No Harm No Foul
Saturday, February 25, 2006
Third in the 'Didn't Mean Nothin' saga. Jayne/Kaylee, darker themes.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3559 RATING: 9.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
Part three, coming after: 1. and 2. . Disclaimer: They're not mine. Rating: Overall, R for darker themes, but this one is probably tamer. Feedback: I'm such the feedback whore, you know it, I know it, now comment! Or send email: wily_one24@yahoo.com.au Comments: Y'all are freaks "hurt me, hurt me more!". Well, okay then. Italics are flashbacks. *** CHAPTER THREE: "No Harm No Foul". *** She’s making coffee when he walks into the kitchen that morning. His eyes slide over her neck, over her waist, everywhere his hands and lips were last night. The skin behind her ear is pink, glistening in the steam from the kettle. It makes his stomach tighten, like a fist. “Mornin’.” He’s always been grabby, can’t help himself, he loves to touch and feel. And this is Kaylee, nothin’ more needs to be said about that. He could stand there and touch her ‘til the cows came home. Hell, he’d stand there and touch her as the cows organized a mutiny, broke down the fence, took his guns and ran away. “Don’t.” She hisses it, one word, and steps away from him. “But…” There’s not one other person in the room, no one but them. “I was just…” “It didn’t mean nothin’.” Her eyes wouldn’t meet his. “You said it, Jayne, you said.” “Kaylee.” He takes another step towards her. She steps back again. “Can’t be touchin’ and stuff.” She insists under her breath. “Just stop it.” It’s the quietest conversation he’s ever had, all whispers and hushed voices. She might not be looking at him, but he can see something in her eyes anyway, a sheen of desperation, a plea. Fear. It’s a fraction of a second between seeing it and smelling it and he has to step back, has to grab a mug real tight and sit at the table. Has to bite down real hard when everyone else comes in and she’s all bright smiles for
Jacqui, until I started reading your work, I'd never considered "Jaylee" an option. Now, I have a hard time seeing any other option.
You're very good - Thanks!
Dark but scrummy.. Where is it going?! Please make more..
Nina
Can't wait for more Jacqui...although I also want more of your "Best Deceptions" series. Can't you just write both at once :-))
I love all your series and you work on what ever you feel like! I will happily take what ever Jaylee you toss our way.
See, I think this is my favorite Jaylee series yet. It doesn't ignore the Simon factor, it doesn't make Jayne all mushy and it doesn't make Kaylee sweet as honey. No one's perfect, they fuck around and the fuck up and that's real and powerful and...
*sighs*
More please?
"I love my captain."
'Simon briefly considered ramming his head into the table top.'
and the cows running away with Jaynes guns reminded me why you were my inspiration to start writing these characters - I love thee, Jacqui, and I adore every bit you bring us!
Oh, Jacqui, this is just so hearbreaking.
But it feels true to the characters, and a darker side to this love triangle than we've had before.......
Where are you going to go with this....??
I can't wait to find out...... But please say you'll continue "The Best Deceptions" too........
Thanks, Jacqui...... I alaways love the way you write the Jaylee relationship..... You always make it seem so new, fresh, exciting and so much more meaningful and interesting than Kaylee with that oh-so-uptight Simon!!
Please keep it up!
This fic hits me on a visceral level. Reading it brought a lump to my throat, tears to my eyes, churned my gut, and made my hands curl into fists with the want to HURT Kaylee. God, I wanna hurt her so bad for doing this to Jayne.
Please make it better.
I mean, errr.. WOW. This is beautiful, absolutely just. This was the best chapter yet, I think- so much happens and the context is all so tightly woven into the actions and dialogue.
I LOVED Mal's voice in this. You got him absolutely pat. I could just hear that bit about a big fluffy Valentine from Niska. Made me laugh out loud before I went back to crying.
I love Mal's part in all this.
*sob*
-Ravenhair
Can't wait to see what happens next!
Write your lighter stories if you must, but PLEASE keep this one going a bit longer!
-Spider (all a-quiver)
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