Blue Sun Room FICTION - DRAMA
Something From Nothing 5/?
Monday, March 27, 2006
A little confrontation, a lot of truth, the usual.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 4147 RATING: 9.0 (PG) SERIES: FIREFLY
I don't know when I'll get to update next, I have a funeral tomorrow and things the day after that.
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Rating: PG.
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Comments : Confrontations bring truths. (You'd think).
Previous Chapters:
, , and . **** Chapter Five: Tiny little footsteps ran up to her, she loved hearing them echo up off the ship floor. It sounded right, so very right. It looked right, too, seeing his face flushed red with excitement. "Mama!" James ran right up to her. "Mama, Grandpa comin' back?" Her throat closed up and she took his hands in hers. "What?" Kaylee spared a puzzled glance up to see Jayne in the door before looking back down. "No, sweetie, no. We talked about that, remember?" It hurt, seeing the light in his eyes dim that little bit. "Grandpa?" "Grandpa's gone, sweetie." She'd thought, at some point, that the words might have gotten easier over time. They didn't. No matter how many times she said them. "He's gone." James' bottom lip pouted. "Grandpa gone bye bye? With Nanna?" "Yes." She kissed his forehead. "They're gone and they ain't comin' back." He fit against her so easily, shapeless little barrel torso pulled up against hers as she wrapped her arms around his waist. His chin rested in the hollow of her neck and she felt his hot breath puff out over her skin. When she was sure James couldn't see her face anymore, Kaylee looked up at Jayne. Anger wasn't high up in the list of things she did well, but by the look on Jayne's face, she'd gotten her expression to say exactly what she was feeling. "What did you say
Comments
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 27 March 2006 07:23
Damn, I'm still nagged by what Kaylee isn't saying although the flashbacks to Mr. Hot Sticky Breath are sorta giving me an idea.
I liked that Jayne pointed out how she's changed and now the father/son thing is out between them. Simon examing him and the small exchange between he and Kaylee was a nice touch as well.
I'm really loving this story still. Fantastic writing and of course, there is never enough angsty Jaylee around. But you do handle the others nicely as well.
More whenever you can!
Savageamanda (who is up too late once again and too lazy to log in, as usual)
I liked that Jayne pointed out how she's changed and now the father/son thing is out between them. Simon examing him and the small exchange between he and Kaylee was a nice touch as well.
I'm really loving this story still. Fantastic writing and of course, there is never enough angsty Jaylee around. But you do handle the others nicely as well.
More whenever you can!
Savageamanda (who is up too late once again and too lazy to log in, as usual)
Monday, 27 March 2006 07:44
Have to admit...I thought from previous chapters that Kaylee had been in an abusive relationship because of the flashbacks. But I have come to realize/remember this: abuse doesn't have to be physical.....
I hope Kaylee can be helped by the crew....she needs comfort for both her sake and James'.
BEB
I hope Kaylee can be helped by the crew....she needs comfort for both her sake and James'.
BEB
Monday, 27 March 2006 10:51
Poor Kaylee. (Don't faint - I really said that *grin*). Psychological torture is sometimes worse than physical, though I've got a bad feeling there was some of that involved as well. You're taking your time in letting us know, and I have no complaint with that. The longer this story is, the better.
I could snuggle up to your Jayne and stay with him forever. He's just so gorram perfect.
In fact, I'm just gonna do that. Me 'n' Jayne'll be waiting here for soonish to arrive so's we can read more...
I could snuggle up to your Jayne and stay with him forever. He's just so gorram perfect.
In fact, I'm just gonna do that. Me 'n' Jayne'll be waiting here for soonish to arrive so's we can read more...
Monday, 27 March 2006 12:49
i get the same urges as jayne i guess, everytime kaylee gets to cry or talkin about things what would make her do so. i wanna haul off an hit someone, i an i was gettin the same impression what someone had done somethin to her.
on top of all that the funniest part that sticks out in my mind is rivers worry about his learnin curve.
Monday, 27 March 2006 13:33
My first mistake: opening up this episode while I was trying to leave for work (my kids had to sit in the car waiting while I skimmed it)
My second mistake: reading it thoroughly before my first class, now I'm not prepared for my students!
Excellent! Love your Daddy Jayne and James.
Joss may own all but one of them, but you OWN them! Excellent voices and your pacing is wonderful.
My second mistake: reading it thoroughly before my first class, now I'm not prepared for my students!
Excellent! Love your Daddy Jayne and James.
Joss may own all but one of them, but you OWN them! Excellent voices and your pacing is wonderful.
Monday, 27 March 2006 14:19
good Jayne!
I'm a little creepified by the flashbacks too, got a feeling there's more bad that will come out everutally...
Poor Kaylee! I hope Jayne helps her get back to old happy self someday!
I'm a little creepified by the flashbacks too, got a feeling there's more bad that will come out everutally...
Poor Kaylee! I hope Jayne helps her get back to old happy self someday!
Monday, 27 March 2006 14:54
This story just keeps getting better. Since I am a huge Simon/Kaylee fan, I still wish the baby was Simon's, but I love the strength that Kaylee is exhibiting. And I think this does give us a great insight into Jayne's character. Keep 'em coming!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 27 March 2006 15:00
Awesome! I liked Simon... "I take it he knows"... how did Simon come to know? I'd like to hear about that, especially since it sounds like he's going to be helpful instead of in the way. And, OH JAYNE.... he's perfect.
/M
/M
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 27 March 2006 16:19
You made such a big thing about Simon wanting Kaylee in the last series, for which this one is a sequel. Now that she is back, what are his feelings on her being there? And James being Jayne's son? He seems very indifferent to her now. Is he 'over' her? Still care about her but given up that there can be anything between them? Would be interesting to see his take on everything that's happening.
Monday, 27 March 2006 18:06
And it keeps building. I love the way you're slowly letting little dribbles of story develop. The cliffhangers are killing me - but I love it!
I also agree with previous comments about the nice touches from Simon and River. Very good. Simon certainly isn't a dummy, and you have to figure most of the folks there, except probably Mal (LOL!), have figured out who the father was.
It's really developing well, and I can't help but wish the bad was out, while not wanting to rush anything. You really have us hooked - another mark of a well written story. Kudos!
I also agree with previous comments about the nice touches from Simon and River. Very good. Simon certainly isn't a dummy, and you have to figure most of the folks there, except probably Mal (LOL!), have figured out who the father was.
It's really developing well, and I can't help but wish the bad was out, while not wanting to rush anything. You really have us hooked - another mark of a well written story. Kudos!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 27 March 2006 18:59
Well, finally with the talking! At least a little bit. I'm glad I was wrong about Kaylee letting someone into her life that would hurt her. But now I just want Jayne to go back there and kill that guy, in a very painful way! And three months of her having to endure that! (okay so I don't know exactly what, but I know something bad happened). Please fix her.
I love that your writing makes me think. You say so much without directly saying what is happening or what they're feeling, and that is real talent.
--"Better women than you have, Kaylee. They just sit back and don't do nothin' as their bodies are broken and their minds're torn down, they don't..."
She wanted to touch him again, reach out and take his hands, but he was coiled, ready to strike and she wondered who he was speaking about if it wasn't her.
"I didn't."
Two simple words, but the truth of them was bitter.--
This passage contained so much! Exactly what I was wondering about with the last installment! And Kaylee being bitter about not letting someone in to hurt her or James, but it happened anyway.
And it's clear that Jayne is so concerned about Kaylee, that he still has all those feelings for her. sigh.
Okay I'll stop now because all the gushing is getting a little embarrassing.
Take your time with the posting, we'll be waiting. Well okay, eventually we'll start sending bribes (how about chocolate?), but we'll try to be patient.
-squish
I love that your writing makes me think. You say so much without directly saying what is happening or what they're feeling, and that is real talent.
--"Better women than you have, Kaylee. They just sit back and don't do nothin' as their bodies are broken and their minds're torn down, they don't..."
She wanted to touch him again, reach out and take his hands, but he was coiled, ready to strike and she wondered who he was speaking about if it wasn't her.
"I didn't."
Two simple words, but the truth of them was bitter.--
This passage contained so much! Exactly what I was wondering about with the last installment! And Kaylee being bitter about not letting someone in to hurt her or James, but it happened anyway.
And it's clear that Jayne is so concerned about Kaylee, that he still has all those feelings for her. sigh.
Okay I'll stop now because all the gushing is getting a little embarrassing.
Take your time with the posting, we'll be waiting. Well okay, eventually we'll start sending bribes (how about chocolate?), but we'll try to be patient.
-squish
Monday, 27 March 2006 20:19
Oh Jacqui, pease take your time!
It'll be difficult to go on for two days without an update, but I'm sure it'll be worth the wait!!!Please tell me that that hun dan (bastard) there didn't abused her sexually, please!!!
And please tell me that she and Jayne will end up together forever...
And yes tell usmore about Simon's feelings...I start feeling pity for him...
It'll be difficult to go on for two days without an update, but I'm sure it'll be worth the wait!!!Please tell me that that hun dan (bastard) there didn't abused her sexually, please!!!
And please tell me that she and Jayne will end up together forever...
And yes tell usmore about Simon's feelings...I start feeling pity for him...
DARKANGELLOVESFIREFLY
Monday, 27 March 2006 21:24
I don't know where to start.
First of all you my dear are Increadibly Talented!
Your stories have a little bit of everything, and leave me satisfied and even more intregued with every chapter.
You could string us allong for 5 chapters only to give us the smallest detail and we would be overjoyed by it.
Never once have I thought "How much longer is this gonna take???"
The way Kaylee came Back is very sad, she is very broken and I hope you let the crew fix her.
As for Jayne you have taken him in an unexpected and very welcome direction.
Thank you for showing me so many diffrent sides of my favorite crew.
First of all you my dear are Increadibly Talented!
Your stories have a little bit of everything, and leave me satisfied and even more intregued with every chapter.
You could string us allong for 5 chapters only to give us the smallest detail and we would be overjoyed by it.
Never once have I thought "How much longer is this gonna take???"
The way Kaylee came Back is very sad, she is very broken and I hope you let the crew fix her.
As for Jayne you have taken him in an unexpected and very welcome direction.
Thank you for showing me so many diffrent sides of my favorite crew.
Monday, 27 March 2006 23:42
Jacqui, dear, you continue to amaze me, to take me into the very souls of these characters I love so much. You make it hard, powerful, poignant, and gut-wrenchingly beautiful.
<<"You're so worried about what I said?" He came a step closer and she could see him straining. "Maybe you should worry 'bout what I didn't say."
"Jayne..." But he wasn't stopping and Kaylee held her ground.
"I didn't say, kid, your momma ran away an' left everybody who cared about her, 'cause she couldn't handle things when they got hard. I didn't say, kid, your momma's been lying since she got here."
"Jayne." She made to touch his arm, but he pulled it out of her reach and the movement made her step back. "Jayne, please."
"Ya know what I didn't say most of all? Kaylee? Ya wanna know what someone needs to say to that boy?"
She shook her head, as if she could stop him saying it out loud.
"Kid, that woman you been clingin' to, the one that tucks ya in at night? She ain't your real ma, she ain't nowhere near it." The words hit her like a slap in the face. "'Cause your real ma, wherever she is, she don't lie, she don't run away, she laughs a whole lot and smiles a lot more. Your real ma wouldn't stand for half the stuff this woman does."
Kaylee felt all her energy leave, felt it all just drain away. >>
I'm with ya there, Kaylee-girl.
<<"You're so worried about what I said?" He came a step closer and she could see him straining. "Maybe you should worry 'bout what I didn't say."
"Jayne..." But he wasn't stopping and Kaylee held her ground.
"I didn't say, kid, your momma ran away an' left everybody who cared about her, 'cause she couldn't handle things when they got hard. I didn't say, kid, your momma's been lying since she got here."
"Jayne." She made to touch his arm, but he pulled it out of her reach and the movement made her step back. "Jayne, please."
"Ya know what I didn't say most of all? Kaylee? Ya wanna know what someone needs to say to that boy?"
She shook her head, as if she could stop him saying it out loud.
"Kid, that woman you been clingin' to, the one that tucks ya in at night? She ain't your real ma, she ain't nowhere near it." The words hit her like a slap in the face. "'Cause your real ma, wherever she is, she don't lie, she don't run away, she laughs a whole lot and smiles a lot more. Your real ma wouldn't stand for half the stuff this woman does."
Kaylee felt all her energy leave, felt it all just drain away. >>
I'm with ya there, Kaylee-girl.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 28 March 2006 05:39
I have been floating around reading here and there after I read this series up to the last section posted I floated on to other things. But your story stuck in my head and I ended up trying to remember the title to backtrack and read more so...
More please!
More please!
Tuesday, 30 May 2006 12:36
"Ha!" She heard the skid of knees jumping up off the floor and knew Jayne was peering around the door. "Did ya hear that, Kaylee? Huh? He said holster!"
aww!!! big proud daddy jayne, makes my little heart melt.
b
aww!!! big proud daddy jayne, makes my little heart melt.
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