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Antebellum - Book I: Chapter Twelve

Sunday, June 4, 2006

The twelfth chapter in a Big Damn Sequel series. In this installment: Tension mounts as the law comes knocking at the door.

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A/N: Whoo doggie! This one was a toughie, I have to say. Please let me know how it turned out, 'cause I genuinely don't know. Candle wax!

P.S. If you're new, go ahead and read the others why don't ya. At the very least, read the last chapter so this makes a shred of sense. Anyway, on with the reading!

Book One – Chapter Twelve

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“Mal? Mal, is something wrong?” the Baron asked. He asked this question twice, since Mal didn’t answer the first time. The second time he asked, he becoming understandingly unnerved. The Baron von Jeffery didn’t respond very well to external pressure.

Mal answered, but his attention remained focused on what was happening behind the locked door.

“I think… someone’s at the door,” he said, slowly creeping his away to the door.

He put himself parallel with the floor, and act that created more than a little strain on his muscles, and pushed his ear against the thin crack where the door met the wall. His heart started gaining speed, and he couldn’t make out most of the words coming from the front door, but he did hear James distinctly say a word that ceased his breathing for a second.

“Sheriff.”

“Oh…小狗在酸裡,” Mal muttered.

“Uh, hey, Mal?” The Baron asked, now visibly shaking and glancing side-to-side. “Wh-what’s goin’ on?”

“Shh!” Mal waved him away, trying to bring his voice lower.

"I think there’s a sheriff at the door.”

“Oh,” the Baron said, his eyes wide and his voice slowly ascending to a falsetto. “Well. Hey, I didn’t mention this before ‘cause I thought it was a given, but you really shouldn’t be caught with those coordinates I’m sendin’ ya.”

“I don’t really wanna be caught, period, Jeff.”

Mal started to feel a headache coming along. A weird one. It seemed to buzz more than pound. But Mal quickly decided that deciding on adjectives for a migraine was not the best use of his current time.

He moved his hand swiftly to his gun

Comments
Sunday, 04 June 2006 05:05
Wow! I was on the edge of my seat through this whole chapter!

The tension was so well done and the intercut with River/Simon/Mal/James/Carolina kept me panting to reach the end!

Well done!

Now, who does River not want Simon to trust...wherever the Baron is sending them?

Oh, please finish the next chapter quickly!
Sunday, 04 June 2006 05:18
WOW! Lots of great moments here! I am all a flutter as to what will be in the next chapter! YOu have woven some intense scenes together and I was on the edge of my seat as to what would happen! Can't wait for oyur next post!
Sunday, 04 June 2006 05:48
Wow....now this was a thrill ride worthy of Joss himself, thesoapboxer! Honestly though James was gonna have to knock the sherriff out:D

And River? Oh God....she can't catch a break, can she? Now she has some more horrific knowledge floating around her casaba:(

BEB
Sunday, 04 June 2006 07:48
PS: That was me, accidentally logged out.
Sunday, 04 June 2006 10:32
Wow, this was brilliant. So full of tension and drama and gorramit I was almost crying with James by the end of it. And poor River, I really hate that something or someone has burrowed into her brain and have this aweful dread that whatever it is may be starting to affect Simon and Mal, giving them both those odd headaches. It is so evil when friend is turned against friend out of such mind numbing fear. Hope we don't have so long to wait for the next part, I want to have some fingernails left by the end of this! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 04 June 2006 12:07
Wow that was tense. Very skillfully written to maintain the suspense of both plotlines.

It's nice to see more regular updates on this story. It's one of my favourites.

You really managed to capture the reasoning and fear in your OC's without going overboard on the exposition or leaving the readers to fill the blanks.

I'm very much looking forward to your next chapter!
Taya

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