The Guns of Yamenmiao (Pt. 5)
Monday, May 19, 2008
The Old That Is Strong - Book 1, part 5. The crew settles in to hear the true story about their objective before the adventure begins.
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First of all, reader responses! ;) Angellemarcs, I think the other guy always has a writing quality we wish we had. Your vision of the Academy and the horrors it produced, for instance. I sure couldn't have thought of that! Thanks for staying with it. :D Yinyang, thanks a heap - that's precisely what I'm aiming for so it's good to know. Here's the next part for ya! ;) Mal4prez, it's my hope that this'll make up for the lack of a 'Kaylee episode' in the series. I can tell right now you leave (and hopefully will continue to leave ;)) some of the best replies a story can get, for good or ill. Darbymonster, indeed - but when you taste a lot of bitterness at first, what you eventually find is that much sweeter when you get to it. Thanks a million for stoppin' in. Katesfriend, that means a great deal and it's very encouraging. Thank you!! And thank you to all who replied, both to the last post and to the blog entry. So let's get on with the fic, shall we? :D Beta-thanks to PhyreLight, as always. Prologue blurbs, Chinese phrases, cursor hovering....yeah, you know the rest.
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=20304>Part 4
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"Not to be a ying zai yao gao, Cap'n," Robert spoke up as the group filed through the aft door into the dining area. "But I got a notion more's at work here than just local colour."
"Seems to me the local colour's brown," Mal answered. "Me and Zoe here spent too many nights and not enough days tryin' to keep the purple out of it. Show me a fly in the ointment, and I'll show you a lot of plus-sized Alliance noses stickin' where they shouldn't ought to."
"You ain't allowed to talk about plus-sized noses, y'know," Jayne commented.
"Jayne!" Zoe's tongue might well have lopped his head off at a closer range. "Best be closin' the peanut gallery. We got work to do."
"You get a hold of Whosieface, then?" Kayl
Robert is quite intriguing, but then I like orginal characters. It's a lot harder to write them in a world, that has already been made.
I love reading about Wash again. You do him perfectly and I miss him.
Overall, I love the continuing adventure. It is well written and suspenseful. I loved Wash telling Mal about the mule and its sacrifice. Very funny!!
I'm really enjoying this! The idea is great and Robert is a very interesting character, not that I fully trust him mind, but I liked the story of his father's heroic death.
And all things trainline/quarry related and such reads very real and natural, not like you've read a bunch of books and are quoting passages back at us to dazzle with your knowledge :o) Which is not to say you dont' dazzle with your knowledge, but not in a hit-me-over-the-head kinda way. It's a good thing :o)
Thouroughly caught up now, and excited for more!
The dialogue was fun. I was a little confused here and there but it was my own fault for not reading your earlier chapters. You caught me up to the full situation in the end. My curiousity is piqued - we're in for a fun ride, I think!
There was only one thing that sat with me wrong - the line of Wash's that starts with "Well, take it from me, there's no call to fret..." It's too cowspeak. I hear Kaylee saying it, not Wash. Maybe you wrote it for Kaylee then changed it to Wash without adjusting the verbage? (I do that kind of thing a lot.) It was odd, since you're usually spot on with the voices.
Speaking of which - I love how Mal read Robert. The good father figure Sergeant came out for a minute there. Cool.
You can't take the sky from me
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