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Doors

Friday, March 10, 2006

Seventh in the "Didn't Mean Nothi'" saga. Jayne/Kaylee, Simon/Kaylee, Jayne/Kaylee/Simon, Angst/Jacqui, the usual pairings.

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Seventh installment in the saga.

I had this part all planned out, there was going to be healthy healing and moving on and growing.

But then I sat down to type and this is what happened.

Yeah, it didn't work.

Disclaimer: Joss, I broke your pretty dolls. Don't yell, k?

Rating: This part? Hard R.

Feedback: Make me smile, c'mon, you know you want to. Comment here or email: wily_one24@yahoo.com.au

Comments: Italics and present tense are also, apparently, dream sequences as well as flashbacks. Who knew? (It's fragmenting their reality matrix).

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Ch 7. DOORS.

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She’s stretched taut, teetering on the edge of a knife bade and waiting to fall.

Jayne is behind her, she can feel his large, naked chest holding her up, pressing in against her shoulder blades as his mouth works along her jaw. Kaylee leans her head back, lets it rest on his shoulder, opens her neck to him and groans when he sucks at her pulse.

His hands come up and around her, palming at her breasts, rough and insistent. Long fingers tweaking her nipples, stroking the rounded flesh, pulling and pushing and shaping, it makes her ache, makes her hungry, makes her open.

“Simon.” It comes out of her lips without notice.

“Right here.”

There are hands at her hips, wrapping down around her thighs and lifting them, dragging them up and apart. Then he’s there, hips bruising the delicate inner skin of her legs as he pushes righ

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 10 March 2006 05:06
Dear heavens, you are going to go OT3 aren't you? Nooooo!!

Payback's a b*tch Simon. You're going to need kneepads.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 10 March 2006 05:08
wow, very nice. The threesome was quite hot. If S/K don't end up together, I could probably stand to see all three of them together. Maybe that way there will be no hurt!

Wonderfully done.
ZOESBACKUP
Friday, 10 March 2006 05:25
No. No. Unless you plan on having Kaylee force Simon to go down on Jayne then I AIN'T HAVING IT. Kaylee can bugger Simon with her battery operated boyfriend but NO HE DOES NOT DESERVE HER.



I don't care how hot you make it.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 10 March 2006 05:35
Wow, I almost don't know what to say. Just when I thought it couldn't get anymore painful for poor Kaylee, you cranked it up another notch! This is beyond angst, but it is excellent (which, oddly enough, I think is much more of a reflection on me than you...how is that possible?). Anyway, keep writing, gotta see what the hell is going to happen next!
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SQUISH
Friday, 10 March 2006 05:37
p.s. I think I'm going to go read Whiskey Bears again for a little fluffy goodness (much needed!).
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 10 March 2006 05:59
Oooo now that woke me right back up from my late night lull! The push and pull in the beginning, just summed up the turmoil in Kaylee perfectly.

I'm still sooo rooting for Jaylee!
CANTONHEROINE
Friday, 10 March 2006 07:18
This is torturous, you know that, right?

And I've told you this before: STOP MAKING ME FEEL SORRY FOR SIMON!! I think that's the most tortuous part of all!! *tears at hair* AARGH!

It's very telling that Simon's alone, while Jayne and Kaylee are willing to hurt together. Theirs is the healthier relationship of the two. Not saying it's healthy, just better than what she's got with Simon.

Cure their ills, Doctor Jacqui...
HISGOODGIRL
Friday, 10 March 2006 13:56
Dear Gawd, Teacher...that lil piece o'crap I just sent you to beta? Do me a favor and just toss the gorram thing.

LVS2READ
Friday, 10 March 2006 14:48
Oh...my... Quite the wake up call.*g*

Poor Kaylee, being torn in two--even in her dreams. Ah, Jayne, wanting to hurt whoever hurt her, even if it's himself. And Simon--what a total boob. Boy is he in for a rude awakening when he finds out Kaylee's not in her bunk! Hee! Give it up, dude. She's too good for you.

Jacqui, you are, as always, awesome!

"I love my captain."
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 10 March 2006 15:24
The short version of my reaction is *Wow*!

The long, wordy version is:

The symbolism in the dream sequence -- absolutely amazing! It's described perfectly and feels like a real dream.

The complexity of the interactions, right down to Kaylee realizing (previous installment) that Jayne came to her first, touched her first, as well as Simon's tunnel-vision, is impelling and authentic.

This installment illuminates a fascinating insight: that Kaylee did not create this situation, even though both men *might* blame her. Certainly, Simon blames her. Kaylee, is in a sense, victimized by the situation.

Kaylee is so emotional and so attuned to others emotions that it's almost empathic. She reacts to *their* need and their desires so strongly that she really can't escape it.

Kaylee herself has been lost in the clash of seemingly irreconcilable demands from the two men.

If you aren't making a living writing, you should be!
LEIASKY
Friday, 10 March 2006 16:17
Ok, damn you. You have me hooked on this now. And knowing you write Jaylee fic (a pairing I just can't stand!), I STILL keep coming back to see what you're going to do with them.

Testament to a good writer for you to suck me into this story like this!

Am definitely eagerly awaiting the next installment.

I won't even hope for a happy ending for Simon and Kaylee though that dream at the beginning was verrryy nicely done.
HIS
Friday, 10 March 2006 16:23
When my GoodGirl sent me this I had to come and read it again. Gorram, I don't feel sorry for pretty boy but I do feel for Kaylee. Great dream symbolism, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Don't hold nothin' back!
HUMBUG
Friday, 10 March 2006 19:01
Wow! Just wow!

This is SO POWERFUL, Jacqui! Really painful, of course, goes wihtout saying, but intensely emotional & moving.

I'm so rooting for Jayne..... Simon doesn't deserve her, pushing her away like that time and time again!.... and Jayne is giving Kaylee everything she asks of him, no matter how much it's breaking him up inside...... Aw, *sniff*
PIXIE4MIRANDA
Friday, 10 March 2006 21:51
I think that Simon is getting a wake up call, up to Dr. J if it's too late.
DAELYN
Saturday, 11 March 2006 03:38
ok I like am soooo loving this series
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 14 March 2006 14:30
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeease let it be Jayne in the end. Please.

/M
BELLONA
Sunday, 23 April 2006 16:01
*crosses fingers and hopes* jayne jayne jayne jayne jayne...

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