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Serenity: Sundown(7 page update)

Friday, January 27, 2006

This is my fanfic script.
Alright, seriously I've got to take a break after this to work on homework. I've gone back through earlier scenes and added the shiny's and the gorram's. I've put in some of the scenes that are meant to break up the story because they're needed for it to be fun to read the the ending I'm planning. I love seeing feedback. I'm glad people are reading and enjoying. Of course, I might read this and decide to change things but I like the outline right now.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2575    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Characters

Mal

Happier but more distant. He hasn’t been happy the way he is now for a long time and it’s bothering him. He has a “family” but he’s not sure about the whole people depending on him thing. This is shown is the distance he’s begun to show the crew especially Inara. He hasn’t quite found that faith Book told him to get yet but he’s in a position where there’s the possibility for that.

Inara

Almost fed up with Mal not talking to her but neither is really willing to give the ghost as it were. Distant from Mal and it shows.

Zoe

Not a good time to mess with her, read on

Jayne

Jayne is still Jayne if not a little bit better man after the events of Serenity

Kaylee

As always bursting with optimism. Comfortable with Simon

Simon

Comfortable with Kaylee. Not nearly as protective with River. Not nearly as much as an outsider

River

Not so crazy anymore and more like her brother

Look for this line somewhere in this when this thing is done,

“The Tams seem to come in only two flavors, crazy and pompous, River’s a twist.”

Scene: We see an operative in a western looking setting

We are looking at his distinctive boots as he walks along

The camera comes up to see his face stern and yet solemn

We switch to a wide shot and see about four or five thieves step out

It is obvious they are there to rob him

All of them have knives.

The operative’s facial expression doesn’t change in the slightest

As soon as one comes at him they are all dispatched in quick succession.

The operative uses martial arts and the thieves weapons against them

He also uses pressure points to suggest he’s an operative

When its done he just begins walking again

We see him from the side and when he is off frame we cut to…

Scene: We see our Captain Reynolds sweaty and more than a little uncalm walking quickly into the dormitory hallway of Serenity . The shot settles as the captain’s face is seen in full on the left half of the screen and Kaylee can be seen coming in behind

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Friday, 27 January 2006 08:20
ok satisfide, "Inara

Just shut up for little bit, ok Mal?


Mal

(As if he were talking to his mother)

Yessum


Scene: Inara finishes and goes out but before she does.


Mal

Thanks, Inara

Inara

You’re welcome."


Thank you Thank you Thank you!
you know she loves him, and he loves her, now my question is, why dosent she just jump him? LMAO! I want to say i am kidding but hell all she would have to do is kiss him, and poof all done! no more UST no more B.S.ing around. Just her and him, and maybe some issues but not something they can handle. Hell they handeled Reavrs and shit they can at least give something as beautiful as love a shot!.... ok that was my rant all done now...sorry just reading this got me to into the story. gha! oh and by the way i love how river asked inara if she was going to go have sex, "are you going to go have intercourse" that just sounds so funny it has river writtin all over it. seems that every time o go over the stuff you wrote the time before i find i like you river bits more and more. Oh and by the way it was nice that you basicly had inara say out loud to some one even if it was river that she loves the captain, that means she can openly admit it. and if not then it means some one can say they heard her admit it! nice stuff!

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