Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Hard Times - Part One

Sunday, December 16, 2007

Set post-BDM, with the crew picking up the pieces and getting on with life on Serenity the best they can. Zoe is mourning Wash, Mal is feeling guilty, and there's generally not much of a joy surplus right now. Characters/pairings as per the series/film, but a new character will appear in the crew's life a few chapters down the line...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2721    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer thingy: Firefly/Serenity are owned by other folks and not by me, though I appreciate being able to write some stuff purely for fun inspired by the Firefly 'Verse.

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This is my first ever fanfic post: kindly feedback will be kindly appreciated. I've enjoyed reading contributions from many others in BSR, so I've finally got up the nerve to put up some stuff I've written, for all you nice people to have a look. Initial chapters of this story may be a bit angsty but I promise it'll get livelier as the story goes on... That's assuming anyone out there would like to read more!

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The alarm sounded, its small but penetrating bleep piercing through the darkness of the cabin. A faint green light glowed from the little digital clock, revealing a shape on the bed wound in the covers. The shape stirred: Zoë twisted over towards the clock and reached out with her eyes shut. Her fingers found the shut-off button and the bleeping stopped, leaving only the faint green glow stretching across the bed. Zoë pulled her hand back and let her arm fall across her face, pressing across her closed eyes. They felt wet. She wiped her hand across them and breathed in. Got to stop this crying in my sleep. Getting to be a habit.

Opening her eyes she looked up into the darkness. She couldn’t remember anything of her dream. She never could. Only this waking, every morning, with the emptiness inside her: the feeling of something gone missing forever. An ache like a missing limb, never diminishing, never going away.

She turned over onto her side in the bed. The ache turned with her, sunk deep in her chest and belly. Even now, in this smaller cabin she’d moved to, when she woke and turned over in the bed her arm fell onto the empty space beside her and she missed him so badly it could have happened yesterday. Missed his warmth, his morning smile of welcome and promise. Missed the touch of a body she’d

Comments
Sunday, 16 December 2007 18:49
angsty and somber...you weren't kidding

written with intelligence and insightfulness

characterizations and dialogue are well done, especially, Mal, Zoe and Inara

I'd read more

Sunday, 16 December 2007 19:11
I love this! I think that this is what life on Serenity would've been after the movie - at least for a while. Kaylee almost made me cry with her innocence and I'm glad that Mal is opening some to Inara - she's the best person to talk to (with being a companion an all) because if he's being helped, he could help others/ Zoe as well...Can't wait to read more!

Keep flying ;)
Sunday, 16 December 2007 19:14
Very well written and your characterizations were spot on. Loved your dialog, especially what was going through Mal's head. Wonderful begining!
Sunday, 16 December 2007 20:33
Good work. You've got a good ear for voices --

I'll keep reading.
Sunday, 16 December 2007 21:43
This feels very true to the characters and how they would react in the aftermath of Miranda. Well done on an excellent start, I look forward to seeing where you are heading with this. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 16 December 2007 21:43
Very well done! I'll be looking for the next chapter.

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