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Bedlam: Part 12B

Thursday, December 22, 2005

My attempt at a season finale--this is part 2. Sex, humor, and all manner o' mayhem. This one's dark, kids!

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Bedlam: Part 12B

My attempt at a season finale--this is part 2.

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It’s Joss’s verse--I just borrow it.

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She was just a girl, a pretty, big-eyed, wild-haired girl. A laughing girl who played with Kaylee, teased her brother merciless, nicked food from Jayne’s plate. A brilliant girl who meddled in minds, saw the future. A dangerous girl who stood before them now, blood on her hands, her dress, the tips of her hair. A sad, beautiful girl who looked at Mal mournfully, as though he could somehow fix this, make it better.

He couldn’t do a gorram thing.

“Good God,” Gray murmured. He moved toward the closet.

“God ain’t no where near this,” Mal muttered. He watched as one of the troops gestured with his gun for River to sit on the floor, knelt gingerly to shackle her hands.

Gray stepped out of the closet, cleaned his palms on a handkerchief from his pants pocket.

“Lord in Heaven, its true.” He stared at the small, shivering figure of the girl on the floor. “She’s the one.”

“Didn’t have to put her through that to prove it,” Mal said, voice low and furious. “This ain’t the first time she’s cleaned up an Alliance mess.”

“It was rumored to be so.” Gray knelt by River, brushed a strand of wet hair out of her face. “I had to be sure, Captain Reynolds. A great many lives depend on my being sure.”

“Well, you found your assassin, Agent Gray. Can’t say I agree with the Alliance usin’ innocent little girls to do their dirty work. What do they want her for anyhow? Rub out some political rivals? Squash a rebellion on a border moon? What’s a man like you consider just cause for torturin’ teenagers?”

“Captain Reynolds, do you know what your problem is?”

Mal snorted a laugh.

“Which one?”

“You gave up on humanity long ago. Was it the War that did it? Or did it happen after, when life insisted on going on after the Browncoats failed?”

“At least I don’t have to look in the mirror and lie to my own self to get through the day. Ain’t lyin for nobody else neither.”

“What is tr

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 04:08
Sequel! I demand a sequel! This was an awesome story, Kaynara. More please!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 04:14
Oh please continue!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 04:17
Please write a second season! This is so good! "He left her alone in the room, the better part of his soul in her hands." I'm a sucker but I loved that line...and please? Inara and Mal have to find a way back to eachother we have to see how Simon deals with River leaving, Zoe and the baby? Please write the second season! I 've fallen in love with this story!

Thursday, 22 December 2005 05:09
Please continue this is to good to just stop. More please!!!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 06:54
You have to write a sequal! There is no way thstory can just end here! Mal and Inara not together, River leaving, Kaylee killing someone! You have to write about how everyone deals! Pretty please?
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 07:55
Yes, please continue! River specifically trained to kill Reavers is just brilliant and rings absolutely true. This story certainly was dark in many ways but also made me laugh many times - just like Firefly. You have an amazing talent for story-telling, and as long as you have the desire to share it with us, please continue to do so!
MAI
Thursday, 22 December 2005 08:07
I LOVE THIS STORY! It's funny and scary and so absolutely true to character. Please post your sequel soon. I HAVE to know what happens!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 09:05
OH WOW!! I just finished this whole thing and it was sooooo gooood!! You definantly need to do a sequel or something cuase holy-plastic-dinosaurs I need MORE!! Please, thanks.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 09:38
this story was so cool plz continue lol
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 12:51
Gorrammit Kaynara. I NEED a sequel!
Thursday, 22 December 2005 13:00
You can't end it like this SEQUEL
Thursday, 22 December 2005 13:50
IF people want a sequel? What do you mean IF?

In this series you've made me swoon with the prettiness, gasp at the twists and giggle giggle giggle with sheer delight at your excellently funny character voices (Sarcastic Simon being a huge favorite!), PLUS fascinating plot!

In this part alone you have Mal sliding down that eternal ferris wheel slope *again*, Kaylee growing beyond herself, Inara touching on about every high and low she could imagine, Zoe defining just what "strong" really is, Jayne and Simon... well, you just really captured their best sides here, resourceful and gentle each in their own way, and then... gah. River! What in the name of Santa is she up to?

I'm very much addicted! *g*

So, yes... bring on the "Bed And Wine" second season.

Thank you for 12 episodes of lovely entertainment so far, too. :)
Thursday, 22 December 2005 15:33
*hits floor*

whoa....whoa...

fantastic ending, i loved it! (demanding a sequel of course, along with everyone else :-O) Was ready to shoot Mal but it is so likely to have happened...

River... assassin...yikes...
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 16:16
hey April. I hope you will writ a story with River and Jayne together and trying finder out, what the blue hands means.
by Linette.
Thursday, 22 December 2005 17:59
No way can you leave it like this. So much unresolved and up in the air, as for River thinking her going with Gray would release the others to a life without the threat of the gorram Alliance hunting them down that proved pretty much an own goal, just accelerating the break up of the family rather than keeping them together. Reckon Mal's little albatross needs to reassess her plan and get back to where she is needed most. Not nothin' in the 'verse should stop her. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 22 December 2005 18:32
Okay, first of all, hating you for making Inara leave. Hating moment over.

Second of all, loving you for being such an awesome storyteller, with your awesome plot twists, your awesome take on the characters (sarcastic Simon is -very- sexy), and just...your awesomeness.

Third of all, begging you for a sequel, because gorramit, the pairings are awesome, I need to know how this rutting ends. Yes, rutting, with a g.
2X2
Thursday, 22 December 2005 22:14
Got to put my voice in here too, Kaynara, and ask you to go on with Bed and Wine! I'll be waiting on every part just as anxiously as I have been with Bedlam! Great, great story!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 22:39
How do describe this string of events... a kick in the 'nads is all that comes to mind.

I ses the poetential for some massive missbehavior in the future. We all know Mal is going after River... But some how I don't think River is going to be a good little soldier...
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 00:39
AHH you must continue!!! PLEASE!! You cant leave me hanging! And I really hope Mal and Inara find their way back to each other....they go through so much to not get to stay together in the end!!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 00:49
Re-read the whole series just to have it all in one go at the end. Just the best, you've got all the characters down amazingly (is it possible that you're channeling Joss??). Not a big fan of Jayne and River, but you made it so sweet that it really works well here. You MUST do the sequel, otherwise I'll have to go into therapy for withdrawal symptoms!


ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 01:13
YOU NEED TO ASK???????



SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 01:22
Just read the whole series. Defently need to write a season or ten more...ok well maybe only 5 more but still. You can't end it here.
Friday, 23 December 2005 03:32
Gah! You take River off the ship and ask if we want more? Are you insane?

You'd best hurry it up. I smell a rescue mission that needs doing.

Oh, and chalk up another vote for sarcastic Simon. I love him when he's being all smart ass.
Friday, 23 December 2005 06:00
I've been reading this fic and I really like it. The dialogue is sharp, the interaction between the characters. Mal and Inara are hot and Kaylee is sweet as a button even when she's in bed doing things that aren't... the sweetest. But what really makes this fic stand out is that, aside from the romance and the character interaction, you have a strong plot. Kudos to you for that. It's hard to do in fanfiction. So, please, keep writing. I'm really excited to see what happens next.
Saturday, 24 December 2005 00:40
ow. that hurt. more please. (i'm a sucker for punishment)

b
Saturday, 24 December 2005 04:20
Kaynara,

To add my humble little voice to the glorious cacaphony your tale has stirred up, GIVE US A RUTTIN' SEQUEL!!!

Also, I have to say this....I bow down to you preternatural literay abilities, cuz you took what could have been a short bridging piece between "War Stories" and "Trash" and made into a completely believable continuation and completion of Season One!

Keep pushing the Signal and have a Happy Holidays!

BEB
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 26 December 2005 10:30
You did a fine job with this story - I just read it from beginning to end. This is the first Firefly fanfic I've read & it's a doozy. Keep up the good work, I'll be reading!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 22 January 2006 10:07
you're a very talented writer.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 23 January 2006 15:36
I love my sleep. I loved this even more. Its 2:30am right now, and i have to work in the morning. Yet I was compelled to hold my eyelids open to finish. And I'm so glad I did, this was awesome, touching, sad, funny, and ultimately drew me into each character and their state of mind. You are very talented and I'm looking forward to reading more from you.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 29 January 2006 23:45
You will be considered evil if you don't make a sequel to this story! I swear! You are a great writer!
Friday, 10 February 2006 13:33
*wah!* Meanie. Made me cry. Usually only Joss does that.

I love what I've read so far, and am now on my way to the next 'season.' Please keep up the stellar work!
WINTERHART
Tuesday, 14 February 2006 02:56
Oh my gods...you're really making me cry here. It's too good...I can see the characters moving and saying things almost just as you've written them. I'm just so glad that you write quickly, because I know there's more stories after this which I haven't read yet.

You're an incredible writer; I'm all kinds of jealous and just so glad that you're sharing this with us. Thank you!

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