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Mal/River Prompt - Stand and Stand By

Sunday, August 6, 2006

Simon weighs in on Mal and River's relationship...thing.

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Title: Stand and Stand By

Author: Ana Sedai

Rating: PG

Character(s): Simon

Prompt: 086 - Silver

Word Count: 1,000

A/N: 21/100 for Mal/River Joss100.

Summary: Simon weighs in on Mal and River’s relationship…thing.

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It had been raining. That was really all Simon could remember about the day that he’d left home. It hadn’t been a storm, just a slow, steady, silver drizzle that made it seem like the entire planet was crying.

He himself had moved beyond tears long ago. All that was left now was cold hard purpose. His goal was clear: get River out. Everything else was details. His parents’ disappointment, his career in the toilet, cutting ties to everyone he’d ever cared about, none of it meant a damn thing. His baby sister was in pain, and he was going to save her. That was all.

Well, he’d gotten her out. Saving her, however, had proven to be infinitely more challenging. The wide-eyed girl of fourteen who had wanted so badly to learn had become…something else. Some one else. Oh, she was still mostly the old River, with her dances and wild stories, but she had an edge now, an edge as black as night, as black as the space that they now called home.

He hadn’t considered this a good thing. His mei mei had no business knowing how to most efficiently kill a man, or how to fire a gun, or knowing secrets worth killing hundreds for. But he’d be lying if he said she hadn’t borne it well. Her darkness was a part of her now, as much a part of her as her grace or her intelligence. She was more than forceful; she was a Force.

On some level, he knew that the days when he had the final say over River’s life were long gone. Kaylee had reminded him not-so-good-naturedly that River was almost a woman full-grown. “You gonna try and stand between her and everything the ‘verse dishes out? Can’t be done, Simon. You know that better’n anyone.”

And he knew that. He did. But…she

Comments
Sunday, 06 August 2006 03:32
Wow...I think I like it. It makes a whole lotta sense, if you think about it: young girl with hero complex about guy who does a lot to keep her safe... Hmm. I look forward to reading the next installment.
Sunday, 06 August 2006 03:56
While I do not like River/Mal, I think that this is a great explanation of how Simon would feel if River fell for any man. He would be fiercely overprotective and then determine that the guy had better do the honorable thing and love his sister with all his might - I'd love to see that convo between Mal and Simon though - that'll be some good stuff! Keep writing!
Sunday, 06 August 2006 08:34
This is excellent and needs a sequel! I want to see Simon have that talk with River then with Mal, after all he needs to know from River whether or not he needs to say anything to the Captain. Plus you can't make someone love you if the feelings aren't already there so he needs to find out how both of them really feel before interfering. I do love the sea change in Simon too, from initial horror at the thought of River and Mal together to recognition that it's not about what he wants but what makes his sister happy and whole. That's love. Ali D :~)
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FLYLOWFLYFAST
Sunday, 06 August 2006 14:24
I like how you've treated Simon's fanatical devotion to his sister. Sure, he might find the thought of Mal as River's paramour to be personally repugnant, but, when it's all in, his sister's health and happiness are all that really matter to him. Well done, as always.
Sunday, 06 August 2006 14:45
I love your writing style and how your words seem to flow so effortlessly. You really have a gift for this. Even though I don't consider myself a Mal/River shipper, you make me one for your stories. The story line in all your writing is so sensible, so logical, it's as if there could be no other choices for them - you make the relationship make so much sense. Please write more soon!
ANA
Sunday, 06 August 2006 18:03
Thank you all! Feedback is a writer's version of crack, and every fix is a good one. ;)

kacidilla: Hero complex? Hmm, never thought of that before. Interesting idea, though. I look forward to *posting* the next installment.

TamSibling: You have no idea what a boost my ego gets when someone who isn't a Mal/River fan says good things about my writing. Have no fear, Mal and Simon will have a talk. It just won't be for a while yet.

Ambodell: As always, I appreciate your comments. Simon will toss in his two cents eventually, but he knows that his role in River's life has evolved of late, from protector to supporter. It's a hard change for him, but he has a life of his own now, and he knows River has to find hers.

flylowflyfast: Yep, our buddy Simon does have a bit of trouble wrapping his brain around this, but he'll get over it. He'll have to.

Katesfriend: You're makin' me blush here! ;) Effortlessly, huh? At least they get across that way, 'cause they sure as heck don't come out that way. But a writer can consider herself successful if her readers understand what she wanted to say, and if they have fun in the process. Thanks so much for reading.
Monday, 07 August 2006 03:25
Gotta say, Ana...you definitely took a mighty fine road in exploring Simon's feelings about River falling for Mal.

Definitely could see Simon recalling what the weather was like the day he went off to rescue River from the Academy...and how he always knew what to make of River when she was younger. His current feelings also really ring true, in that River's been his Galatea figure (even if unintentionally) and having another man become her focus definitely is something Simon would deal with:)

While you say it's gonna take awhile to get to the Mal/Simon confrontation, I realy hope you continue to explore these kinds of third party observations about how things happen between the Captain and his Albatross:D

BEB
Monday, 07 August 2006 20:26
I loved this. I have a soft spot for good Mal/River fics, and yours are always so beautiful and unrushed. The third party perspective just tickles me to no end. I love the irony of Simon sort of getting what he wanted... to realize that maybe that's not really what he wants after all.

I'm always thrilled to see more of these from you, and now I get to go back and read the ones I've missed!

Thanks!
Tuesday, 08 August 2006 00:15
I really enjoyed this... I am a fan of Mal/River fics and I've read some of your other stories over on LJ. I'm looking forward to reading more. I love your writing style. Thanks for sharing.
Tuesday, 08 August 2006 14:14
I'm right up there with folks that don't go for Mal/River, but this is one I can take! I can totally see River being sweet on Mal, and him pulling away. And it could continue to develop slowly...

The mistake so many writers make is having these two fall right into bed together, which is just so not believeable (for me anyway). You're going about it in character, and telling it from Simon's POV is really cool.

Can't wait for that Mal/Simon conversation, to hear what Mal's thinking about it...
Thursday, 13 March 2008 23:08
As I am a bit new to the verse.... I am story reading...got here and can fund no follow..it there any? I really enjoyed it.

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