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The Measure of a Jayne, Part 5 (Conclusion)

Sunday, November 6, 2005

You didn't think the other parts were NC17? Try this end to delayed satisfaction on for size then. Jayne and Kaylee naked in Jayne's bunk. Lemme know how you like it, baby.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4979    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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You can find the whole story by hitting "more fanfics" when you see it on the Blue Sun screen. It will bring up an alphabetical story listing. Go to "T" for The Measure of a Jayne," Parts 1-4.

The Measure of a Jayne, Part 5- Conclusion

Kaylee washed and dried the few dishes on the tray she’d just brought back up from Jayne’s lap. Smiled at remembering how the food put out his side of the heated argument with Simon she’d walked in on there in Jayne’s quarters. The good doctor might have come there spoiling for an unfair fight, harboring some misguided hope that since Jayne was still poorly this might be a grand time for Simon to sternly lecture the big mercenary, take him down a notch or two.

Simon was pursuing a potential beating just when his salvation walked up in the form of a shapely ace mechanic in overalls. Kaylee was witness to the fact that Jayne did not lack the strength to stand. Didn’t lack in nothin’ he needed to quell Simon's shouting, apparently. And stand he did, fury and caged strength flexing and toiling, ready to lay Simon out flat on the deck, in sudden dire need of a doctor himself.

But a heartbeat before it came to that, Kaylee the peacemaker had swooped down with her tray of good nourishing food like a boxed picnic on a summer’s day. Lured Jayne’s fists into going from coiled up and ready to rain down hell to simple appendages gripping a spoon and fork in the space of the time it took Kaylee to step forward and sit down on the big man’s bunk, patting the place at her side for him to sit down and eat.

As his raging appetite showed, Jayne clearly didn’t need as much help from her or Simon, not near’s much as before. Simon was lucky Kaylee was there to look out for his welfare, she figured. But hell, Jayne still needed Simon too; there was things Kaylee could not, would not do.

The patient would do well to remember that fact and work harder at taking lip from the well-meaning doctor from time to time if need be. Kaylee was fine as a junior nurse in trai

Comments
Sunday, 06 November 2005 11:12
Wonderful. I loved the ending. It was a great conclusion to the story. Yes please write more.
Sunday, 06 November 2005 12:43
That was... Yeah, that was sumthin'...
So good. Are you going to write more Jaylee? Please?
Sunday, 06 November 2005 13:32
yup, you're good. Anytime you feel the urge to write more, don't even hesitate.

If that urge should happen to lead you to writing the next time when Jayne's in the dirver's seat or that shower scene Jayne mentioned or. . . well. . .whew is it hot in here?

You rock! Love this
“When you come back tomorrow, Kaylee, don’t wear any panties under them overalls.”

and this cracked me up
"Hell, a massive Firefly class ship and all her systems, running smoother than chicken fat on a glass doorknob weren’t no kind of small ‘complishment."
Sunday, 06 November 2005 16:36
Awww, that was excellent. I liked the last bit, about Kaylee planning kisses that lasted for days.
Sunday, 06 November 2005 16:45
That was all manner of hot (like I wasn't gonna like it, bein' all Jaylee like it is).

Ya gotta have a nice NC-17 everynow and again. You did it well.
Sunday, 06 November 2005 17:12
Y'all sure do know how to turn a girl's head! Those phrases you took the time to say were your faves? Nice of you to say, gives me ideas on which way to take things.

To my first Beta on Part 1(Jacqui) and my first stalker (Lil Kristy): Thanks for the full-on happy-on you're giving me. :0)
Sunday, 06 November 2005 19:00
Woo..That was..That was..Woo.. Very-

NAH! Im just joshin with ya! I didnt read a thing of it! But I always do review to keep your confidence and courage up! Your go girlfriend!

10! 10! 10!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 06 November 2005 19:16
Finally!!! Just what a gal needs, some good conclusion. Great story, (just a tiny nitpick-the previous mechanic's name was Bester not Bender)But hey if that's all you missed you're doin pretty dang good.
Sunday, 06 November 2005 19:55
sweet merciful buddha, you sure know how to write kinkiness...

b
Sunday, 06 November 2005 20:19
Sexirific. I'd submit it to literotica, but maybe just the second half (a little build up and then the sex itself), with a link back to here for the people who want to read the whole story. That way, you'd attract both people who want sex and people who want Firefly, and send both back to fireflyfans.net. You can't stop the signal.

She’d seen better. I love it!
Monday, 07 November 2005 04:32
Oh.
Sorry. The 75 hits were me...re-reading a couple few times!
And you can bet I'll do it again... and maybe again!

And no. No, do NOT tell me this is all over! You have to give Jayne his turn. Kaylee promised, after all! And you wouldn't want to make our sweet Kaylee into a liar, would you?

Okay, I gotta go kick Mal out of the shower before he uses all the cold water or I ain't gonna get any rest at all tonight.
Wednesday, 09 November 2005 03:54
Alright baby girl...I'm gonna take the podium now and break it down yet once again...dang it, aren't you gettin' tired of all this sunshine being blown at ya????

A good writer??? Hmm..what is that? Someone who can tell a good story? Someone who can string words together well? No, it's someone who can make you believe you're there in the storyline and that you're being taken into those characters worlds. In other words, the ability to suck someone in and have them rooting and cheering for the characters involved.

The tension was amazing in this and the rest and you certainly didn't disappoint at the end. You hooked us, laid everything out and got down to business and left us w/our tongues hanging out of our mouths because of being so enamored by how you told it.

Your interpretation of the Kaylee/Jayne characters have been second to none, a unique voice with an even more unique prose style of writing.

Excellent job!!! I am not worthy and after reading this installment, I may never be worthy...

I'm telling Adam, Wash....*LOL*

Strength and honor, sister....

Cheers!
NIPNIP
Thursday, 10 November 2005 00:58
Oh, yeah. Definitely a good conclusion.

Let me just say? HALLELUJAH! Heheh...
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 10 November 2005 09:24
hooooooeeeee.

i'm in need of some release about now...good job, little one!
Friday, 11 November 2005 19:05
Thank you, thank you all. Feedbackers are my bestest friends. Good or bad, I've gotta hear it.

Hey, Anonymous (67.189.60.183): Your comment was particularly gratifying, lol. Short and sweet but very to the point, lol.

Can anybody give some good ideas for how to take this pairing furter in the near future? I'm thinking about taking Jayne back to adolescence and his first encounter with the "kindly older woman" who taught him where to put it and what to do to get it just right. Yeah? How about other ideas from you too?
Sunday, 13 November 2005 01:17
Your writing is done really well and you've captured the traits of the characters excellently!

I do like the idea of going back in time... if she taught Jayne so well then maybe... I can learn a thing or two. ;)

Thursday, 17 November 2005 05:20
well itsa i can sum it all up w/this-now i gotta go take a cold very cold shower!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 17 November 2005 22:46
naughty hot! whew! Great ride
BRYSONTHEBROWNCOAT
Sunday, 04 December 2005 12:02
Oh, Wash. I think I'm still a little too, umm, well... aroused to write a good review. I must be bad if I had to just come out and say aroused. I loved this addition Wash, follows the theme so well. Delayed satisfaction, it wasnt just forshadowing, it was the real soul of this series. It was all a waiting game, a coy game of stroke and wait. It paied of very well for you Wash. It would seem like writing, much like sex is a marathon, not race. I have to say you did an even better job on this than in part four's naughtiness. Really, I've written this much and I can still feel a heat warming my body, burning in parts and my skin is hot. I'm sure I'll be fine soon, but still. I wanted you to know that this is not only brilliant writing (consistant, well worded, interesting naritive, and brilliant atmosphere) but arrousing enough to make me want to show the author my appreciation in an unorthadox way. *Grins* I cant wait to start the next series.

You're great Wash.
Sunday, 08 January 2006 13:14
Just read this series again cause I think it's one of the best I've read.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 09 January 2006 20:13
You are one sick bitch....I loved it!! As Mal would say, "Whoa. Good Bible."
You got the language/vocabulary of the characters down pat, and built to a satisfying (ahem!) conclusion. I also like how you wove tidbits from the show into the narrative.
As a professional internet writer/editor, however, I found the prose a bit too wordy at times. You used two or more words when one would have done nicely...but as a nitpicky Virgo, I tend to quibble. Good stuff!
Now, how about Jayne & Inara? Maybe she gives him a freebie just to satisfy her curiosity about the whole man-ape thing??
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 16 January 2006 00:20
That was amazing!!
Very well written...........Actually I think I need to go take a cold shower after that one!!

Keep 'em Comin'!!
(no Punn intended)
DARKANGELLOVESFIREFLY
Monday, 16 January 2006 00:23
The above comment was me as well.

I have a Question, I must have missed it somewhere along the line but what is Jayne's issue with kissin'?


Someone please help me!!!
Wednesday, 18 January 2006 13:57
DarkAngel, thank ya for the shiny feedback. I love it!

In Firefly/Serenity Jayne never does explain fully his issue with kissin'. In one ep he mentions to the crew that he never kisses women on the mouth--remember when Mal got kissed by Sapphron (Our Mrs. Reynolds) and the sleeping lipstick made him pass out? That's Jayne's excuse, but who knows for sure?

I have an odd fanfic going called The Way of Jayne in which he's 14 years old and fixin' to have his first time with a woman (well, eventually he will) and I plan on giving you all the details of why he really won't kiss, what set him on that path. Have a look at that and let me know what you think, if you will.

If you prefer present-day Jayne (as I do, I like him all fully-formed and flexin' his muscles) you could read about how Kaylee gets him used to kissin' in The Pleasuring of Kaylee.

Thanks again.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 15 March 2006 09:53
fantastic, absolutely fantastic... more please.
Wednesday, 26 April 2006 10:53
Shiny.
Thursday, 23 November 2006 09:19
Wow. Yum. Could wish for the next few rounds to be filled out from your imagination <EG>.


Vera

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