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Trapped

Saturday, March 4, 2006

Mal thinks on the traps that River gets him in, and out of.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3110    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Title: Trapped

Author: Ana Sedai

Rating: PG (R if you speak Mandarin)

Character(s): Mal, River

Prompt: 030 - Coffin

Word Count: 939

A/N: 12/100 for Joss100. The hits just keep on a-comin’…

Summary: Mal thinks on the traps that River gets him in, and out of.

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My God, she looks so small in there.

Of all the myriad thoughts that had careened through Mal’s head in those first few seconds after kicking that crate open, that was the one he remembered most clearly. Before the confusion, the anger, the indignation, all he could think was how tiny and fragile she seemed.

Mal had never taken kindly to the idea of trading in human lives, but the pure rage that had seared his brain when he considered what this prissy-shirted, gan ni niang of a lao mao was most likely plannin’ to do to this girl had surprised even himself. First he used Kaylee’s life as a bargaining tool, and now this.

“The shock of what…Waking up… Finding out she's been sold to some borderworld baron?” Mal’s voice rose with each questioning word. “Or, I'm sorry --was this one for you?”

Mal had actually felt the man’s windpipe crunching beneath his fingers…

That should have been his first clue about River Tam’s effect on him.

Fortunately for her brother’s continued existence, she had chosen that second start screaming.

For such a little thing, she sure had a set of lungs on her.

It wasn’t until later that Mal had fully appreciated the irony of the circumstances surrounding that first day. He’d been all geared up to rescue a girl trapped inside a crate, only to discover that the trap was inside the girl.

For a long time, that trap had kept River inside her own self. Talking in circles, in sentences no one could understand, she kept trying to make herself heard. He’d listened to her ramblings on occasion, and was surprised to discover that he understood quite a bit, more than he was comfortable with, truth to tell.

That should have been his secon

Comments
Saturday, 04 March 2006 04:33
Sweet! Very nicely done.
I especially liked the parallels you drew between the girl in the box and the trap in the girl. This works on several levels. Thanks!
Saturday, 04 March 2006 12:41
I like the gradual progression of the Captain's feelings and how instead of feeling trapped he feels free.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 04 March 2006 15:54
I like the whole series very much. It's very well written and engaging to read.
Saturday, 04 March 2006 21:23
huh
Sunday, 05 March 2006 16:41
I have been enjoying this series of yours. It is an interesting concept, and you have truly captured the essence of Mal.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 06 March 2006 00:22
Ana, I always look for your stories first. I love Mal and River together and you write them so well. More please and keep up the good work. You are a wonderful writer.
Dee
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 06 March 2006 20:38
You definitely have Mal's voice. I can hear him speak as I read. Thanx, Patti
GHOSTRIDER43
Tuesday, 14 March 2006 04:39
I've scanned over this whole series, and I'm stunned by how well you hit on Mal's voice as you write... I can practically hear him! Great job.

And the story moves well. The pieces are good enough each that they can stand alone, or even be read out of order, and still make sense...

Great job.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 18 March 2006 15:51
i loved it. its nice to have mal and river fan fic cause there is no one writtin it and its getting on my nerves so keep it up cause this is excellent
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 26 March 2006 16:57
I really am glad someone are writing mal\river-fics. Loved this one very much. Keep up the good work and I'll do my best at reading them:)
Saturday, 15 April 2006 17:37
agree with bookaddict: i love the slow-burn of the captain's feelings. it just makes it so much more satisfying when he finally realises how he feels.

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