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The Measure of a Jayne, Part 2

Monday, October 31, 2005

Jaylee. Still NC17, Darlings. More naughtiness ensues. You have been warned.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3901    RATING: 8.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Didn't solicit a beta this time, but thanks again to my three original Senseis and princessnipnip for confidence-giving.

The Measure of a Jayne, Part 2

Kaylee fumbled her cabin door open, flew into sanctuary, stripped her outer clothes off and dove into bed, flushed face down. No use. No hope for it. She tried to tell herself that nothing happened. Nothing. She’d held his hand till he fell asleep and that was all she’d held. Absolutely.

But the charged up clockspring tightness below her navel said she’d better quit lying. Although Kaylee wasn’t beyond obfuscating to others when telling the truth would only hurt ‘em terrible bad, she always spoke truth to herself, even if she was the only one she was talking to.

So Jayne’s nurse rolled over onto her back and let her train of thought steam on through, engine fully stoked from the way he’d looked, innocent strong big fully equipped blameless male parts laid out, then levitatin’ in her hand’s grasp.

That same hand that’d so recently held his cock now streaked down inside her plain white panties, touching what her nethers already told her brain was furious moisture. Getting wet and wetter just from recollecting Jayne’s own.

Might could have saved herself this particular horizontal exercise, mighta done without the need to stroke and fondle her body toward completion using this mind-fecking Jayne imagery, if not for the fact that she’d involved two senses in her explorin’ when just one woulda likely done. A quick visual and then a quicker exit mighta left no brain-scarring at all.

Nope, she couldn’t have left it to one sense. Weren’t enough for her to look, she’d gorram-well had to touch, had to take exactin’ engineerin’ measurements as if to sculpt him from memory outta cold engine grease later on.

Two senses were all she’d used for explorin’ Jayne’s terrain? Was a sheep-humpin’ wonder she hadn’t tilted her damn head down a few inches more, far enough to inhale his smell and further still to have a taste.

That woulda

Comments
Monday, 31 October 2005 02:23
I'm suprised no one has hired you to write this type of stuff. Loved the visuals.
Monday, 31 October 2005 02:35
He knew...that tricky man.
Monday, 31 October 2005 02:37
You know I'm an avid reader. And you know I'm wanting more.

You do know, right? 'Cause I do want more. You can't just leave it there.
Monday, 31 October 2005 02:45
Still havent read it.. But where's my Simon/ Kaylee fic!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 03:00
Great, Great, Great. The dialog is wonderful and the narration is superb. I cannot WAIT for the next installment!
Monday, 31 October 2005 03:08
Ohhhhhhh, how I DO love you shiny happy people out there leaving feedback! I'm Snoopy, dancing with food bowl on nose tip right now. Thank you all. I'll go hack on Part 3 now thanks to all the encouragement.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 04:18
Good going- looking for to more!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 04:20
YOu have an interesting voice. I get so sick of all the countrified, yokel dialect. You could be cleaner w/ the transition of voices but overall, it's a refreshing telling of an underappreciate pairing.

A 9 for the lack of predictable Slot A and Tab B tension.
Monday, 31 October 2005 11:57
Great stuff, more Jayne and Kaylee please?
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 13:21
So nice to read a fic by someone who cares about the little details. Like eye colour. I'm a portrait painter, so I pay alot of attention to descriptions of people. You got it spot on. I keep reading stories where Jayne's eyes are hazel, brown, green... I'm always like, Hello? Have you even SEEN Jayne?
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 16:01
Oooh, yummy... time for Jayne to heal-up, methinks! There's 'riding' to be done (yey!) Enjoyed Simon's Hyppocratic murmurings! Very funny..
Lovely,
RubyMoss
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ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 18:07
Ohh I can't wait for Jayne to be up and around again! Not that he's not um.. up already (sorry I wrote the 1st sentence and then couldn't resist)

I'm loving this and waiting not so patiently for more. :)
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 31 October 2005 18:28
Love it! Jaylee that's real- full of grit and heat.
Monday, 31 October 2005 21:22
More. Now.
I mean... yes, please, I'd like a bit more of this tasty, naughty, oh-so-sweaty-sweet fic. :)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 00:12
Yay! Feedback is frickin' AWESOME to get! Especially the kind you're plunking down. Yeah, Jayne's a hard man, ain't he? And a riding man, for true. :0) I'm working on Part 3 since I know you care. You people give me reason to live.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 15:38
Nice... good writing, and I enjoyed reading. A suggestion: don't tell us right out that Jayne knows, tell us through what he does. Keep writing.
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 17:00
*sits with her mouth agape* I'm in awe of your writing. PLEASE update as soon as you possibly can! Can't wait for some more Jaylee interaction, which you do masterfully by the way. LOVE IT!!
Wednesday, 02 November 2005 18:07
hee! naughty naughy, you'll get caughty...just hit me upside the head with a bat willya?

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Saturday, 05 November 2005 03:58
Remember what I told you Wash, about venturing out????? You need to do that....plain and simple....leave the training wheels behind...spread your wings and fly...you're already half way there...this is particular part is a lot smoother in transition that the last...I'm guessing w/the last, it was to feel the waters, to which you did beautifully, but this is a lot more fluid in thought and voice...your talent is a fireball and I know this isn't even the half of it...let it go Wash, let it all go...and run w/it...
Sunday, 13 November 2005 13:06

This was a well paced, well written and enjoyable read! It made me smile more than once.

The character voices are spot on. I love the way that it's written - as though the reader is inside the character's head. (The way that you described Kaylee's state of mind is really good –especially the feelings and doubts that would arise after that kind of situation. I love the way that she tried to convince herself otherwise. It was really Kaylee-esque! )

Also, I love the he-knows-that-she knows now. :) The playful nature of the situation makes it a joy to read. Looking forward to seeing where this is heading!

I've never really considered Kaylee and Jayne having feelings for each other, although, I'm getting really comfortable with the notion. (And that’s just after reading parts one and two.) It comes across in a natural way. Looking forward to seeing how this works out.

Great work ItsaWash! I want to read more! *Rushes off to read the next part.*

9/10!
BRYSONTHEBROWNCOAT
Tuesday, 29 November 2005 11:22
Mmmm. Better than the last. Part two had some more graphic presentation. You managed to weave the arrousing parts flawlessly into an even more interesting story. I like they way things are developing. I can see wheels turning, this is a great motion in moving the character motivation. Again, more than one part of me was pleased by the adventure into stepping up the maturity level of this one. Bang up job.
Tuesday, 25 April 2006 22:03
Still reading, I guess you got my interest :)

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