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Heartbroken - Part 7

Sunday, August 8, 2004

Mal knows who the trouble maker is on board ship...er, that is, on board ships. He takes care of business, gets an eerie little visit from another Serenity Valley survivor, then he finds out whose heart was broken first.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4822    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Recap:

Adair just tried to have a heart-to-heart with Mal who's more than a little preoccupied right now. It turns out Larkin Hague really was a traitor, but his wife and unborn child have given him two really shiny reasons to atone for it. Ellis might be Book's son, but there isn't enough conclusive proof. Wash is babysitting Jordain, and River is hot on the trail of someone who might just be as mixed up inside as she is.

Disclaimer:

All Firefly characters are the property of someone else. All original characters are copyrighted by yours truly. This is not in any way, means or intention meant to infringe on anybody.

Author's Note:

MIGHTY BIG THANK YOU goes to WindDancer and MalsDoxy for the quickest and best betas I've ever gotten. Thanks also to Robert Louis Stevenson for "My shadow" and Dorothy Aldis for "Hiding" and to my mother for reading them to me when I was little.

The MIGHTY BIG APOLOGY still stands for anyone who can read and speak French, Cajun or Chinese. The translations as I understand them are included, except the more vicious Chinese swearing. Any browncoat worth their salt knows all those anyway. For the French-Canadians out there please keep in mind if it isn't spelled right enough to be French, chances are pretty good it's Cajun.

Glossary - Cajun and French/and mostly Cajun

Sil vous plait, Maman - Please, Momma? (he's so polite, isn't he?)

Faire attention - Be careful

Pa aryen se oublié - Nothing is forgotten

Frè - brother

Oui, mo frè. Il est - yes my brother, it is

Non, fre--couillon - No my brother, don't be an idiot (economical language, Cajun)

Dromi... fò dromi - sleep...must sleep

Mère d'un Dieu - Mother of God

Glossary - Chinese:

qin ài de - my darling

Bi zui - be quiet!

Lāshî - shit

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Heartbroken - Part 7

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Comments
Sunday, 08 August 2004 11:21
Excellent, especially the closing dialogue between Mal and Adair. Long time coming but worth it. I really was beginning to wonder if you were going to write any more of this tale so many thanks for doing so. Shiny! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 09 August 2004 05:50
This had always been an excellent story. I'm glad you've returned to finish it, and to do it such justice.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 17 August 2004 04:35
Glad you picked this up again. Thanks Channain.

(I think Zoe's rifle is a .45)
Friday, 17 September 2004 19:18
Excellent! And there is another chapter to come too? I can hardly wait! For the sake of my sanity make it soon Channy!
Friday, 12 November 2004 09:12
I loved the sing-song poetry between River and Armand. I wondered how or what River would have to defend herself and now that I know, I think it was smartly done.

Keep flyin'
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 January 2005 00:12
Aw! "Hiding" was one of my favorite poems when I was a wee lad. "Have you looked in the ink well" is a family catchphrase now. Thanks for using it in this story!

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