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The Pleasuring of Kaylee, Part 3

Sunday, November 20, 2005

Kaylee and Jayne begin to work something out.

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The Pleasuring of Kaylee, Part 3

Malcolm Reynolds met Kaylee while she was walking head down and concentrating in the corridor outside Jayne’s quarters. She looked to be dirt-smeared but cute in a spring-born lamb kind of way. “Hey, Kaylee. What’s news?”

His mechanic stopped short and squeaked in surprise, putting out one hand against the hallway wall, “Uh, hi, Cap’n. Didn’t see you, I musta been wool-gathering.” She shifted from one foot to the other, placing hands on hips. “Ummm, how’s Jayne doing?”

“Good, real good. Doc’s been to see him so I know the verdict ain’t just wishful thinking. According to Simon and Jayne, it seems your good works’ve been part of the cure. Benefits of that’ll be paying off in credits if my plans for ill-gotten gains go shiny. Jayne’s gun-hand representing our little group looks to be a key element so his bein’ healthy’ll be the difference between paid and broke.”

He smiled at her absent-mindedly, thoughts locked on the further workings of The Plan.

“Inara told me you took him something to eat this morning. Did he get it down alright,?” she asked, making conversation but also wanting to find out if Jayne still needed her to bring him something to break his fast.

Trucking a meal down to him yesterday had been a means to communion between them. Might work that way again. Doing for him today might be a good way to get said what needed saying.

There was talking to be done. Inara had been right to suggest it. A quick ripping of the bandage and then she (and he) could go on from there. Which ever way the wind blew them.

No matter what happened, Jayne’s little lover was tired of the waiting, the wondering and the wounding it brought to her mind.

“Ate four strawberry baos, some powdered eggs Book liquefied and scrambled up for him and downed two cans of milk,” Mal answered, one side of his mouth smiling at her as he spoke. “I’d say he did alright, inhaled it all as if it was air and he was suffocating from the lack.”

No meal-taking

Comments
Sunday, 20 November 2005 11:41
Ooh! Well that was great, I loved the last line. but they've got to talk sometime. I keep saying this, more please?
Sunday, 20 November 2005 14:43
That was fats I go to bed after reading part 2 last night then wake up to part 3. Yes!

ok off to actually read it now.

Kristy
Sunday, 20 November 2005 14:52
Ok back from reading now and I'm the one who needs a shower. Great. But Bookaddict is right they've got to talk sometime. Wonder what they'll say.
Sunday, 20 November 2005 16:27
It might be just me, but I think her drying him off was incredibly romantic! And Jayne wants to buy her pretty things! So sweet.

I can't wait for the angst of words to come between them. It's bound to happen, but yay for the smut!
Sunday, 20 November 2005 17:34
Do they need to talk? I got wound up in the happy sexual tension, was itching to get that out, but yeah, body-talking isn't enough. These two are both so good at it, their physical needs so closely matched that it makes it tempting to let them at it more before the awkwardness of speech has to be dealt with.

I love it when you tell me what you want in a story. Keeps me going in a direction that makes the fic flow better. I'm listening, for sure.
Sunday, 20 November 2005 19:42
ItsaWash... You know better than to leave this off right here, don't you?
You've got Jayne's... in Kaylee's... and you ...you can't just leave us here.

We need more! Jayne needs more! You're being cruel. Almost as cruel as Niska!
Oh, okay, maybe not THAT cruel!

I loved Jayne's reaction to turning around and finding Kaylee. Lovely! Very lovely indeed!
RWH1456
Sunday, 20 November 2005 20:36
I guess I am jelous because I have liked Kaylee from the start. I have dated some women just like her but I couldn't keep them. I can not wait to read the rest.
Sunday, 20 November 2005 21:25
um ItsaWash next please! I do agree with the others though. They need to talk albeit everso breifly they need to get it verbally out in the open to know that its not gonna just be phyiscal...unless thats where you're headed which i dont think it is. And yeah I just got out of the bathtub and then read the story now i gotta go get in the shower...very very cold shower. sigh.
Sunday, 20 November 2005 22:47
I'll be in my bunk.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 20 November 2005 23:20
although it would be nice for them to talk briefly i want to see them get it on again. maybe if they talk and then that gives way to lust!! don't leave us hanging! Good job on all the fics!!! and remember, you promised us Jayne would have his turn.
Monday, 21 November 2005 02:41
Gah!
*thumps head on keyboard in frustration*
You stopped there???? I'm holding my breath until the next chapter is up, so if I turn blue and then die, it's your fault ;)
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 21 November 2005 12:34
I. Adore. This series.


Keep it up! I can't wait for the next part! (Two parts tonight was a treat too, by the way ^_^)
Monday, 21 November 2005 17:04
*pushes pen and paper across* so, chapter four, huh?

b
Thursday, 08 December 2005 23:33
The way Kaylee's and Jayne's relationship is working is all backwards because they got the physical stuff out of the way, but now what?

And as a writer, starting a relationship off that way for your characters can be tricky.

But I like how you have them slowly piece a relationship together.

The whole drying Jayne off was sensuous but still cute and in character for Kaylee, especially the nonchalant happy way she goes about it like saying, "raise your right wing".

I could totally have seen the Kaylee fry character doing something like this, smiling all the way! And it was a great "bonding" technique to have applied to her and Jayne!

Fave lines:

>>>Trucking a meal down to him yesterday had been a means to communion between them.>>>

You make it seem to easy!


>>>And his cock nearly hit her in the head.>>>

You might be amused why I like this one but because you had it stand as one sentence by itself and so blunt at that makes the action going on seem all the more "funny", in essence, or really, all the more "confusion" spilling forth.


>>>Well, somebody throw him a squirrel and let him ride a cab to nut town. He was about to go completely insane and it looked to be a very good place to be.>>>

The voice tense in this sentence might be out of place, but the wording itself is shiny! Great and unique description to describe how "befuddled" he's feeling.


Great way to end the story too:

>>>and filled her mouth with Jayne.>>>

AHHHHHH!!!! Now on to the next one!!!

Namaste,
SAHS

KIM







ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 10 December 2005 06:41
I like it I was torn at the end, kept wondering which I wanted Kaylee to do more, talk, or what she did. I think I like what happened. The writing was pretty seemless this time, it read quick and easy, the conversations laced with movement of the plot well and once again, the adult nature of it all has left me needing a break before I can read the next fic. Breath is caugh a bit in my chest. Thanks again Wash.
Saturday, 10 December 2005 09:47
Anon, do you know how much I needed someone to say that? That the fic made you not sure which you wanted from Kaylee at the end, for her to talk or act as she did? I was hoping somebody would feel that way, cause that's EXACTLY how I meant it to affect readers.

Glad that, after consideration, you liked what she did. Confession: Typing that last bit left me all-kindsa moistened. When I typed the last character in that line I knew it had to stay--no changes. Thanks again! Who are you?
Thursday, 27 April 2006 16:29
Shiny.
Wednesday, 23 August 2006 00:25
Another fine exposition of this "washie" talent you have to put your reader right behind Kaylee, not that I'd be interested in a "showering Jayne or nothin', but I must say I was there, and thats the wonderful thing you do, put me there.

Jayne jumped, hands reaching for weapons that weren’t on his wet naked hip. *Saw it and laughed my ruttin' off. Jayne at his most "vulnerable" bein all nekkid and such. At least he still had his gun.

He was red hot though, not a shiver to spare. *not a shiver to spare, awesome!

Well, somebody throw him a squirrel and let him ride a cab to nut town. *see, this is so you, and takin' something like a squirrel and making it work perfectly right here, is why I love your work so much.

Inara was wrong. Words weren’t what was needed here. *and I have n.......

*pulls self off floor, and back to computer, on to part 4.

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