evil!
Monday, 02 January 2006 21:45
Aside from some word that so far I've seen only used in honest-to-God porn, this is very well-written smut!

"Cunt" is a bit problematic to use as a descriptor since it's so ladden with insulting double-meaning. Sounds fairly aggressive. "Pussy" on the other hand sounds almost too soft and playful, but it's better.
It's no wonder erotica is so riddled with funny euphemisms, it's so complicated to hit the right note with those words, lol!

My guess would be for the woman... Saffron? She's one that strikes me as saucy enough to be this character.

The man is neither Mal, Wash, Simon or Jayne. The first three for lack of chest hair, the latter for lack of finery.

Book, could certainly be!

Oh, what about Book/Patience in the past? :D

Or the cop and his female assistent from "The Train Job".

Daddy and Mommy Tam when they met?

Saffron and Monty?

So difficult! *g*
Monday, 02 January 2006 22:07
I'm with the others. The words 'cunt' and 'pussy' just throw me out of the story for a few moments. I get disoriented.

But otherwise, very compelling. No idea who they could be, but I want to know.
Monday, 02 January 2006 23:39
*sob* By reading the summary title..I cant read this.. But I bet you did a fantastic job one of your best yet!! LOL You are a star writer ...A +++++++ x a lot. :P

Great Job! And 10!

I bet Im the best review-er for someone who hasnt read the story. :P
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 00:32
I don't think you're going to get a real winner in the word choice. As a woman, I always found the terminology "pussy" incredibly cheesy and laughable. What is this, the freakin' Animal Planet channel?
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 02:22
Okay, I hear you. The three offending words have been replaced with Firefly-friendly ones.

Thanks for being honest. It helps to know one's public and be able to post accordingly! Keep flyin', y'all, and thanks for reading and having the guts to tell it like you feel it. :0)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 03:24
...you don't introduce us to the characters. Show us what they look like throughout the piece. What about dialogue? Where's that? One paragraph 'she' is looking at map or something, then the next paragraph 'they're' having sex?
If you want to be a good writer, then learn your craft. Anyone can write smut, but make it worth the reader's time if that's what you want to do.
I don't want to see our Firefly characters in porn.
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 03:25
Ah! Got here late enough for the edited version! Very lovely.
You do have a way with words! And errr..body parts. :D

Hmmmm.... Who is it?
I've got no guesses at all at this point!
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 10:00
A note to the above Anonymous: If you don't want to see Firefly characters in porn, don't read a fan-fic that has the word clearly written in the description. Duh! *shakes head in disbelief*

It's A Wash: Some really fantastic IMAGERY ('hint hint' Anonymous! *shakes head again*) in here. You've got me guessing, and probably guessing wrong, too. Mighty interested in finding that out. ;P
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 11:58
CantonHeroine: You are MY heroine, for bloody certain! I..didn't dare hope that somebody intelligent like you would come in here and correct the cretinous ignorance of my detractor. But in you came! If I can ever repay the favor, it will be a great day for me, I swear to you. :0)

Because, see, replying to Anon myself would have sounded self-serving and prolly more than a little futile. But in you came, and rebutted better than I ever could have. Sigh. Bless you, my child. :0) Have as ruttin' fine a day as you've made mine, you hear?
Tuesday, 03 January 2006 12:01
I read the edited version and think it very fine. I have no idea who you're writing of...but am dying to find out.
Friday, 06 January 2006 17:55
ooh!!! more itsawash goodness!!!! just made my day...

b

p.s. i figured it was zoe and simon for some reason...but i'm dense so pay me no mind
Monday, 09 January 2006 02:41
I see no reason to complain whatsoever. Great job.

I don't want to say it's my first guess, Mal and Zoe but, oh crap. I said it. I hope I'm wrong.
ANONYMOUS
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Wednesday, 18 January 2006 13:31
Well that last one was rude. Pay no attention.

Hey Wash it's me again. On my second read, I naturally think it's my favourites, Kaylee and Jayne. Great images!
Friday, 28 April 2006 13:57
Not sure who they are, they could be anyone. Both of them with silk undies, and on a maglev train in Europe (someone made a trip to visit earth that was), so it relaly could be anyone. Unless I am misreading or missed something. Anyhow, well written and shiny.
Sunday, 02 July 2006 22:47
I have so much catching up to do. I've missed so much from you! I do believe I have quite a bit of time ahead to engulf my mind in your writing. I love all of it.

So this....I do know the pairing, and will leave it to you to guess, HOW I know.

*but in the darkness as they collided the terrain he found himself pressed against had no resemblance to anything on a cartographer’s best map.* For anyone who's spent even a moment on a train, this was a perfect description of the rocking in a train as two people try to hold themselves straight.

*She went thickly moist where they were connected below, flushed from her neck to her hairline at the realization that she was, that he might somehow know.* If he IS who I KNOW he IS than I can totally see this reaction in her.

*The pleasure he felt where they were connected mouth-to-mouth was a frightening thing, scary because he’d never felt anything quite like this before.* Perfect for this certain person, the innocence of this man.

Washie...my dear, I want to ride a train, this fic on my mind. Enter a dark tunnel, and just HOPE there is someone to fall into me.

Spacie.

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