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Antebellum - Book I: Chapter Two

Monday, December 26, 2005

Second chapter in a post-BDM series (i.e. Big Damn Sequel). Warning: this one has length to it.

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A/N: I know, I know, it's really long and it's mostly dialogue. But it's Christmas so you'll forgive me, right? Holidays Happy!

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Book One – Chapter Two

What are you doing right now? Oh, yeah. You’re sleeping. Keep doin’ that.

Malcolm Reynolds stopped straining his neck and let his face drop back down on the dining room table and heard his bowl of half-eaten noodles clatter a bit. No, the table wasn’t the most comfortable piece of wood to lay his head on, and he couldn’t imagine his posture being approved by any kind of chiropractor, but nowadays when sleep came to him, he’d take it, even if it was disintegrating his lower back.

Mal could feel the saliva dripping across his cheek, and he knew that it was probably ruining the ink on his maps. It was his fault for falling asleep when he should have been plotting yet another impossibly clever route through the increasingly narrow safe space, but it was all just so boring. The more he looked at the faded, somewhat outdated star charts taped clumsily to one another, the less they seemed to hold any actual meaning. Besides, those clever kinds of routes were getting hard to come by. Truthfully, Mal didn’t have as great a grasp on navigating as he would have his crew believe. Wash always was the one to plot courses. But now he really couldn’t be doing that, the condition he was in.

It was thoughts like that that kept Mal from sleeping. So he tried to push it behind him to continue enjoying his uncomfortable slumber.

He could notice that he wasn’t as cold as he expected; the ship’s engine was running at half speed to conserve its energy before its forthcoming refueling so everyone had to live a little chillier than usual. He moved slightly, and he could feel the blanket draped around his shoulders and neck. It wasn’t his scratchy military-grade blanket, though. No, this one smelled good. A lot gooder than his stuff. Smelled like Inara.

Whenever he started thinking

Comments
Monday, 26 December 2005 12:01
I can't believe how everything is just piling on top of them. And poor Mal. He seems to be getting the sharp end of everyone's tongue with little or no respite. I just know there's gonna be trouble at that gorram market.. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
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Monday, 26 December 2005 12:33
LOVED the bit with Simon wearing Kaylee's shirt and Jayne betting that he was wearing her panties as well :P
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Monday, 26 December 2005 20:32
I don't even know where to start! Part 1 was already great, the amazing original characters you created there, and now it's plain that you have an iron grip on the canon character voices, too!

Mal's (3rd millionth) not best day ever was equal parts hilarious and exciting, mostly because you do such a great ob weaving the dialogues into a big net. One follows the other so seamlessly that you never give the reader a moment to catch their breath, which is great!

It read just like an episode, really, down to the mundane technology incompatibility issues.

And now things are only going to be worse. If you wanted a hooked reader, you got one!

Also, I wonder: Who did Mal sleep with six months after Miranda! *g*


One thing: the issues of Kaylee and Simon's activities and Inara's job and the government's response to Mal's message.... they all seem to contradict the timeline, considering it's been two years since Miranda now. Seems like those things should have been more or less resolved between them all now, or have been raised earlier.

But that is the one and only minor quibble I have.
Monday, 26 December 2005 20:34
Gah, I hate when I forget to sign in.

The last comment was me. *g*
Tuesday, 27 December 2005 20:04
- Outta curiosity, when was the last time you had sex?
- What!?
- Eighteen months

hee!!!! trust jayne to get right down to *ahem* business

b
Thursday, 29 December 2005 12:21
Oh, ummm, one last curious question: When do you think you'll be posting the next part? Days? Weeks? *g*
Sunday, 07 May 2006 07:35
WOW! I read the first part but never got a chance to see the rest! I am loving this! You have the character voices down pat, they're great! And the scene was very reminiscent of the opening scene from Serenity, but you put your own stamp on it and it's great! Will try to read through the rest as quickly as I can! This is just wonderful!
Thursday, 25 May 2006 22:30
All of Mal's interactions with each member of the crew are spot on! I love his conversation with Kaylee, Jayne, Zoe and Simon about any and everything and River calling him on his last sexual encounter was just awesome! It made me giggle ....

Love it!

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