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The Pleasuring of Kaylee, Part 5 (Conclusion)

Thursday, November 24, 2005

The end of The Pleasuring of Kaylee. NC17, you can bet on it. I posted this at 4:30 a.m., no editing, just spell-checking. I'll make minor corrections this weekend.

Note: This is probably the last Jaylee from me for a while unless they get all up in my head again, begging prettily for another romp.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3962    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The Pleasuring of Kaylee, Part 5

Jayne’s captain stared wide-eyed, jaw set titanium hard straight past Zoe’s shoulder at a half-naked mercenary lying half atop his own good mechanic on the shower room floor.

‘Nara and Zoe stood filling the partially-opened doorway blocking Mal’s attempts to advance into the room, making themselves a barrier of female flesh preventing (or at least delaying) Jayne’s destruction, should Mal decide to draw down on the man.

Inara had her own motives for feeling protective of the budding relationship she’d earlier heard about and seen through Kaylee’s eyes. Zoe’s reasons had more to do with Jayne being unarmed and thus of little threat, undeserving of introduction to Mal’s packed heat. Also quickly noted was Kaylee’s face and figure unstruggling beneath the merc, seeming more than comfortable in Jayne’s arms. The firmly braced young womens’ unspoken agreement was that they'd hedge Jayne’s bets, stand Mal off long enough for explanations to be given and received.

Grunting, frustrated, Mal managed to wedge one broad shoulder and arm between Inara and his second-in-command. Trial and error proved that was all he could manage without hurting one of them and angering both.

From that snugly cushioned but slightly undignified position, Serenity’s crew’s righteously angry protector sighted on Jayne's face above a naked chest on top of Kaylee and issued a hard demand, voice icy cold but steady, “Jayne, you get your sorry self offa my mechanic and get up off the gorram floor.”

No move from Kaylee’s Jayne to prove he’d heard any directive, let alone cared.

Raking a hand through his shock of brown hair, the other snaking down to rest on the holstered mare’s leg at his hip, Mal continued, “Be quick about it now, Jayne. I ain’t playin’. To hell with needing you ridin’ shotgun on the job, I’ll teach SIMON to point and shoot Vera at any obstacles that need moving!”

Jayne continued to show no intent toward compliance, although he heard Mal fine. All the man on

Comments
Thursday, 24 November 2005 13:31
Whoa. Good ending...
Hot and sweet, my favourite combination.
I've loved this series from word one. Any chance of a further continuation? *bats eyelashes hopefully*
Thursday, 24 November 2005 18:40
Oh God. That was fantastic! Jayne all talkative like! Squeeee!

And this almost made me cry!: "When?" "Now."
Thursday, 24 November 2005 21:32
from funny to sweet to downright sexy!!! that's what i like about your stories...just so gorram perfect!!!

"I love you."
"I know. I love you too."
my heart is a little melty puddle dripping all over my ribcage...

b
Thursday, 24 November 2005 23:51
Oh! Gorgeous!
And SOOOOOOOOOOOOW Worth the wait!

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“There, Mal. Ya got your answer so get the ruttin’ hell out,” Jayne bent down and kissed Kaylee lightly but lingeringly on the lips, planning for their audience to be gone by the time he came back up.

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Hallelujah! Well said, Jayne!
I did LOVE that image of Mal trying to push past Inara and Zoe and them just kind of standing in the way. Lovely!

ANONYMOUS
Friday, 25 November 2005 00:51
true love!

who knew it could happen to jayne? but miss kaylee is the girl to do it...

good lord that was HOT...
Friday, 25 November 2005 12:33
Hot, sexy, great! I too loved the whole series.
Friday, 25 November 2005 15:05
Sweet, sexy, and oh so Jaylee! Perfect!

When? Now. Was fantastic!

You're the bestest stalkee ever!

And now I demand more fic-y goodness from you!
Saturday, 26 November 2005 17:13
From SameErtia: "Hallelujah! Well said, Jayne!" Heh-heh, it felt SO good to let our boy tell Mal off while simultaneously kissin' on our Kaylee. Sigh. I love these two kids!

And hey! I love you guys for loving them too. Thanks for being here. Even on the Tgiving holiday, you haven't deserted me.

P.S. Holiday was so busy and I finished this so late that I had some scabby placed on this Part 5 that needed doctoring. Only just now got it polished up. If you feel like re-reading it, lemme know if it shines better.

Keep flying like a leaf on the wind, Travellers.
Sunday, 27 November 2005 05:34
I loved this story!!

Jayne's dialogue was just perfect...such a simple man trying to find the right words...Loved it!!

And the ending was beautiful...smutty and sweet all at the same time...my favorite combo!!
BEAUTIFOOL
Tuesday, 29 November 2005 06:12
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm. that is all. just mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.


now i'm all distracted. <wanders around vaguely>
Thursday, 08 December 2005 23:51
What a way with irony, baby girl!

To have the crew find out was just totally fitting as seeing this is the conclusion of this series. You always want to tie up loose ends when writing and this takes care of one of Kaylee's concerns!


The other obvious concern, having them talk was much needed!

>>>"Have you ever loved a woman?">>>

I think that question would make any man sit there and think for a minute and having that question posed to someone like Jayne Cobb was all the more needed because of Kaylee wanting to make sure she's not just "another" to him.

>>>"Do you want me, Jayne?">>>

Like with the question above she posed to him, this question still stays in the same vein of keeping the character Jayne very simple, always having to ask him bluntly on anything and also staying true to your own voice and story with having Kaylee and Jayne be very upfront and simple with one another!

Like I said before, when you have two character start off with such a "bang", you're next question is always, "what happens from here?"

And you finished it and took us exactly where we needed to go!

Great job!

Namaste
SAHS

KIM

"pretty cunning, don't cha' think?"
Sunday, 18 December 2005 22:17
i dunno how you ppl actually see kaylee with jayne..........my head hurts.
Monday, 09 January 2006 14:00
Well I re-read the Measure of Jayne so naturally had to follow it up.
This whole series was wonderful again.

"‘Twasn’t lust then, had to be love. It was the sound of his name on her lips. The smell of her as she quickly passed by him in the corridor. The way just seeing her far off would lift his heart up to float four feet over his head. It was Kaylee calling to Jayne and his heart's pounding answering her every time, as involuntary a response as breathing"
One of my favourite lines.
Thursday, 30 March 2006 22:31
I am lovin' your work, ItsaWash. Awesome imagery, beautiful words. And you make the characters REAL. Which so many fanfic writers fail to do. You get their voices, and their souls in there.

*applause* More, please.
Thursday, 27 April 2006 17:20
"moldering"

typo?

“Did you hear the Captain say Vera’s got a new owner, Jayne?”

Spetacular!

Again, a shiny story throughout :)
Wednesday, 23 August 2006 03:31
Washie...again some of your most awesome writing, the sex, the Jayne words, it all. I found Mal, to be especially well written also. But hey, you write them all perfect.

“Jayne, you get your sorry self offa my mechanic and get up off the gorram floor.” *YES, Mal....unfortunately, its two against one here, and I'm lovin' it.

I’ll teach SIMON to point and shoot Vera at any obstacles that need moving!” *this kills ME! and such a funny perfect line!

“Real soon now, the doc’ll have plenty of extra time for learning to replace you in the henchman trade since your moldering corpse won’t need his fine doctorin’ anymore.” *and this...Mal, you wrote him so awesome washiely.

The merc-turned-chair *hmmmmm, what a picture, what a position, ever thought about writing for the Kama Sutra.

Almost as if they caught his thought, the small twin objects of his lustful thinking perked up higher toward his face as he leaned in to study and smile at her body in want. *ah...our crew chief and her "adornments" what a picture.

‘Christ, there’s a list? How long is the gorram list?’, his tortured brain and body asked. *So very Jayne in his most angsty state, ready to commence and being asked questions.

This whole series was awesome, and as usual, is a wonderful capture of the awesome writer that you are. Your abilities and talents, so showcased her in a graphic telling of a pairing that so many seem to loathe, but Washie, I love it. Yeah, maybe they didn't make it on the series, but they made it here, in a most "pleasuring" way. Not just for Kaylee, but for those who've read it.

I'll be in my bunk.

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