AMDOBELL

Wednesday, 06 October 2004 00:05

Oooh, this series is so gorram good and I loved this part. Felt kind of uneasy in places for Zoe and Mal with the Preacher prying so deeply and intimately into their relationship to each other. I can't wait to see how he talks to Wash and how those green eyed dragons get slayed. Just don't want to see any of our Big Damn Heroes get hurt. *Xie xie ni*, your writing is shinyness personified. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me

MERRIE

Wednesday, 06 October 2004 06:50

Wow. I have absolutely no idea how you consistantly manage to write such wonderful chapters of this story, I just know that I am in awe. Get the whole thing published when it's finished-hopefully not soon-and I'll stand in line to get my copy.

Wonderful wonderful psychological insights into the characters. Marvelous job.

-Merrie

KISPEXI2

Wednesday, 06 October 2004 08:30

I'm a bit overwhelmed ... Poor old Book - fancy having to sort *that* out.

I love the idea that Mal and Zoe are kind of hiding behind each other. That they can talk about the other's problems but not their own. And ofcourse there is a deep, deep love in that, but also a lot of defensiveness.

Really felt Mal's anger at Zoe being made to feel weak when she wasn't/isn't. And Zoe's frustration and pain. Very believable.

All through this story you've avoided the temptation to paint Mal and Zoe as totally good guys and the bit where Mal recalls helping Zoe kill the guard was a chilling reminder that the pair of them can be dangerous if pushed. Even so, I had to laugh at Mal complaining about getting tired of holding the guy down. Talk about gallows humour!

Finally, the kiss. Oh dear, oh dear ...

JENDANDY

Wednesday, 06 October 2004 12:42

My only problem is, I haven't read any of the previous chapters but you can bet yer ass I'm going to now.
This work is incredible, so deep and smartly written...wow, wow, wow!! I just want to print all your stories out now and curl up in bed with 'em. :)
You have a great talent at writing, thanks so much for sharing it with us. I look forward to reading more from you, looks like I have a lot to catch up on!

JENDANDY

Wednesday, 06 October 2004 12:50

Me again. You know what I loved about this? I could almost feel Mal and Zoe's discomfort. Hell, hearing about their past made me a bit uncomfortable too!
Uuuuuuuuughh, I can't believe how much I've missed of this story. Gonna take me probably a week to catch up!

ANONYMOUS

Wednesday, 06 October 2004 18:24

This story is always amazing. Each chapter gets deeper into the real heart of Mal and Zoe and the crew of Serenity.

Interesting reaction from that kiss though.

JEBBYPAL

Thursday, 07 October 2004 03:29

One of the best chapters yet. You know that old saying: "Don't tell, show"? Well, you already showed us all of it and because/despite it, this telling worked fabulously. Loved the mal/book part at the end. For some reason though, just had this image of Mal in constant motion, going throughout the ship as he told it (though I know, he didn't). could feel how much he needed/wanted to move away from what he had to talk about.

Zoe/Mal talk was good too:) Everyone just talked so perfectly..almost could see it on my tv screen. Off to sulk now.

CASTIRONJACK

Friday, 08 October 2004 05:02

HmmHmm...

Interesting to see this laid at the Preacher's feet.

Good show as always,

Keep flyin'

HURRYSUNDOWN

Friday, 08 October 2004 13:41

This morning the random quote generator fed me the paragraph that starts with "Mal's eyes held hers." I figure anybody who sees just that without having read any more is probably sitting in front of their monitor going "Oh, *damn*."

Also reminded me that I hadn't yet commented on how impossibly shiny this story continues to be. Each new turn in the character development manages to be at the same time completely logical and still a wonderful surprise. That's no small talent you have, my dear. *g* Anxiously awaiting the next chapter ...

ANGUALUPIN

Sunday, 10 October 2004 05:30

I am constantly amazed at how you manage to get inside the character's heads so perfectly. Your writing is beautiful and so rare that it reminds me of, well, Kaylee and strawberries. Which is perhaps an incongruous thing to be thinking of whilst reading the incredible emotional turmoil you're putting the characters (and us) through, but take it as a complement. ;)

ANONYMOUS

Wednesday, 13 October 2004 15:44

Oh my! This is a beautiful, heartrending chapter, and the depth of insight into the characters is marvellous. I really appreciate how you never make the characters victims.

Cant wait for the next chapter.. *sighs*
Thanks! Carissa.