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Bedlam: Part 5

Saturday, December 3, 2005

Mal/Inara. Zoe/Wash. River/? R-ish, I imagine.
As promised: Mal and Inara check into the Beaumonde Inn. Need I say more? Okay, I could. But you’re gonna have to read it to find out. Leave some gorram comments!

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4995    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Bedlam: Part 5

By Kaynara

***

If she could just hide him away in here, stash him like the cargo, he’d be safe. They wouldn’t be able to find him, harm him. He was heavier than he looked. She grasped him under the armpits, tugging. The walk from the bridge felt endless. But she could save him. Sure it looked bad. She’d seen a lot worse in the war. Legs aching from the weight, arms stinging, Zoe laid Wash’s broken body out in one of Serenity’s many handy cargo holds. So close, baby, so close. She took out the last scaly bits of the Reaver harpoon, gleeful now--they were almost there. And suddenly he awoke, cursing a string of slurred Mandarin, choking for air.

“...on the wind,” he finished, half-amazed. He sat up, rubbing at his chest as though the wound stung just slightly, an old scar mostly-forgotten.

“You almost left me, Husband.” Zoe laid her head on his breast, feeling the warm skin against her lips, feeling his heart.

“Aw, Zoe.” He smoothed the hair over her temple. “I know you’d never desert me, lamby-toes. Never leave me skewered on a stick, the main course at the big Reaver luncheon.” He laughed but his tone turned bitter at the end, wryly-ironic.

She met his gaze, wide-eyed, but he just smiled, hugged her around the middle. She fell against him, wanting to weep for joy. His lips grazed over her ear lobe, and he took it in his mouth, sucking lightly.

“That kid’s gonna have one sexy mama,” he said, sliding a hand under her shirt. “Strong too. Impenetrable as steel and twice as cold.” He stroked gently, and she felt the baby respond, kick against his hand as though yearning to get out. As though trying to escape.

“Here’s hopin’ she don’t fall out of your knapsack whilst you and Mal are shootin the outlaws.”

“Husband, don’t you know I’d never--”

“Of course not, sweetiekins. Least not before....”

Zoe woke retching and threw up in the sink.

***

Sometimes, when he first saw her mornings, ‘fore either of ‘em opened their mouths, he was transported back.

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 00:06
I had to read passages over cause the *** confused me, usually that means change of sceene, but then I realized they didn't mean it here...
Sunday, 04 December 2005 00:20
Oh hell, this is GOOD!

I was going to just ignore the whole Cora business and enjoy the prettiness of Mal and Inara together and then you go and put in exciting plot and torture and flashbacks and NISKA and Inara hiding and more Wash!!! (Cora who?)

In other words: Squee! Absolutely excellent, I'm loving this!

Hooked again, I am. *g* Next part soon, please?
Sunday, 04 December 2005 00:31
hey, sorry if there's *** confusion. i use them for change in scene, "commercial breaks," changes in Mal's consciousness...pretty much whenever I feel the need. hope you're all keeping up (and enjoying)
-kaynara
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:29
I love this story! I can't wait for more!!!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:41
OH wow! Seriously, keep this up. I could read 40 chapters of this quality. I'm really invested in this story now. Can't Let Me Put Emphasis on CAN'T wait to see what happens next.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:49
Oooh, two chapters in one day. Shiny!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:57
dang it all, i'm addicted to too many fanfics...

but is there such thing as too many?

I've send it before and I'll say it again...yu-oh for mal. *big big eyes*

nothing ever works for him it seems.

love the last wash lines..somewhat insightful, n'cest pas?
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 02:57
This is awesome stuff!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 03:17
Wow. It didn't even occur to me that River would be able to reach him once he's feeling nuts himself, and now she's bringing Wash to help. Very nice.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 04:06
OMG the pretty Mal/Inara is wonderful!! But ahhhh Niska!! I love that River and Wash are helping!! Cant wait for the next part!!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 05:22
It is like Christmas every time I see you've posted another chapter. I am addicted. Love the last parts with River and Wash. Also looking forward to more insight into Inara's past.

Thank you!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 05:49
More please! And hurry! (but thanks kindly for getting this one up so quick!)I love your writing style!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 07:27
Ok. I don't often give 10's but even that's not adequate here. I'd give you a 15 if system'd let me.
Fave line:"“Had an inkling,” he admitted." simply for the spare Mal-appropriateism that it is. But every single voice in here is dead-on. And asterisks-schmasterisks. This piece followed finer'n frog's hair, no continuity problems.

Agreed about the excellent command of pace, the thank god Mal & 'Nara are finally gonna GET some and then from there to our quick-witted captain suffering coitus-non-us due to his wonderful nose smelling a trap, hiding 'Nara away and then SLAM. Into Niska at his awesomest horrible evilness. Mal cracking SO wise all the while, keeping screams from escaping lips that would surely bring 'Nara out. And god, what they'd do to her would hurt so much worse than what they're doing already, bad tho that is.

I wanted to quit reading when the torture got heavy but was already in too deep to stop. Was ready to be angry at you, 'cause I figured Mal was a dead man (& by SUCH torture--drugs taking him back to Serenity Valley. EVIL!) and then Tinkerbell came to him and he sent her for help and I grabbed hope with both hands. THANK YOU for that. Bless you.

How the heck long do we have to wait for more of this? GIVE. It's the holidays, after all.
Sunday, 04 December 2005 08:19
I'm all pins and needles to see how this plays out! More please!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 14:12
*screams* MAL!!!

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Sunday, 04 December 2005 15:13
This is fantastic... I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for more!!! Hurry, hurry, hurry! Love it!!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 19:20
“Have you ever heard of a writer called Shan Yu?”

Aaaaa!!! Run away! Run away!
Monday, 05 December 2005 01:13
Oh Wow, I was so caught up in all the Inara and Mal goodness that when Inara quoted the book by Shan Yu on the shelf I about siezed up inside! *Wode ma*, excellent job ratcheting up the drama and tension and loved how quick Mal was in realising their peril and thinking only of how to keep Inara safe. Sigh, good gorram I love our brave Cappy. And so loved first River then Wash coming to him in his extremis. Hope they have a way to help him out of the hell Niska is taking him too. Superb story, stellar writing, can't wait for more! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 05 December 2005 18:39
that is amazing all i can say is wow!!!

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