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One to Many chap 5

Friday, October 7, 2011

So, can things get worse? Sure they can. Mal Reynolds and his crew find themselves in a position that they had better find a way out of, and soon. An opportunity presents itself for one of Serenity’s crewmembers….will they take advantage? You’ll find that there’s more to that question than I can tell right now….read on.

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One To Many- chap 5

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It wasn’t a bird of prey, it was a scavenger. Perched high atop a rocky outcropping it viewed the entire rugged landscape with binocular vision. It noticed the trespassers of it’s territory down below. It spread it’s feathers wide.

From expanded wingtip to wingtip, it seemed to be measuring the vastness of it’s abode. It screeched a warning to the invaders, “This is my territory! You have no reason for being here unless you be a corpse, or about to become one!”

The men in dark suits standing in the rocky sand below barely gave the screams of the scavenger bird notice. Their mission more important than any distraction of some desert dweller. They were working on finalizing the details on what they would do next.

“ So, you head to the Alliance compound at Fort Oliver to secure the remainder of Serenity’s crew, while I head into the void and await your arrival. After the rendezvous we will make contact with our superiors and await instructions on our next move.”

The shorter of the two looked at the taller man.

“ What if things go wrong?”

The taller suited fellow wearing blue gloves looked at his companion,

“ Nothing will.”

“ And the others, Riley and his crew?” The shorter questioned.

“ We do what we always do. Out here in the desert is a fine place, don’t you think?” He looked over to the big boulder on which the big, dark scavenger bird was sitting , “ He’s hungry. The creatures on the rim need to be fed just as the ones who rule the universe. We do what we can. ”

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Malcolm Reynolds awoke with a jolt. For some reason he had lost consciousness while tied to the bulkhead of the Alliance shuttle he and his fellow captives were being transported in. He looked over at Zoe and Jayne. They had been out cold also, but were now regaining their senses.

“ Captain, where are we?” Zoe questioned while rubbing her

Comments
Saturday, 08 October 2011 03:51
Really liked this chapter, BrucePluto. I thought your sequence getting into the thoughts of Simon, Kaylee, Wash and River as each sat in their cell was an effective set of contrasts. Kaylee is just so cheery! And Wash's humor is his source of resilience. Your bookend scenes with Mal, Zoe, and Jayne aboard the ship were also effective. Leave it to Jayne--he really is no dummy, whatever pains he may take to appear to be a lunkhead. I do hope that his decision to "deal" with the suit guy is not a serious mistake. And...not that I would know (it's your story and you can do what you want :-) ), but I felt like maybe the man in the suit was a little too...human? almost nice? Of course he needn't be the same Blue Hands as we saw in the show...I think Joss is on record as saying there were more than just a pair of them...but the Blue Hands we saw in the show struck me as being a bit more...aloof...antiseptic...unmoved by human emotions and considerations. Just sayin'. In any case, if Jayne is able to take advantage of that residue of humanity in the man to get them all out of trouble, then that's great.
Saturday, 08 October 2011 05:46
ebfiddler, Thanks for your comments….yes I was looking to break the story down a bit by dividing it up into sections. I think the trick to writing fan-fiction may be to write them as if they were a true tv episode, hence commercial breaks and all. Of course the commercial breaks are all about promoting “Blue Sun” products (wink).

Now I will address the rest of your comments with somewhat of a riddle.

ebfiddler my friend, you are a detective of fine detail……for someone having witnessed the genius of Firefly for only a year and a half…..in my opinion, you certainly have a tight grasp of those who populate the verse. Your writing shows me such. Those little things….. they tell so much. Anyway, I really do appreciate the feedback.

I hope to throw some surprises at folk that read my stories. I do quite enjoy when the landing is thought to be in San Diego when it actually lands in Boston….(smile)

BPZ
Sunday, 09 October 2011 00:28
"He looked over to the big boulder on which the big, dark scavenger bird was sitting "

I imagine that is not standard - or legal - Alliance operating procedure.

"Jayne relaxed his blade against the man’s throat. His expression changed from one of aggression, to one of opportunity.

“ What sort of deal?” He asked."

Something tells me that even Jayne wouldn't really work with spooks looking to lock him up and doublecross him, though he might pretend like it.
Sunday, 09 October 2011 23:33
Howdy Bytemite!

Jayne is an opportunist, imo. Whether he is ready to act on an opportunity, or not, he always like to hear the options. It makes his mouth water.

Also there are some things that can’t be said about the HOB guys at this moment. More will come out in the next chapter. Which is going up soon.

Thanks for the feedback BM…

BPZ

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