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Serenity: Sundown(10 page update)

Wednesday, January 25, 2006

As always, this is my fanfic script with a few new scenes(about ten pages of writing). The new scenes will probably have the some things(maybe more than any before) changed. Just in case you're wondering, there are other scenes that will be put into the thing that break up the story of the crew but I'm writing each part seperately and not putting them in order until I'm done. I've still got the short character descriptions to tell you where I think these characters are now. I have a feeling people might hate this thing starting now, sorry. To people who've been reading this, search in the page for **10 page update** to pick up where they left off. All feedback is welcome as long as it is intelligent. As always, I'm just a fan.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2462    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Characters

Mal

Happier but more distant. He hasn’t been happy the way he is now for a long time and it’s bothering him. He has a “family” but he’s not sure about the whole people depending on him thing. This is shown is the distance he’s begun to show the crew especially Inara. He hasn’t quite found that faith Book told him to get yet but he’s in a position where there’s the possibility for that.

Inara

Almost fed up with Mal not talking to her but neither is really willing to give the ghost as it were. Distant from Mal and it shows.

Zoe

Not a good time to mess with her, read on

Jayne

Jayne is still Jayne if not a little bit better man after the events of Serenity

Kaylee

As always bursting with optimism. Comfortable with Simon

Simon

Comfortable with Kaylee. Not nearly as protective with River. Not nearly as much as an outsider

River

Not so crazy anymore and more like her brother

Look for this line somewhere in this when this thing is done,

“The Tams seem to come in only two flavors, crazy and pompous, River’s a twist.”

Scene: We see our Captain Reynolds sweaty and more than a little uncalm walking quickly into the dormitory hallway of Serenity . The shot settles as the captain’s face is seen in full on the left half of the screen and Kaylee can be seen coming in behind him out of focus on the right. He looks back not really looking like he wants to ask the question he is about to.

Mal

Gosa! She’s hot! Kaylee what temp she runnin?

Kaylee

Too hot, captain!

Mal

(Ordering)Get the doc down there to help you and make sure she’s taken care of.

Scene: Jayne enters from where Kaylee and the captain had come from

Jayne

She’s about to blow if you ask me. Leaking everywhere and making sounds I ain’t never imagined.

Mal

(quickly)Shut up, Jayne!

(yelling at the cockpit)Can you set a course and land somewhere River, preferably with all the help we’ll be need’n?

Scene: Cut to a close-up of River looking over her shoulder with a smil

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 25 January 2006 04:20
love it so far write more
Wednesday, 25 January 2006 10:14
i like this, still am hooked! and i just reread that bit with river and inara that you posted the time before and i noticed that you got the characters on spot. inara would have said that it was more complicated even if it is not, she is a complicated lady and sometimes makes moutains out of molle hills. and now as for the cross the captain put on, no i am not going to beat you over the head for it i am just going ot ask why he would put it on and not just stick in his pocket? but oh thank you for pointing out that mal never seemed to visit inaras shuttle in good times only when he was at his lowest points when you might think he was the least proud of himself. when he feels the least honerable, or when he is about to die. Shit i would be pissed to, but if i were inara seeing that she is trained in the way of well people i would know that if they ever were going to talk about anything it should be done on neutral teritory, some where that is comfy for the both of them. not in his room or her room but maybe on the catwalk where they sat and drank after shindig or in the kitchen or somewhere privet but not personal. any way i am gig'n this thus far keep it up champ!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 26 January 2006 15:41
Kaylee: Godmother!? Really!? But wait, don’t you have to be married for that?

Scene: Everyone looks at Simon

Simon: What?!

Lmao
-blackbeanie

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