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Antebellum - Book I: Chapter One

Thursday, December 15, 2005

First in a Post-BDM series. Thinking of it as a take on the Big Damn Sequel. First up: A flashback.

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Book One – Chapter One

2503 A.D. – Seventeen years ago

It was the sword. Yes, it was definitely the sword that made Jonathon Chen the most nervous.

The man in his office had been standing there for over a half an hour it seemed, never saying a word. He just stood at the holo-screens, staring at the pictures and videos, moving only to scroll back or rewind certain images. He just stood there, no expression, lightly thumbing the hilt of the sword in his hands.

Chen hated these “inspections.” For one, they were degrading. He had thought that by rising through the ranks as he had, he was now immune from ever having to call another man “sir.” Another, they weren’t the most comfortable hours in Chen’s professional career. Operatives. That was the only name associated to these men. Each one they sent was different from the last, but they all came in the same way. No name, no rank, and no appointment.

Average height. No real discernable features save for his light brown complexion and his neatly trimmed beard and mustache peppered with tiny gray hairs, as were his temples. Chen wouldn’t have picked him out of a crowd, and that was exactly the point. He never looked too tame or too wild. Chen knew these Operatives were trained for this. They were trained to be directly on the edge of identity.

Chen didn’t like this one. The others weren’t exactly on his Christmas card list either, but this one was different. This one was unusually silent. Sure, they were all silent, but the silence in the room at this moment was not as clinical as the others. This one was thinking something. Chen knew it. Something different. This silence was unbearable. Perhaps it was the silence that made him the most nervous.

No, it was definitely the sword.

“They’re soldiers?” The Operative broke his silence, still staring at the screens.

“Uh, y-yes. Well, they were soldiers.”

“That’s what I asked.”

“Oh. I thought…” Chen’s voice trailed.

Chen had seen the images a couple dozen

Comments
Thursday, 15 December 2005 22:41
Wow, this is really interesting. Please keep writing more. I am intrigued!
Thursday, 15 December 2005 22:47
I really liked this.

The attention to detail was excellent, especially the organ incubation throw back to 'The Message'.

Interesting that you would have chosen Simon to start with and ended with River.

Am I correct in thinking that the operative in question was either Book (with the grey in his hair) or Early (with the 'does that seem right to you?' reference)?

I'm really interested to see where you'll go with this.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 15 December 2005 22:54
Oooo, I'm hooked. You've woven together many different plot threads, and done it well. And just one guess as to who this Operative is... :)

Diz <-- too lazy, as usual, to sign in
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 15 December 2005 23:50
Intriguing , please continue.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 16 December 2005 00:25
Okay, I'm hooked. I loved your tie in to the past. It reminds me of the opening of Serenity, which is clearly what you were going for. I'm hooked, please keep writing.
ANA
Friday, 16 December 2005 00:31
Oh Lord. I just know this is going to be one of those stories that I'm gonna get absolutely addicted to and check on for updates every five minutes and lose all touch with reality AIIEEEE!!!

<whew>

Seriously, that is a *great* beginning. Looking forward to the rest of it. Happy trails!
Friday, 16 December 2005 01:32
Wow! You have me intrigued. I can't wait to see where you are going with this.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 16 December 2005 06:54
Great story so far. Out of all the post BDM fics out there, this is the most interesting one out there. I could actually see the sequel start out this way, or include it somehow. Very nice. By all means, continue.
Friday, 16 December 2005 07:59
Great start you've got here. Awaiting more.

Luc
Friday, 16 December 2005 10:15
Very interesting beginning. You captured that calm, methodogical Operative voice very well. And, I guess, where we are post-BDM has an eery similarity to pre-1st War.

I'm looking forward to seeing where this is headed. :)
Saturday, 17 December 2005 21:58
Very wonderful way to introduce the follow on and inject unique tension. Love it so far, want more! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 18 December 2005 16:06
whoa.
nurse? can i get this intravenously please?

b
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 December 2005 05:33
realy good, hooked me right off. MORE PLEASE!
Thursday, 25 May 2006 22:17
Okay, I'm hooked, although it's so hard to get started on a fic that doesn't start out with our BDHs. But still ending with River was shiny!

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