Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Hard Times - Part Six

Monday, February 11, 2008

Kaylee gets a shock when Serenity’s stowaway comes out of hiding, Jayne gets handy with a wrench, and Mal has to make a difficult decision.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2505    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer thingy: Firefly/Serenity are owned by other folks and not by me, though I appreciate being able to write some stuff purely for fun inspired by the Firefly 'Verse. All constructive comments and feedback from you shiny readers out there much appreciated!

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After Leon had felt the ship undock and move off from the prison, relief had rushed through him like strong drink, filling his head with fog. Sitting hidden in the space behind the panel, feeling the pulsing hum of the ship’s engines, his body had become suddenly weary: he slid down until he lay on his side on the floor, head pillowed on one hand. Even the pain from his injured arm wasn’t enough to keep him awake. He sank into exhausted sleep and let everything fall away into darkness.

It was pain that woke him at last. He must have turned in his sleep, twisting onto his other side and jarring his arm. He woke suddenly and uncomfortably, taking a gasping breath as a sharp ache made him shift his weight away from his left side. For a moment he didn’t know where he was: the blackness around him felt choking and panic sent him scrabbling into a sitting position. His shoulder knocked into a wall and he jerked away from it, tried to stand. The top of his head hit the ceiling of the compartment and he crouched down again, his hand going to his head. Shit. Slow down, yu bun duh. He sat back against the compartment wall, putting out a hand to steady himself. His fingers touched metal gritty with dust. Okay. Sit still. Remember where you are now? Stowed away on that ship? So it might be a good idea not to go pounding on the panels with your head and letting the crew know you’re hiding in here.

Leon waited for his thudding heart to slow down, leaning back against the wall. He listened hard for any sounds beyond the panel of his hiding place, but all he could hear was the low hum of the ship’s engine, a comforting gentle vibration. We’re still moving. Goi

Comments
Monday, 11 February 2008 23:44
Your Mal voice and character was perfect. Great description of Leon's rage and frustration. Simon's doctor mode was perfectly timed, and Jayne's pride turned fear was spot on! Looking forward to more.
Tuesday, 12 February 2008 00:06
Mal's reaction was perfect. I'm sure he is fairly weary of stowaways, at this point.

Jayne, wrenching him...perfect.

poor Leon, his pain is so real
Tuesday, 12 February 2008 08:45
Beautifully written. I agree that Mal is well characterised, but I think it would take a lot for him to space Leon, although if he thought it was going to endanger any of his crew, he'd do it in a heartbeat.
Wednesday, 13 February 2008 17:58
Thanks for your positive feedback, folks. Hope you enjoyed the bit where Leon calls Mal a go tsao de Alliance ass-kisser! Leon has been through a world of pain, but maybe he and Mal have more in common than they realise...
Tuesday, 19 February 2008 17:19
If Leon was Simon, Mal would've punched him by now. :)

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