AMDOBELL

Friday, 27 August 2004 11:34

Oh wow, don't I just love this story to pieces? You write so well and all your Zoe and Mal dialogue is absolutely brilliant. Love how the tangle of what Harken did to them is such an absorbing piece of ongoing drama. I really hope Wash sorts himself out though because if he doesn't he could lose his *bao bei* for good. Very shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me

ARTSHIPS

Friday, 27 August 2004 16:16

That was brilliant, Guildsister. A very satisfying conclusion to an excellent story. Hope an epilogue forces itself out of you showing how well Wash comes around.

SUVIE

Friday, 27 August 2004 16:19

Ack - hope this isn't the conclusion as there is still much to be worked out. Not too mention just the love of reading your storylines Guildsister. Look forward to the next chapter.

GUILDSISTER

Friday, 27 August 2004 17:05

Nope--not the conclusion, but it's on the not too distant horizon--that's galactic horizon and using light years as a measurement ;-) I'm not rushing toward it--rough estimate at about the 3/4 point with about 25,000 words left (this chapter was 5000--most have run 3000 to 6000). Still have the preacher's story/backstory to deal with, Inara, River, Wash, and a whopping big chunk of Mal/Zoe backstory that impacts the ongoing Wash story.

SUVIE

Friday, 27 August 2004 17:31

:-) wheewwwww

T

Friday, 27 August 2004 19:34

awww, it was great.

IGNUSDEI

Friday, 27 August 2004 19:44

uh oh.

Kaylee!

0_0

ANONYMOUS

Saturday, 28 August 2004 15:12

You have a great grasp on the characters. Your writing skills are fantastic. Let me know if you ever write something than fanfic.

Itty bitty point: Pregnancy is usually determined by hormone levels in either a urine or blood test. A physical exam would determine nothing positively at the early stages. Doubt that would change in this 'Verse.

KISPEXI2

Saturday, 28 August 2004 15:23

As always, there is so much to adore here.
Let me list a few precious bits:

"No damned colors but their own." I love this because - to me - it's what Firefly is all about. Existentialism an' all. But so neatly expressed in FF-ese. And then, just as I was munching on that one, here comes:

"He couldn’t have heard her bare footsteps, but must have felt her presence arrive behind him, stepping into her place beside him."
Her place. Yeah!

And you have that Whedon touch when it comes to comedy. Kind of bitter, kind of tender, utterly realistic.

"Score one for avoidance ... One for denial."

And the plot! The way it brings out each character little secrets. Wow. And wow again.



Oh, yes. And thanks for explaining the Jayne-slashing and label-ripping to me. I had my own ideas about the latter but could never think of anything plausible for the former. I stand, ofcourse, convinced by your take on both.

JEBBYPAL

Saturday, 28 August 2004 15:51

as always fabulous. Was wondering when the pregnancy issue was gonna come back to slap the heroes in the face. So now was it hallucination, kaylee, or something else.

Fine chapter of wrapping up some plot lines and letting Mal/Zoe work out the issues of the disk somewhat. Looking forward to seeing the next twist you give us.

Loved the bit about Vera by the way. Hmm, maybe all my jokes about a jayne/inara pairing aren't so wrong? LOL

KISPEXI2

Sunday, 29 August 2004 09:16

Meant to comment on the three and three. Echo from the previous chapter, yes. But I'm thinking the trinity and death of absolute authority. Is that reading too much into it?

GUILDSISTER

Sunday, 29 August 2004 09:37

Kispexi2--No, not reading too much in. I've been running some religious symbolism in throughout, particularly the trinity aspect. No distinct plot-point meaning, just a general thematic reinforcement (the recurring buried/grave/rising from the dead aspect).

NEROLI

Monday, 30 August 2004 20:54

Amazing story, so well written and plotted, so many wonderful moments, such dead-on characterizations.

Absolutely stunning work, Guildsister.