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Heartbroken - Part 4

Saturday, November 29, 2003

The plot's thickening, and so is the jambalaya--plus Inara and Adair get to have a little heart to heart about the men in their lives.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4908    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Roaring right on after Part 3

All Firefly characters are the property of someone else. All original characters are copyrighted by yours truly. This is not in any way, means or intention meant to infringe on anybody.

MIGHTY BIG THANK YOU goes to Defender--my partner in crime who has always come through to help me make this thing the best it can be. She understands constructive criticism, same as I do :D

The MIGHTY BIG APOLOGY still stands for anyone who can read and speak French, Cajun or Chinese. I've added translations for a little Cajun and some of the Chinese I managed to make up on my own and didn't have to correct ( must be doing something right ) -

Cajun

kisa vou di - what you say

pa tschwe - no kill

pa aste - not now

Chinese

zhe buzhengque zai hen tuo - it's not correct in my head.

jao jile ji aode - that's great, perfect

yibao xiao yizhi - little pack of rats

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Heartbroken - Part 4

The infirmary seemed to reverberate in stunned silence as Cariveau and Siobhan stared at their injured crewman in complete shock. Simon’s expression contained nothing more than concerned inquiry, but Mal passed a hard look at his counterpart.

"Thought you said this Armand fella was dead," Mal said.

"No," Cariveau shook his head adamantly. "I did not. You did--or you implied it. Last we heard of Armand was Serenity Valley. We were told he was listed missing in action."

"He...he is alive?" Siobhan could barely say it. "After all this time?"

"You're sure it was him?" Cariveau asked.

Ellis nodded. "Sat across the dinner table from those eyes for a lot of years--I'd know 'em anywhere. Thing is, that's all I remember--Armand's eyes, then nothing."

Siobhan stared at him, only barely comprehending what Ellis was saying. "He stabbed you? Armand?"

"I don't... Zhe buzhengque zai hen tuo . It was Armand, but it wasn't. Eyes were right

Comments
Sunday, 30 November 2003 12:38
Oh wow, I just love this story and this part is wonderful. Lots of lovely moments captured in it that sparkle and shine. Love how the two Captains are finding their way with each other and I am anxious as to what in the nine hells has happened to Inara. Come on Mal, you can run faster than that! Do keep going, can't wait for the next part. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
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Sunday, 30 November 2003 15:41
Very good, keeping up the characterization well. I'm really enjoying this.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 30 November 2003 19:40
BC

That's our Mal with the little girl. He could charm the scales offin a gator.
Monday, 01 December 2003 17:30
okay, I'm sorry, I can't stand it anymore. whoever rated this story a 10 (can you see me blushing?) I appreciate it - you have no idea - but it is far from perfect.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 02 December 2003 19:25
Okay, all these cliffhangers are KILLING me! Not to rush such a wonderful story, but please hurry or I'll bite my fingernails down to the quick...

Friday, 05 December 2003 06:05
Chainnain, Heartbroken is a great story. I'm really looking foward to the next chapter.
Saturday, 06 December 2003 05:55
Every chapter is getting better. I love this story.

The Cajun scenes are quite accurate as well.

Ooh, you're cliffhangers are evil.
Thursday, 11 November 2004 08:41
I loved the part with Jayne around the kitchen and when Mal was backpedaling from marrying one of the women from the ship.

Inara's part was really good, you captured her very well.

Keep flyin'

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