Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Eidolon (Chapter 25)

Friday, November 25, 2011

He climbed his ladder, popped the hatch, but stopped short of the galley, wondering why he had a largish and thin curved sword impaled halfway through his well-used and already battered dining table. (Wake)

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Simon had thought before that the name Serenity had a funereal sound to it, and events since then hadn't exactly convinced him otherwise. So in a way it was fitting, that the cargo bay seemed like the vault of an earthen mausoleum, metal framework and brown wall paneling climbing into the shadows above them.

They had removed the contents of the shipping crate from the back of the ground trailer, had gathered around in a semi-circle to pay their respects. The clamps echoed into the gloom as he sealed the cryochamber, a hard and unforgiving sound. The doctor hesitated, the last button unpressed, until he received a go ahead from the captain. The container flooded with a hiss of super cooled air. The freezing process took only seconds, for his patient's heart to stop, for her vital signs to cease.

He rested a hand on the lid, his own quiet farewell, and as he moved away, his sister stepped up to take his place. She leaned over to lay her ear on the shimmering grey surface as though to listen, her long dark strands arrayed around her head, her arms wrapped around the sides. Perhaps she was able to hear something, some song of cell or molecule or energy after clinical death that not even science could detect. Even so, her supplication was perhaps a little too much, and not entirely appropriate. He tapped at her shoulder and she allowed him to somberly lead her aside.

She had prompted the rest of them out of their own reluctance, and they each took a turn saying goodbye. Zoë stood tall next to the stasis cell, the salute of a bronze honour guard in a leather vest instead of a uniform, a moment of silence before she departed. Even a sorrowful Jayne shuffled awkwardly nearby before he blurted something out in a mumble and hurried away.

Kaylee was next, the sadness of her face in contrast with the cheery sweetheart patch on her overalls and the pink print of her shirt. Despite his own feelings of hurt over her lack of trust, he felt a sudden regret for his harsh words to her. But he wasn

Comments
Friday, 25 November 2011 04:27
Very vivid description of Mal's dream/nightmare. Sent chills down my spine. Things can't turn out as bad as his nightmare, can they?
Friday, 25 November 2011 04:43
Depends on what you make of it. There's quite a bit of symbolism here.
Friday, 25 November 2011 14:53
Dreams are always fun to write. I really liked this Byte!
Friday, 25 November 2011 20:26
Poor Mal, pretty hefty nightmares to be having with little in the way of relief in sight. Ali D
"You can't take th sky from me!"
Saturday, 26 November 2011 06:15
As a writer, I'd agree, Nick - it's a lot of fun to get inside the dreams of a character and write their hopes and fears. Quite a bit more fear than hope here. Perhaps that says something about how I treat the characters.

Mal makes his own hope and luck. And then it goes wrong most times.
Saturday, 26 November 2011 11:15
So, ok Bytemite, you have me wondering, just how much pain will the Captain put himself through?

Just caught up on chapters 24 & 25 and it seems that Mal is seeing an awful lot of ghosts, or maybe that’s his guilt settling in. Should he feel shame the way he treated the companion when the crimes she were committing (in his eyes) were worse than his very own? Sure he should. And now it’s coming back to haunt him. Who’d have thunk…..that yet with Inara so close, it seems as if she’s’ across the universe from him.

I really enjoyed these two works, excellent reading and ready for more!

BPZ
Saturday, 26 November 2011 15:12
Oh, pain-wise, I'd say this is maybe a five-out-of-ten for Mal. His life kinda sucks.

I don't think he DOES think anything she's done has been remotely worse than the things he's done, and considering how he really feels about her, that makes his mistreatment really uncalled for.

Sunday, 27 November 2011 03:52
*This* is five-out-of-ten? Now you've got me REALLY afraid of what you've got in store for the poor man! Reminds me of the scene in Blue Sun Job where Guildsister writes a truly awful day for Mal, then has him reflect that, "hey, it didn't even make his top ten list of truly crappy days. Which really said something" about his life. Oh dear.
Sunday, 27 November 2011 16:57
To say anything else would be spoilers, but Mal's already kind of a big bundle of emotional pain, and for him, that's a normal or zero state.

So this dream, bad as it is, doesn't really register. Now, what happened to Inara is pretty bad for him on a normal scale, as she represents his hopes for any kind of better life (among other things), but losing her is more a continuation of the status quo, and is compared to events that were "life-changing bad," "himself changing bad," and "mind breaking bad."

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