Blue Sun Room FICTION - DRAMA

If Only In My Dreams

Sunday, December 4, 2005

Mal reluctantly visits an old friend. Post-Serenity, so spoilers there be. PG-13 for a bit of language.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3116    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/N: Whatever you do, do not comment on this story. <----Reverse Psychology

Right foot. Left foot. Right foot. Left foot.

As silly as it felt, Mal knew for damn sure that if he didn’t keep reminding himself to walk forward, he’d head right back to the shuttle, tail fastened securely between his legs.

For the life of him, he did not know what scared him about this cliff side. It shouldn’t be scary; he’d been there a dozen times before. It wasn’t the cliff side, though. It was what was on the cliff side that Mal couldn’t bear.

Left foot. Right foot.

No noise from the com strapped to his side. He begged for something to be wrong back on the ship so that he’d have to go back, but he knew everything was going all right. The others should be doing fine in such low orbit. It was tough nowadays to land planetside. It was nearly unanimous that this trip was a necessity however. Nearly, as in six against one. Mal had lost.

The utter and unrelenting peacefulness of the situation was tearing Mal’s stomach to literal shreds.

The view was something nice to look at. That was one of the reasons they had picked this site. In retrospect, Mal pondered, it didn’t make much sense. They could have picked a tar pit miles below the planet surface and the feeling would have been the same.

Two years. No, two and a half years. Mal really didn’t like being up there. He wanted to just empty the leather bag he was holding, go back to the shuttle, and get back to Serenity, where he could sleep a little bit. Left foot. Right foot. Left foot.

As he came to the top of the cliff side, Mal tried desperately to examine the dirt on the ground. He silently blamed the sun being too bright, but it really was fine. He knew instinctively where to stop walking, and he dropped the heavy leather to his feet, it thus kicking up dust up into Mal’s nostrils.

Slowly, he raised his head at the stone cylinder in front of him, studying every crack and crevice along the way. The name carved in made

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:07
Awwwwww
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:08
Beautifully written. I didn't cry but I certainly felt like it. You've done such a fabulous job of conveying Mal's emotion and anguish.
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:42
Anonymous (70.240.199.160) may not have cried, but I did.
Sunday, 04 December 2005 03:00
Wow....just...wow! I honestly thought in the beginning of the story that Mal had made a pilgrimmage to Serenity Valley and we would get to see something like him screaming at the ghosts to let him have his peace, but this was even better (though much more sad :( )

This would make a great scene for Serenity 2...like the into or something.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 03:06
Wow, I actually cried.
I miss Wash so much!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 04:05
Wow...I'm usually immune to tear jerkers, but I got all misty-eyed at the end.

Very nicely done.
ANA
Sunday, 04 December 2005 04:26
Remembering lost family at Christmastime twists your heart inside out. I think I started bawling when Mal called Wash his brother. He's trying so hard to repay a debt that Wash would never, for one moment, ever consider that he owed him. It just makes me so sad.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 05:46
So well-written-- touching without being melodramatic. You should submit this for contests and things, I mean it. It's that good. I'm a little bit weepy over here, but also smiling because of the end paragraph, where Mal promises to make the 'verse a more just place, for Wash's sake. It's wonderful how you captured Mal's voice. I really, really hope that this story is the prologue to a series.
Sunday, 04 December 2005 14:30
brother...

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ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 14:41
That was beautiful....and so sad. Heartwrenching....thats a good term. But seriously this was VERY well written!
Monday, 05 December 2005 01:39
This was excellent and sad and touching and made me choke up inside with emotion. One little thing though, it felt strange that while Mal had so much to say to Wash from himself and the crew there was only a little aside to Book and no presents for his other friend. Made me feel sad for the Preacher as I think if Mal did make a pilgrimage back to the grave site it would have been to remember Book as well. Very well done, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 26 December 2005 21:01
Wow, how did I miss this before?

Absolutely heartbreaking and beautiful, every single word and nuance.

Friday, 03 February 2006 00:49
I was very touched by this and I like to think that Mal would be just that way if they made him take the things to Wash...

Sadly the whole premise that life was getting harder isn't hard to believe.

This was a nicely written piece that touched me and made me tear up just a little.

Thansk for sharing.

Sid
Monday, 07 August 2006 23:45
Wow! I'm really late in reading this but I'm glad I found it. I'm really crying now... thank you for writing this piece.
Friday, 08 September 2006 23:06
..sniff..

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