Blue Sun Room FICTION - MYSTERY

The Guns of Yamenmiao (Pt. 9)

Tuesday, June 17, 2008

The Old That Is Strong - Book 1, Part 9. Mal and company at last reach their objective, only to learn what a true horror they've uncovered....

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 5034    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

Tweet

Okay, gang - sorry for the late post, but some people should run railroads and some people shouldn't. It applies even better in real life than it does in this fanfic. :P Now there's a lot of Chinese in this one, so don't forget to hover your cursor and check the prologue for the rest of the blurbs! ;)

And while you're at it, check reader responses:

Angellemarcs, thank you, thank you, thank you and thank you! I was a little worried about writing Wash early in the fic, so I'm glad to know you're enjoying his role. Trying to spin the story as quickly as I can, but the more complicated things get....well, you know how it is.

Jane0904, thanks a bunch! :D

darbymonster, well, then....this....is a day it'll feel good to be me. ;) Sorry to spoil your Monday by posting so dang late. And thanks for your remark on the story's current pace. Glad to know you're not looking for plot resolution (or worse yet, pairing resolution seeing that there aren't any pairings here) right away, like some people!

mal4prez, yeah, I'd say it's just you. ;) Hee hee. But things with Inara are not what they may seem. [/mysterious]

yinyang, yeah, I conjured they hadn't gotten much of their needed screen time of late - at first I thought Simon should do more than whinge about River, but since that's half his role on the show anyway.... ;)

Katesfriend, thanks a mil! I'm very gratified you've continued to read and enjoy. To you and to all hands, a million thank-yous to all for your comments about River in the last part. I was doing a fair bit of fretting over whether she was in character, but the most of you seem to think she was - so that's VERY helpful to know!!!

Thank you again, and PhyreLight, well - what would I do withoutcha? ;)

On to the discovery....

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=20478>Part 8

前进

The steel-grated steps from the ground level to the carved path, hewn p

Comments
Tuesday, 17 June 2008 03:03
WOW! A great story at work here and I am definitely impressed with Robert. He's won my heart. :))

Greatness and ready for more next Monday!!
Tuesday, 17 June 2008 12:37
"what would I do withoutcha?"

You'd have the world's worst fanfic on your hands you pi qi huai de old man! :p
Tuesday, 17 June 2008 16:33
I love the description of the train, sitting in the darkness, bodies lying around it. I get a real feeling of claustrophobia! And River is still being cryptic - so much so, I almost expect her to start talking in rhyme. Looking forward with great interest to the next part, and how they intend getting out of the mountain ...
Wednesday, 18 June 2008 02:18
Love the Riverspeak - did you include her just to give out the train specs? You've got a great handle on her character and to show how hurt she was by Robert's fear was very easy to see. Am really enjoying how you keep true to the elements of the 'verse, like Saffron and fusion tape. Loved the comment about Mal's grey hair. Now how are they going to get out of this mess?
Wednesday, 18 June 2008 23:02
Wow, you really did a great job describing their descent into the old mountain tunnel to finally find the train. Describing how the shoot out had set off the ammunition and blocked the tunnel killing the men was well accomplished and I could easily imagine River getting too spooky under those circumstances for comfort but she was right on the money! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 24 June 2008 17:22
OK, I have actually tried to leave feedback a few times and had this damned thing seize up... the graveyard underground train is very cool. In a creepy way, of course. :) And you made me visit dictionary.com: appurtenance. Good word LOL!
Sunday, 06 July 2008 05:40
Figured I should probably leave feedback, even if it's late, because I really love River's dialogue in this chapter. The way you revealed everything was also something I could see being part of an episode of Firefly on TV.

Post Your Comments

You must log in to post comments.