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Wednesday, March 1, 2006

Fourth in the 'Didn't Mean Nothin' saga. Angst Ahoy.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3548    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Okay, yeah, so this is part four. It was supposed to have another two scenes at the end of this (at least), but then... I ended it here. You'll see what happens in the next part.

Disclaimer: If they were really mine, I wouldn't want to hurt them so much.

Rating : G, for this bit, R overall.

Comments: Angst like whoa.

As usual, italics are flashbacks (no real timeline for this one).

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1. "."

2. "".

3. "".

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There was a knock on her door, hesitant and nervous.

“Kaylee.” Inara smiled and it was genuine. “Please, come in.”

She watched with interest as the normally bubbly mechanic walked into her shuttle with small steps. Usually Kaylee would bound in, her energy eager and endless, her eyes wide and taking in as much detail as humanly possible, cataloguing anything new, seeing if anything had changed, mentally trying to come up with impossibly detailed, romantic stories about whatever client may have given them to her and why.

This time she stepped slowly, barely moving forward enough for Inara to close the door behind them.

“Yeah?” Kaylee turned quickly, eyes bright and rapid, as if she was expecting a trap. “Inara? Cap’n said you wanted to talk to me?”

“That I…?” She bit off her reply, mentally trying to soothe her hackles down. Already she could tell this was going to take effort. “Kaylee, Mal hinted that there might be something you needed advice with, he asked me if I had the time, but he never told me what it might be about. You don’t have any idea?”

There was a brilliant, almost fluorescent color that sped up Kaylee’s neck and over her cheeks. Her right hand fiddled with a lock of hair behind her ear and she wouldn’t meet Inara’s eyes

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 01:42
I didn't originally want to read this because the first part said it was Jayne/Kaylee (and I truly hate that pairing) but I've actually enjoyed it because Simon iss till in the picture. Any hope Simon will actually get it right? or should I just quit reading now? :)
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 02:13
Gah! I'm brain is stalled on that last image...I think I'm actually scared for Kaylee.

the tension in this one was painful, i don't think i breathed the whole time i was reading!

Wednesday, 01 March 2006 02:46
Oh lordy.
Angst galore! I LOVE it.

"The fire in Jayne's eyes made her whimper."

Made me whimper, too. He's not a man to stand down in a fight, but he'd never hurt Kaylee, not intentionally. I think he'd cut out his own heart first.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 03:18
Oh please, please. Don't end this on a Simon/Kaylee/Jayne note. The doc deserves to have his ass kicked and ridiculed.
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 03:19
No kidding about the angst. Good stuff though.

I think this was a great choice for an ending spot.

The conversation with Inara was great. Hard to follow, confusing for all involved, and just like those "I have a friend" conversations we've all had.

Looking forward to the next installment. I guess I'm just a masochist!
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 03:22
I actually hesitated before reading this. Do I really want put myself through all that angst?
Well, apparently I'm a masochist - but only up to a point.

I hurt for them, I really do. I want for it to get better, and I'm trusting you to make that happen. All this pain is not worth out without a payoff at the end, dong ma?

“I knew it! Kaylee is the man!”
“Huh, um…” Mal got a funny look on his face. “Inara, I honestly didn’t ask him about that part of it…”
Got to tell you, this exchange was a welcome slice of light amid all that dark. Made me laugh out loud picturing Mal's expression.
PIXIE4MIRANDA
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 03:26
Of course, I'm hoping for Jayne to get with Kaylee, always am, either him or the Cap'n, because it's just twisted and good.

ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 03:37
Ooooh I just love this story! I really felt tense the whole time reading this part, waiting to see what would happen.

I loved that Kaylee used the "I have a friend who.." premise. But wow, that right there at the end...damn!

On pins and needles for more!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 04:21
What a cliffhanger! You sure do know how to end a chapter. As others commenters have said, the Kaylee/Inara conversation was spot on - esp with Inara projecting her situation with Mal onto it at first. Also, I love Mal barging into Inara's shuttle to find out how the talk went - pure Mal.
ubiquirk
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 04:34
Awwww, Jayne didn't deserve that! Guess that's why they call it angst. Just don't give him ennui, I don't think I could take it. Keep it up!
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 06:59
my heart just dropped down to my feet-what an emotional ride-good work
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 08:51
woah, what a ride. everything from inara's barely contained jealousy to jayne's hurt was perfect.
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 13:56
Lord, it's as complex as some Shakespearian play with all the feints and misunderstandings and loves gone wrong.

“You’d trust Jayne with her?”

Mal didn’t blink.

“Yes. So do you, or you’d’ve said somethin’ stronger by now. ‘Sides,” He sighed. “was Jayne who tried to end it. I don’t think he’d hurt her. Not anymore’n she’s hurting herself already.”

Jeeze, I hope the Universe gives our dear Kaylee a wake up call...

Wednesday, 01 March 2006 14:38
fun angst, love the dynamic between the 3, and Inara's part in it. Excellent!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 15:47
ARG! I'm gonna throw up! This is such good agnst. Of course, I'm with everyone wanting Jayne to win in the end... is it possible? Can peace be had after all of this? Please, Jacqui, tell me there is a way!

Per your request...."M."
Wednesday, 01 March 2006 16:35
Just found this and read it straight away......

Oh, Oh, Oh!!! So painful.........

Keep writing...... Gotta know what happens next....
Friday, 14 April 2006 20:32
my stomach feels like it's cramping with all the angsty emotional-ness and feeling for poor jayne...

b

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