Blue Sun Room FICTION - MYSTERY

The Wages of Sihnon pt 1

Tuesday, February 26, 2008

Inara travels to Sihnon - meanwhile a mystery seems to be brewing. NEW FIC pt 1

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3200    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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(Disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations by Joss Whedon, Tim Minear and the other writers of Firefly)

Preparations for a dance – part one:

Experience the beauty of Sihnon.

A typical tourism advert – it flared across the redundant minor monitors of the shuttle cockpit – the main screens were busy showing data, readouts, references and instructions from flight control. The windows – which had been dark from their Atmo- Solarised cloaking - were gradually revealing the reality of the world below.

It was a world that the pilot knew well. The white tipped mountains, radiant in the glow of the sunrise and the long undulating stretches of the Guild city wall, the ancient wall, the beautiful wall – topped with flags and crests and turrets and bustling along every inch with carts and rickshaws and pilgrims and merchants and traders and tourists and – the circling and unassailable wall.

So, the advert was unnecessary… but it played on nonetheless and it was not ignored and it was not insignificant.

Even as she eased her shuttle through the familiar gyrations of entry, twisting in through scarlet laced streamers of cloud – even as her hands moved expertly over the controls, brushing aside a silk scarf to crank the air brake mechanism beneath (there were tiny wishing bells woven around the handle) –

Even as she swore in violent Chinese at an oncoming joy-craft apparently buzzing the shuttle for fun –

Even as she followed directions to circle her shuttle around in a frustrating holding pattern –

Even in the midst of all of this… the advert played to her and the pilot listened – and as the pilot listened so she remembered – a kaleidoscope of memories and chaotic associations, triggered almost subliminally by the adverts inane narrative…

Experience the beauty of Sihnon.

“Well - we’re all running from something I suppose.”

Seemed so long ago now – felt like just yesterday too… that she had been stood on the high walkways of the ma

Comments
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 12:15
Solid ten. AWESOME beginning! :D I love The Irritable Detective and the rhythm of the words, the focus on Inara (of course..) and the way you don't rush, you build a picture and a mood and people into it that feel fully developed in just a few lines of dialogue.

Most intrigued! Write more, write soon! *g*
2X2
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 12:34
Wow! I am *very* intrigued!!! You have caught me and pulled me right in with this! I cannot wait to see more!
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 14:04
I agree with AgentRouka, you've definately got rhythm - stream of consciousness writing. Takes a while to get used to, but once you're hooked, you're hooked.
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 18:49
You're the one responsable for me being addicted to this story, wytch!

Keep flying ;)
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 20:10
You, are a veritable wordsmith.

I love your characters, so rich. Nothing frivolous, everything flows perfectly and makes perfect sense.

Plus your stuff goes a long way to widening the picture that is Firefly.
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 20:57
Nice start. Looking forward to more.
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 21:51
MMmm,I have to wonder if the Irritable Detective is not mentioned by name because we might recognise him? Intriguing start, can't wait to see what happens next. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 22:47
I like. Some noir styled don't give a shit detectives, an inhouse investigator, kidnapped neophyte companions, and Inara returns to Sihnon for...we'll have to wait and see.
Tuesday, 26 February 2008 23:44
I've been waiting for a good Inara story. Great start!
Wednesday, 27 February 2008 02:21
This is great! Nice to see Inara portrayed so well. It looks like you've put a lot of thought into her backstory. Yay!!

I'm looking forward to your updates.

2X2
Wednesday, 27 February 2008 17:16
Read this again, and possibly love it even more the second time through.

This line, that did catch my attention the first time through, grabbed at me even more this time, and I can't help but wonder at it:

– and thinking of Book and the Haven massacre she’d heard about –

Does this mean we are in AU territory?

Very curious :o)
Wednesday, 27 February 2008 18:11
Fantastic! I can't wait to see where this is going! I love a good Inara story. But yeah, I'm a tad confused - is this an AU? And what's this about the Blue Hands cuting into Serenity and stealing River!?! (Great imagery, btw!) So many questions!!! I can't wait to read more. I hope you'll update soon. *chews nails*
Wednesday, 27 February 2008 23:22
very cool. really builds up interes while setting up characters and setting wonderfully, not an easy thing to get right all at once. A few minor errors, but who doesn't hey!
loved it.

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