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Wednesday, March 1, 2006

Fifth in the 'Didn't Mean Nothin' saga. Jayne/Kaylee, Kaylee/Simon. Dark, angsty themes.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3842    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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I warn you people, angst. It's addictive. Plus, I'm kind of a sadist who likes to break peoples' hearts. Including these characters.

Disclaimer: Oh, god, they're so not mine. Really, this is why.

Rating: R, I guess, for darker themes and for the fact it gets a little naught-tay.

Comments: Wow, two in one day. I guess this one needed to be written.

Feedback: It's like crack, it really is. I'm addicted. Comment or email: wily_one24@yahoo.com.au

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Part Five:

“You know what else?” His words are slurred and he’s past caring anymore. “Scars, women like scars.”

He raises his mug, drains the last of the whisky, then lets it fall back to the table. Mal and Zoe are long gone, back to the ship. They’ve left the babysitting to Simon, a bit of a bad choice from both of them, but it’s an even poorer choice for the two left behind.

“Jayne?” Simon looks all manner of uncomfortable sitting in a bar like this, surrounded by people who all blend into each other, ‘cause they haven’t spent an hour each day scrubbing their lily white skin. “Shouldn’t we get back now?”

He’s well past drunk and he doesn’t care. It’ll probably be better for all concerned if he drinks himself into unconsciousness, because it’ll stop him saying something he’ll regret later. It’ll stop him picturing Kaylee pinned underneath him and pining for someone else, stop the taste of her on his tongue.

“I bet you ever get close enough with Kaylee, that scar on her belly’s a real sweet spot.”

Gorram it.

“That’s enough, Jayne.” Simon sighs

Comments
LEIASKY
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:04
Aww, damn, was hoping for more Simon/Kaylee goodness.
LEIASKY
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:08
wait wait wait, she had Simon willin' to do her now and she still went to Jayne?

*cries*
MAL4PREZ
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:19
Oooh - that's lovely, he just helps her sleep!

Real shiny story! I just love Jayne.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:42
I love this series. Please ignore the Simon fans. Give us a happy Jaylee ending!
SAMEERTIA
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:52
Oh! Sweeeeet! You had me worried for a second that Jayne really was gonna somethin' bad. But oh so sweet.
And Simon.
""He’d had to brush his teeth over and over again after she’d left.
Her skin tasted like salt and soap and Jayne. ""

That it just tore him up like that gave me a deep sense of satisfaction. Sorry, but it's true!

You know, it's sick, but the person I feel the worst for is Mal. What a mess. Like watching your best friends walk into a trap and not knowing how to warn them. Never ever ever let him think about having walked away from Serenity in the beginning again, though! ;)
LVS2READ
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:55
I was trying to figure out why Simon stopped, and it was because she tasted like Jayne?! Whom she hadn't been with in how long? Bah! What a boob! *smacks* He doesn't deserve her anyway.

Poor Jayne, needin' to go visitin' and get in a fight to blow off steam. *hugs*

Poor Mal, caught in the middle again. Why can't things never go smooth? *g*

Shiny effort all the way around! Looking forward to the next installment.

"I love my captain."
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 17:09
Things are out in the open...EXCELLENT! But yeah, why did Simon stop? I must've missed something. You are the queen, Jacqui..the queen. I can't wait for what happens next.

/M
RAVENHAIR
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 17:50
all bow to the Queen...
JAYLEELOVE
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 19:01
After all the insults and ignoring, Simon doesn't deserver her! He waited too long. That was SO sweet how Jayne just wanted her to get a good night's sleep finally. I can't wait for more!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 19:18
“Oh, god, Simon, yes.” Her hips jerked under him. “Right there.”


Simon stopped moving.

I will follow up. I assume this line was suppose to say "Oh god, Jayne, yes." not Simon. Thus explaining why Simon stopped.

Might want to fix it because it was slightly confusing.

2nd, how does Simon know what Jayne tastes like?

Other than that, really like it. You had everyone's voices down.

This is Gwenfrewi who should be working but read your fic instead.

ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 20:06
I'm loving this story more and more. OOhhh I'm an angst addict as well.

I think what everyone might be missing is that in the flashback Jayne mentioned that Kaylee's scar must certainly be a sweet spot.

Then when Kaylee and Simon are together that's what he tries and when she reacts he realized that Jayne KNEW it was a sweet spot. Jayne was speaking from experience.

That's how I figured it all tied together.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 20:25
I get it, Jayne talked about the scar when he was soused and Simon got stuck "babysitting" him. So when he came to it in his kissing travels south... I love this series and cant wait for more!
BANZAIBILL
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 20:26
Wonderful. Is there a 10 step program for kickin' this habit?

I'm with the last anon poster. The flashback had Jayne commenting about her sweet spot to Simon. See the previous fics in this series for more "Sweet scar action".

Thus, Simon puts it together when she reacts that way, and bang! everyone's unhappy.

Very nicely and subtly constructed.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 20:26
“I bet you ever get close enough with Kaylee, that scar on her belly’s a real sweet spot.”
Gorram it.
“That’s enough, Jayne.” Simon sighs. “Come on, I’ll help you back.”

ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 20:47
I have to agree, my first thought was, <b>"How does Simon know what Jayne tastes like?"</b> Are we going full threesome here or is there some backstory that's next?
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 21:46
Second thought? Surely they have enough water on the ship to bathe often, even if it's not for an hour a day.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 23:41
Exellent angst again Jacqui! But seriously don't feel so bad about it, you had a bit of angst in your Pieces series.

I thought it was fairly clear what was going on, like someone else commented, when Simon got to the scar and Kaylee reacted:
--“Oh, god, Simon, yes.” Her hips jerked under him. “Right there.”
Simon stopped moving.--
He realized that Jayne had been speaking from personal experience. The images he had in his head of Kaylee and Jayne gave him the (probably imagined) sensation of Kaylee tasting of Jayne. I mean come on people, don't be so literal, you got to read into it a bit.

Good work though, was wondering how Simon would react and I think it's quite in character and quite understandable given the situation.

Keep them coming, but please get back to Best Deceptions as well! (you have nothing else to do but write this stuff for us, right?)

squish

ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 23:53
I think I love that last anon just a little bit. And several of the other anons and BanzaiBill that actually got what I meant.



JACQUI
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 23:54
And gorram it, that last last anon was me! (stupid login)

Jacqui
SAMEERTIA
Thursday, 02 March 2006 00:38
Jacqui, I too, thought it was obvious why Simon stopped- you set this up very very well.
I don't think an author should have to hit their readers over their heads- your subltety, and the complex layers of your writing are what keeps me coming back to your work.
WYOBAR
Thursday, 02 March 2006 01:44
I so agree with Sameertia-your complex layers are why this story is so addicting-now I'm a Jayne fan but even I feel alittle sorry for Simon. Loved how Zoe made Wash go collect Jayne. MORE
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 02 March 2006 02:01
If Kaylee doesn't make a choice soon, Jayne and Simon are gonna start dating each other and **then** where will she be? *grumbles*

ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 02 March 2006 02:02
I've always loved the subtle story telling you do, Jacqui. I hate being hit over the head with plot, dialogue...lovely writing (not just here but with Pieces and Deceptions as well - the whole "Winnie" connetion that Jayne figures out from Deceptions is a particularly nice subtle move).

Ravenhair
CANTONHEROINE
Thursday, 02 March 2006 03:48
Don't you DARE make me feel sorry for Simon. Got that? I absolutely refuse. He reaps what he sows.

It upsets me that everyone is so quick to coddle the Doctorboy (Inara, for example) and no-one's really taking into account how all this is affecting Jayne (except River maybe). He's the only one who hasn't really done anything wrong. He's practically been a paragon of virtue, seeing as how he didn't tear Simon or Kaylee's heads off when he could.

*sigh* I still want that happy ending okay? The one where the merc gets the girl and Simon mysteriously disappears never to be seen again.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 03 March 2006 18:20
More, more

And thank GOODNESS she went to Jayne. Don't listen to the Simon/Kaylee brigade. Ever since I started reading your Fics, I've realised the only possible partner for Kaylee is Jayne!

Thanks for sharing, and HuRRY UP :-))
BRITCHICK
Friday, 03 March 2006 18:21
The last Anonymous (More More) was me. Not sure what happened there.
HUMBUG
Sunday, 05 March 2006 12:28
So bitter-sweet!!!

So who's Kaylee gonna choose? Jayne or Simon?

I know I hope it's Jayne...... he's so sweet and caring of her. Rather than Simon who seems to treat her like an after thought....

Keep writing - I wanna find out what happens next!! Thanks for all your fanfic, Jacqui!!!
BELLONA
Friday, 14 April 2006 20:59
*bitchslaps simon* oh, you deserve it. you know you do.
*hugs jayne* poor baby...

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