Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Undercurrents

Tuesday, April 11, 2006

Day is done, everyone’s whole, and dinner is served. Some observations are made.

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Title: Undercurrents

Author: Ana Sedai

Rating: PG

Character(s): BDC (Big Damn Crew)

Prompt: 039 - Dusk

Word Count: 998

A/N: 14/100 for M/R Joss100. Yes, I'm still here, and desperately wishing the end of the school year will hurry up already. I do want to get these done before I turn old and gray. ;)

Summary: Day is done, everyone’s whole, and dinner is served. Some observations are made.

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A dinner that wasn’t protein pack-based was a rare event on the ship, and usually only took place right after they’d gotten paid. Naturally, everyone tended to be in a good mood on such occasions.

Simon and Kaylee had scoured the local market for some halfway decent meat. Kaylee had pounced on the strawberries the second she’d seen them. They’d even managed to get their hands on some fresh vegetables. In short, it was the best damn meal the crew had enjoyed in quite awhile.

The conversation flowed better, too, and this time the subject happened to be their earlier meeting cum job offer.

“…So Badger’s tryin’ to get River alone for a little ‘conversation’. Nice as you please, the Cap’n asks him if he’s at all attached to the hat he’s wearin’ or the head that’s wearin’ it, ‘cause both were about to be riddled with holes.” Zoë always relished it when someone what deserved it got the what-for. “Badger just winks at River and saunters away, though I must say I’ve never seen a saunter at such high speed before.”

Mal, of course, tried to play it down. “I didn’t say that! I jus’ felt that I should give the man a little friendly warning, is all. Didn’t care to see our payday get unsmooth if’n he took it in his head to take on our little warrior woman here.”

Never mind that he’d wanted to rip the twitchy weasel a new one all throughout the entire exchange. He put the brakes on that particular train of thought right away.

River pursed her lips at him and sat up all prim and proper-lik

Comments
REAVERMAN
Tuesday, 11 April 2006 18:16
This is good stuff :). Post more soon, dong-ma?
Tuesday, 11 April 2006 18:26
Excellent, loved everyone's reactions and am wondering how Simon will take it once he gets an inkling. Thought it does not sound as if either River or Mal have acted on their deepening friendship. Can't wait for more! Ali D :~)
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ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 05:32
Hello there,

I liked this one. I'm glad that Inara took it so well, considering how upset she was when Mal slept with Nandy.

A lot of the Mal/River Fics tend to ring untrue because in the series theirs was more of a father/daughter relationship. But the wheel never stops turning, as they say, and things change. I think you caught the gradual shift perfectly.

This was great. Write more soon.
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 07:33
Well now...this was some delectible fic here, Ana. All manner of interesting in the various opinions on the burgeoning relationship between Mal and River:)

Though I have to kinda disagree with Anonymous about Inara. She isn't thinking evil revenge thoughts, but I get the niggling feeling she is lower on the acceptance scale about a possible Mal/River relationship than Kaylee seem to be, though she's more accepting that Simon would be;) Still...great insight here.

BEB
ANA
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 09:25
I'm thrilled that everyone thinks I got the characterizations and gradual attitude adjustments pretty well. I always feel like I'm either going too fast or too slow, so feedback (of *any* kind) is extremely helpful to me.

reaverman - Have no fear, I'm working on the next one as we speak.

Ali - No, they haven't acted on anything yet. River knows what she wants, but Mal's a tough nut to crack. Besides, it's important that they be more friends at first.

Anon. - Glad you think I'm handling this well. Inara was a tricky one.

BEB - You're right about Inara's acceptance. I tend to think that she'd reserve final judgment until she had more data, though. As for Simon, well, the man is no idiot, so they can't avoid him forever.

Thanks, everyone! :)
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 17:26
This was very nicely done all the way through! I thought you captured the characters thoughts realistically.

My fave line: "Jayne continued to shovel food into his mouth. He had his own priorities."

Absolutely brilliant!
Wednesday, 14 June 2006 18:38
bring on the holidays!!!

b

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