Bedlam: Part 8
By Kaynara
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It wasn’t often Malcom Reynolds got this sort of reception. Hell, usually he was lucky to get any reception at all. A punch in the jaw was more likely. This--this weren’t half bad.
He and River had brought Serenity in just after dark, landed her in a clearing ‘bout half a mile north of the Brandywine Township.
“Malcom Ruttin’ Reynolds, you old son of a.” Mayor Parsons met them by a moonlit grove of trees--actually, the entire planet seemed to be trees.
Inara leaned close to Zoe, taking her arm.
“You’re sure they were friends, right?”
Zoe smiled, patted Inara’s hand reassuringly.
“Mal...do you remember the last time we had Everlift?” Parsons swayed slightly, as though he’d already begun the celebration.
“I remember you teaching me how to inhale. Then I don’t remember much of anythin.”
Parsons slapped him heartily on the shoulder.
“That’s a boy. C’mon, see what the missus and I cooked up for you all.”
***
Reclining in the grass, legs extended, Mal watched his crew with something akin to satisfaction. If a warm reception was a rarity, then this--all of ‘em well and fed and smilin’ mostly--was a gorram miracle.
Simon and Kaylee were dancing. The doctor had dragged her out where the others were, insisting when she hesitated, blushed and said she didn’t know the steps. Mal watched him twirl her around in some high-society fashion. The pair looked a bit out of place amidst the Brandywine folk, who were simple country people in their plaids and denims. Still, she was beaming, her cheekbones cutting high in her face, her hair flying as Simon spun her about, dipped her low to the ground. If Kaylee was happy, things were right with the world.
River was watching them too. She smiled when she saw Mal looking, waved at him across the way. She sat with Zoe in a patch of moonlight. Every few minutes, she bent her head close to Zoe’s stomach, murmured something softly as though addressing the baby. For all Mal knew, the kid talked back to her.
lordy...you did fantastic girl! i loved it. It was very well done and very tasteful. It's very easy to go over board on love scenes *speaking from personal experience in writing them and reading them* and you didn't.
take a bow, my dear!
*aaww i want a cuddly mal for christmas.**
That was very nice... I liked seeing Inara a bit nervous, I always thought she might be, with her heart involved... also felt the very poignant line
"And she knew in that instant, as he slid on top of her again, as she felt him press into her, hard through his trousers, her remaining swatch of gray silk. She knew she loved him, just as she knew she couldn't tell him."
tear right through my heart... so very sad, and so very Inara....
I'm really enjoying your story. Can't wait to see where things will go from here. They WILL continue, won't they??!
Great work.
You kept them completely in character, kept the descriptive interspersed with their thoughts and dialogue, and then you gave it all a very fresh shake! No cliches! Yay! The originality of it, the particulars of their movements, choices, clothing interaction even, they made the whole thing read very real and personal and that's what makes it flaming hot .
Wow!
Didn't mean to leave you hanging--TBC in part 9. As usual, thanks for all your kind words!
April (Kaynara)
It was beautiful! There's no other way to put it...simply beautiful. I cannot wait to read more....and I LOVE cuddly Mal! You just know that with Inara he would be, lol
And SQUEEEEING like a crazy person and the River/Jayne.
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bugchicklv
First time writing this level of shiny kink? Would never have known, truly, it was done so well.
I was a little worried at the tone you've taken with Inara; you've made her seem very fragile when it comes to sex, and I'd assume, given the breadth of her professional experience, she'd be anything but. However, you pull it off with aplomb. I think the sequence in which Mal gives her oral sex is the most telling: it's probably one of the few things she's not experienced and their interaction was particularily sweet. You've really made Inara into a very sympathetic and complex character, and I've read a lot of fic where she's cold, cynical and even hostile towards Mal's sexual attentions. This was a wonderful change of pace, and I had to break my silence and tell you so.
Great work, and I'm off to read the next part.
I love your Mal/'Nara.
You're my shiny new fav!
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