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The Way of Jayne, Part 4

Saturday, December 24, 2005

Jayne gets a job that seems to foreshadow his later career. This fic will lead up to Jayne's first-time with a woman. I'm working on that part, will post within a week, I hope. Please feedback, will ya? Need to know if it's still fairly interesting...

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The Way of Jayne, Part 4

Six months had gone by since Ma Cobb had been delivered of the demons that had plagued her mind. A freed mind enabled the body to get back up and out of the rocking chair she’d been living in for too long. She hadn’t been an invalid even while in her self-made bondage, more of a prisoner of her own lack of will to live, but her friend and midwife Maeve Burlee had provided a conduit to break the shackles, had let her get back to being a mother to the Cobb children, a member of the community and a healthy human being again.

Marie Cobb stretched her arms high overhead, arched her back and issued a big old sigh. She had just finished feeding the one year old triplets, Peter, Mary and Paul. They were lively and quick, sure squirmers, but the restraining trays on the Shaker-like bench that Jayne and Timmie had fashioned for their mealtimes was a help, keeping them pent up long enough to get them to eat at least a handful of whatever was put before them.

At this age they still ate with their hands, of course, pink dimpled fingers slapping at the mashed carrots and chicken or swirling it on their trays. The Picassoan orange and beige palette was wasted on their doting mom’s non-artistic eye, but she smiled and encouraged them to, “Come on, y’all. Put some of them groceries in your mouth, please, for momma.”

Googles and hollers of “Ma-ma-ma,” or “Dowg,” “Bird,” or “Peeese,?” (for ‘please’,) were intermittently punctuated by grunting baby mumblings whenever a child decided to temporarily appease his mother by transferring a small amount of food/paint from tray to inside a cupid’s bow mouth.

Jayne clomped up the front stairs banging his boots hard on each step to dislodge thickly clotted mudballs. Timmie tromped right behind him clomping her boots likewise with the added necessary maneuver of dodging Jayne’s clumpy missiles, some of which could be large enough to make her trip.

He looked behind him at her progress as he held to the porch post on the top step. When h

Comments
Saturday, 24 December 2005 05:06
Itsa you are amazing. As the reader I find myself getting lost in all the descriptions...not a problem though, I just have to reread. It's a toss up, cause you just write so beautifully. Descriptive and imaginative!
Saturday, 24 December 2005 07:13
I love this series. Keep it up I think it's going to be great when it's done
Saturday, 24 December 2005 10:38
Nearly injured myself in the rush to read this! It weren't a pretty sight. ;P

I can see Wood becoming a possible role-model for Jayne here, what with the crude behaviour and all. Can't wait to see how that happens.

More, as soon as you can.
Saturday, 24 December 2005 13:09
This is a great series. The back story you've created is so real. Can't wait to read more.
Sunday, 25 December 2005 04:53
I've said it before, but I love this look at youngJayne. It's like seeing all the hidden parts of his personality, before they got hidden by life. His innocence is endearing. I love how he is honest in his answers to Wood. And how determined he is to take car of his family, but we can see some of the future man in his attitude toward his father.

Great Job as always. I honestly can't wait to see where you're going with the rest of this.
Sunday, 25 December 2005 07:29
Jayne's first time with a woman? Oh that will be a wacky adventure...I can see it now. :P

also...

IMAGERY!!! I LOVE YOU!!!!! I know there's an award out there for the best imagery writer. I may still be crazy... but I know my brain loves this! Cant wait for the next chapter!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 27 December 2005 01:05
i'm a complusive reader so you know when i say your writing is great its the truth-can't wait for the next chapter
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 20:14
wood: he's smelly, he's dirty, he's rude, he farts. obviously jayne's mentor, no?

b
Friday, 28 April 2006 02:10
Wow, Jayne as a caring pseudo vet. Nice.

Also, I never commented on your choice of names for the triplets, but nice going there.
Friday, 26 May 2006 00:03
Jayne...continuin' his daddiness....and the little ones, with their little phrasing. I was thinking, how does a young man like that become.....

Then Wood....wow, he's not a scoundrel, he's just a nasty reprobate, with the repulsive smell to boot.

I dern near fell out of my seat reading of Jayne's dumbfoundedness to the old sleazeball's morning bath though!

Scratching his head, dumb-founded, Jayne sat down in his undershorts on the top step to watch the morning’s entertainment.


Wood ran out of the pond water once more, and took himself slopping with water over to the horse trough. He picked up the soap Jayne had left the night before, rubbed it briskly under his still-shirted arms, under his filthy neck, rubbed some into his beard, and lastly, between his legs over the sopping colorless pants he still wore.


Dropping the soap, Wood set off at a dead run toward the pond again, canon-balling into the deepest portion. ‘Gorram man’s taking a bath with his ruttin’ clothes on,’ Jayne thought. Laundry and bath all in one, neither task done particularly well. Shaking his head at the image unfolding before him, Jayne realized his boss’s clothes’d most likely stand up on their own if he ever DID remove them.


Way out in the water, an ungodly hooting fart flattened by several layers of dirty wet clothes blatted like a foghorn. With one more shake of his head, added to a grimace as if he could smell the noxious vapor from here, Jayne went back into the house to see about getting breakfast on the table.

Gorram Funny Washie!!!

*Thunder rumbles* Part 5........
Monday, 07 August 2006 18:09
The description of everything is so very vivid and it makes this story a real pleasure to read.

The foreshadowing to what kind of career Jayne would eventually make for himself is very telling. Though born of a good heart and a desire to help support his family.

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