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A Mighty Thorn In a Mighty Paw - Ch. 50

Friday, February 2, 2007

Just throwing more men in the way...

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INT. PALADIN - BRIG

Mal sits on the edge of his cot, looking more coherent than before. He stands gingerly, walking slowly toward the cell door. Jaxx snaps to attention, raising his weapon slightly. Kayner's hands also adjust their grip on his rifle.

Mal holds up his hands in surrender.

MAL: Just lookin’ to get the blood flowin’, son. I got no bluster left in me.

JAXX: Let’s keep it that way.

INT. PALADIN - HALL (ADJ. TO BRIG)

Four members of Bravo Team are spread out in both directions down the hall, closely guarding both corners.

INT. PALADIN - BRIG

Bravo One enters the Brig and steps close to Jaxx, saying something too soft for the prisoners to hear. Jaxx adjusts his grip on his rifle and scowls. He follows Bravo One out the door, leaving Serenity’s crew with curious looks at Kayner, who turns to face the door as well, weapon at the ready.

JAYNE: What’s goin’ on?

KAYNER: Seems your pal is hell-bent on gettin’ himself killed.

Most of the crew furrows their brow at the comment.

INT. SERENITY - CARGO BAY

The cargo bay is eerily bathed in a red glow, more shadows than light.

Echo One descends fore/starboard stairs to the catwalk, slowly walking along the starboard side with Echo Two following. They split up at the cross-catwalk, Echo One holding while Echo Two crosses to check the port catwalk. Echo Three descends to the main deck.

Echoes Four through Six creep in from the rear entrance, immediately fanning out. They snake between the crates, checking all corners.

A loud clang and hum breaks the quiet, yanking the Echoes’ heads toward the center of the cargo bay. The floor is splitting, revealing the second set of doors beneath. The Echoes slowly creep in that direction...

BOOM! Five flash bangs erupt from within the void now exposed beneath the doors. Echo Team roars in pain, hands shooting to their helmets to deactivate their night vision.

River appears behind Echo Two, kneeing him in the lower back and using that mome

Comments
Friday, 02 February 2007 07:04
Ooh...that ending doesn't bode welll:(

Still...this chapter rocked massively! Between River's 6-on-1 fight in Serenity's cargo bay and Paul's Bravo Team asswhooping, the action level is sky high!

BEB

P.S. Decided to leave the manufacturer of Mal's sidearm as is, eh? Interesting choice, since Taurus Arms only seems to make either snubbies (which is what the gun really is...a disgused Taurus 85) or big-ass hand cannons;D
Friday, 02 February 2007 10:12
Oh Wow this piece rocks, very visual writing style that so suits the action. Flows very well. The appearance of the Interrogator at the end is chilling though. Can't wait for the next part! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 03 February 2007 02:58
Aaaaaawesome.

The Interrogator's entrance reminds me a bit of Darth Vader at Cloud City. I hope Mal just shoots him in the face. Where did River get five flashbangs? Oh. Off the out-of-commission troopers. I got it. It seems like the Paladin has a lot more fight left in it, and they're still above the Alliance facility, I believe. But I don't think they'd us the base to broadwave for back up, being the pride of the fleet and all.

This chapter's coolness factor: Omega Twelve.

-MG
Monday, 05 February 2007 08:52
MUAHAHAHAH. A.


Genius. Pure, kickass genius.

Something tells me that the Interrogator is much more of a match than anyone Paul has yet faced.

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