The Guns of Yamenmiao (Pt. 6)
Monday, May 26, 2008
The Old That Is Strong - Book 1, Part 6. Mal, Wash, and Robert take flight up Yamenmiao Pass to begin their search for the missing train, and meet someone they did not expect.
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First things first - responses to the last post.... Angellemarcs, sorry I haven't responded to your last couple yet - been working my pi-gu off all weekend to make sure there's nothing to do today so I can go to a Browncoat BBQ. ;) Thanks very much for staying with this. I, too, like original characters - I find that they freshen things up a bit, take us (and the BDHs) places they don't usually go by themselves. Like mountain passes and Alliance academies, for instance. ;) Let's enjoy Wash while we got him - the last couple of fics in the series are post-BDM, and I'm a canon freak, so.... :/ 2x2, hiya!!! Thanks a mil for dropping by. I'm hopeful folk will warm up to Rob soon. They always say to write what you know, and that's what I do. But what they don't say is that you know a lot more by experiencing something than just reading about it. Thank you VERY much for the great comment, there's plenty more where this came from. Jane0904, hey, glad to see you along! :D Thanks a heap for the line! mal4prez, been meaning to E-mail you back for a few days, but see my response to Angelle above. ;) This post will explain why there are no mag-lev trains on Roma. Are we in for a fun ride? You be the judge, but I sure as hell hope folks think so once we get goin'! Thanks for coming by again! Katesfriend, thank you thank you thank you. Indeed, good action and adventure are one thing, but background has its place, too - then it becomes a good story and not just a pointless action flick. ;) Thanks for sticking around - things are about to get (I hope) exciting, intriguing, and oh-God-oh-God-we're-all-gonna-die. ;) With perennial beta-thanks to PhyreLight, blurbs in prologue, cursor hovering over Chinese phrases, and no further ado, let the adventure begin!!!
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=20338>Part 5
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Mal had never seen a steam locomotive at work.
He had heard of them,
Nice job of setting up the chapter to come. Glad you brought River in - what use is a great mysterious secret without River to remystify it?
Just when it seemed that the explanation for why the Alliance was hands off was known, you reintroduced an element of mystery in Mal's musings.
And Wash quoting Shakespeare? Shakespeare's Richard (III) was an unmitigated bastard. Foreshadowing there of the 'ganglord of the week?'
As alway, great descriptive language, which I stopped and pulled myself out of the story to savor.
And a scary River prediction to leave me anxious for our BDHs .... this was indeed a good and filling meal.
(and sorry about missing commenting on last chapter - that thing called life, work, and the DMV got in my way all week)
Fun of River to tag along and sense that someone's coming along. Friend or foe? *cue dramatic music!*
BTW, I didn't find myself stumbling on excess words in any of this. It still has a lovely flow, but in this chapter I see the scenary and action more than I see the words, which is exactly how I like my prose. Very enjoyable chapter!
"You can't take the sky from me!"
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