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Hard Times - Part Two

Thursday, December 20, 2007

Post BDM, the crew is picking up the pieces and getting on with life the best they can. Kaylee and Simon have a talk, Mal's having nightmares, and Jayne has breakfast. Then a distress call comes in from a ship in trouble...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2279    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer thingy: Firefly/Serenity are owned by other folks and not by me, though I appreciate being able to write some stuff purely for fun inspired by the Firefly 'Verse.

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Second instalment, encouraged by some real shiny feedback from you great folks who read my first fanfic posting. Hope you enjoy Part Two… If so, there’ll be more.

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Mal stepped off the rungs of the ladder onto the floor of his cabin. He slid his braces slowly off one shoulder, then the other; shucked his shirt up over his head and tossed it aside. Running water into the small metal basin, he washed his face then straightened up, towelling himself dry. His reflection in the mirror above the basin caught his eye: for a moment he looked at himself, expression impassive. That’s the problem with mirrors. They can only reflect back what’s put in front of them. And if what’s standing there is a mei yong-duh captain, the view ain’t gonna be an inspirational one. He gazed into his own eyes, noting the frown drawing down his brows. Didn’t mean to say what I did, how I did, to Kaylee. Didn’t mean to say as much as I did to Inara. Bad enough what happened, without I go spreading my discontent around to add to everyone’s load. He took a deep breath and turned away from the mirror. Quit whining, you sha gua, and do what needs to be done. Keep Serenity flying. Keep this crew together. Get some work organised and get folks busy. Don’t keep thinking about those we’ve left behind.

Mal stripped off his trousers and lay down on his bunk, switching off the light. His eyes were still open, looking up into the darkness. The coffee he’d drunk had left him wakeful, as he’d known it would. He lay for a long time listening to the sound of the ship: the low pulsing hum of Serenity’s engines as she cruised through space. He was tired, but sleep didn’t hold much allure. Too many times since Miranda, he’d woken f

Comments
Thursday, 20 December 2007 12:24
Oooh, I just hope that ship they are going to help is really just someone needing assistance and not a ruse to draw them close enough to attack or some such. Very glad that they are going to take it real slow, be cautious and ready to run if what appears to be the case ain't so. All the characters are well drawn and I am keeping my fingers crossed that the folks who end up needing Simon's help won't be our own shiny crew. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
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Thursday, 20 December 2007 12:31
I'm enjoying this quite alot. I like your style and pacing, and your dream sequence flowed nicely. Looking forward to reading more.

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Friday, 21 December 2007 03:03
This was really very good - the pacing and characterizations were perfect. Loved your Jayne as a self centered mercenary - just like the original!

Mal's dream was great and River's dialog was some of the best I've ever read. Glad Simon understood Mal could be crabby because of being worried, not because he enjoyed being angry. Looking forward to more.
Friday, 21 December 2007 03:15
This is shaping up to be all kinds of interesting.

Mal's guilt is settling in and Inara's recognition of his demeanor is apparent and sadly noted that she can’t do anything to help. You’ve really captured the tone of the situation post Miranda. And it is bleak.

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