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A Mighty Thorn In a Mighty Paw - Ch. 43

Thursday, January 4, 2007

A screenplay taking place not long after the events of "Serenity."<p>No hesitation...

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INT. PALADIN - HANGAR

A ragged line of Alliance troops file down Serenity’s ramp, joking and shaking their heads. Two troops remain near Serenity, milling about in a loose perimeter, weapons down. The occasional hangar tech can be seen polishing a fighter or troop carrier, some with hatches open working on an engine.

INT. SERENITY - FORE HALL

River creeps silently down the hall, her gaze averted to the right. She descends the ladder into Zoe’s bunk and starts carefully sorting through her things.

INT. PALADIN - BRIG

The Brig door slides open to reveal Mal still being supported by the two troops. He is able to partially walk on his own. The crew all come forward in their cells to see their Captain.

The troops guide Mal to Cell Two. The door slides open and they walk him in, laying him down on the cot. The troops exit, the cell door closing immediately behind them.

The troops, Keeno and Barton, pause in front of Kayner and Jaxx.

JAXX: They get anything outta him?

KEENO: Bastard didn’t say a word. Had to pull it out of him.

Kayner shakes his head.

KAYNER: I just as soon rather have my nails pulled out, thanks.

BARTON: Nothing like havin’ your mind mixed up like home-made stir-fry.

KEENO: Fool-crazy part is, after he twists the man’s melon into mush, he orders us to treat the man with kid-gloves. Says we’ll regret it like nothin’ else if we don’t.

The two guards shrug.

Barton and Keeno nod at Jaxx and Kayner then exit the Brig.

Kaylee presses her face into the bars trying to get a look at Mal.

KAYLEE: Cap’n? Can ya hear me?

MAL (mumbling): Yeah.

KAYLEE: You okay?

MAL (groaning, mumbling): Feel like my brain’s been run through an engine.

ZOE: What do they know, sir?

MAL: Enough.

JAYNE: What the gui's that s'posed ta mean?

MAL (sitting up with a groan): I didn’t tell ‘em a thing, but they dug the contact’s name out o’ my skull.

INARA: Are you sure you’re all right?

MAL: I’ll live.

Jaxx and Kayner watch the interplay wit

Comments
Thursday, 04 January 2007 02:39
Holy Moly, what an awesome chapter! Everything terse, realistic, highly visual, a really great read. Realistic in attempting escape, realistic in it not..quite...going to plan.

This section just struck me as a great example of the chapter as a whole.

Jayne halts again. He peeks around the corners. His eyes widen considerably and he retracts.

JAYNE (hissing): Son of a bitch!

Zoe gives him an inquisitive look. Jayne shakes his head with a very angry expression, then gestures for Zoe to come forward and for Simon to watch their rear.


Waiting for more!
Thursday, 04 January 2007 03:49
No hesitation indeed.

Boy, Seafood is one badass mofo, taking down an armed Zoe and Jayne by hand, and not even breaking a sweat in the process. He might be evil (for now...right? Right?), but you gotta have respect for that.

Tell me, please Mr. KicksAlot, tell me that Paul and River face off. Two living weapons going at it (get you're minds outta the gutter, smutty minded fools) would be most excellent....choice is yours of course, and it seems the obvious route, which judgeing from the fic so far, is not the one you take (and the story is all the better for it).

Brilliant, as always.
Thursday, 04 January 2007 10:41
I knew that break out was too gorram easy but chilling when Paul takes out Zoe then Jayne, totally under his evil father's influence with not a flicker of remorse or conscience. As for Paul going off to get River, I hope our girl has kept more than a few surprises up her sleeve to take him down. It was also nice to see Inara and Zoe acting in concert though I am surprised Simon did not say anything when Paul mentioned about going to get River. This is tense and exciting, can't wait for the next chapter! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 06 January 2007 20:18
Hmm...this was a mighty brilliant chapter, HeWhoKicksAlot. Definitely loved how you wrote the crew's prison break - especially since it shows Inara successfully kicking some Purplebelly patootie ;D - and the Paul vs Jayne and Zoe hallway fight...though I am getting the feeling there's more to Paul's behaviour than simple brainwashing...

BEB

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